My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.

Chapter 2 has been sent to Simon, so you should see it in the next update.

Greyscribbler

Quote from: greyscribbler on June 02, 2019, 04:29:03 pm

Quote from: Midori Konton on June 01, 2019, 04:48:39 pm

Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

Greyscribbler

Nah dude, its deserved. that build up was excellent, good pro level stuff. I believe the word is, exquisite. :p

Also quite artful how you described the protagonist in such a way as us dogs get the details we crave without turning off the ladies reading. I wouldn't even know where to start with doing that. 

Edit to add: My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.

Something I really enjoyed about Exposed is how it artfully plays with the old "a character stares into a mirror and describes herself" trope.

Quote from: Midori Konton on June 01, 2019, 04:48:39 pm

Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

Greyscribbler

Nah dude, its deserved. that build up was excellent, good pro level stuff. I believe the word is, exquisite. :p

Also quite artful how you described the protagonist in such a way as us dogs get the details we crave without turning off the ladies reading. I wouldn't even know where to start with doing that. 

Edit to add: My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.

Thanks for the review Merry, otherwise I wouldn't have even noticed the title...


"Exposed"  GreyScribbler please tell me I provided at least a tad of inspiration for this(assuming you even read my stuff) .. I am reading your story now and it is a mixture of sublime and superb. I was going to complain about how fast the narrative turns after her bra comes off but you return to it, noting clearly that the fetish is not just in the act of revealing but also in the appreciation of what is revealed (and not just by the viewer/reader). The delay (brought about through textured descriptions/ the narrative structure) mirrors the tease before the payoffs of the exposure. This is awesome so far.

Thanks for writing this.

Thanks ExtantElan.  Glad you enjoyed.  I can't say that there were any direct inspirations fir the story, but anything I've read will have been bubbling away.  It's always hard (or at least I find it is) in stories like this to get the balance right.  Too quick and the richness isnlt there, too slow and it becomes laboured.  Hopefully the balance is about right.

Greyscribbler

Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.