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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by greyscribbler on June 04, 2019, 04:02:44 pm »

Something I really enjoyed about Exposed is how it artfully plays with the old "a character stares into a mirror and describes herself" trope.


Thanks 321.  I'm fond of featuring mirrors in my stories.

Been enjoying Hostel.

Greyscribbler
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by greyscribbler on June 04, 2019, 03:59:50 pm »
My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.

Chapter 2 has been sent to Simon, so you should see it in the next update.

Greyscribbler
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by Akisa on June 03, 2019, 02:31:12 pm »

Dick Picture Perfect: I liked the story, although I expected something different. I was left with the desire that the element 'photo' was more exploited. And maybe it would have been satisfying to know why the photo exerted that attraction on the girls.

Thanks for reading. True, we don't know why the picture works, but I can't reveal all of the secrets on page one. We'll get there. With SCIENCE!!!!

(SCIENCE!!!! The narrative eureka version of discovery not, science, the ongoing rigorous one step back, two steps forward working version.)

Science! In this case good chapter Redsliver, I look forward to the next, luck!
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by 321 on June 02, 2019, 06:26:54 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

Greyscribbler

Nah dude, its deserved. that build up was excellent, good pro level stuff. I believe the word is, exquisite. :p

Also quite artful how you described the protagonist in such a way as us dogs get the details we crave without turning off the ladies reading. I wouldn't even know where to start with doing that.  :)

Edit to add: My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.

Something I really enjoyed about Exposed is how it artfully plays with the old "a character stares into a mirror and describes herself" trope.

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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by SB on June 02, 2019, 05:57:32 pm »

One Chance to Impress Her

OK, I roared with laughter at the ending! And no, I dont get the boot worship stuff, just saying. I had some fun with it, fem domme lovers will get far more, obviously.
Definitely enjoyed. Probably would have been low end, but for the ending!


Glad you had some fun though I'm not sure he did. This piece was written a while back and I'm almost certain I was responding to a post-hypnotic suggestion at the time but the details are sketchy to say the least. Thank you, dear.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by ExtantElan on June 02, 2019, 04:40:17 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

Greyscribbler

Nah dude, its deserved. that build up was excellent, good pro level stuff. I believe the word is, exquisite. :p

Also quite artful how you described the protagonist in such a way as us dogs get the details we crave without turning off the ladies reading. I wouldn't even know where to start with doing that.  :)

Edit to add: My guess would be the chicks resonate with the need, the fellas with the details. That's just my theory. Anyway, loved it, looking forward to chapter 2.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by greyscribbler on June 02, 2019, 04:29:03 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

Greyscribbler
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by greyscribbler on June 02, 2019, 04:24:20 pm »
Thanks for the review Merry, otherwise I wouldn't have even noticed the title...


"Exposed"  GreyScribbler please tell me I provided at least a tad of inspiration for this(assuming you even read my stuff) .. I am reading your story now and it is a mixture of sublime and superb. I was going to complain about how fast the narrative turns after her bra comes off but you return to it, noting clearly that the fetish is not just in the act of revealing but also in the appreciation of what is revealed (and not just by the viewer/reader). The delay (brought about through textured descriptions/ the narrative structure) mirrors the tease before the payoffs of the exposure. This is awesome so far.

Thanks for writing this.

Thanks ExtantElan.  Glad you enjoyed.  I can't say that there were any direct inspirations fir the story, but anything I've read will have been bubbling away.  It's always hard (or at least I find it is) in stories like this to get the balance right.  Too quick and the richness isnlt there, too slow and it becomes laboured.  Hopefully the balance is about right.

Greyscribbler
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by Redsliver on June 02, 2019, 02:29:46 pm »

Dick Picture Perfect: I liked the story, although I expected something different. I was left with the desire that the element 'photo' was more exploited. And maybe it would have been satisfying to know why the photo exerted that attraction on the girls.

Thanks for reading. True, we don't know why the picture works, but I can't reveal all of the secrets on page one. We'll get there. With SCIENCE!!!!

(SCIENCE!!!! The narrative eureka version of discovery not, science, the ongoing rigorous one step back, two steps forward working version.)
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Last post by Midori Konton on June 01, 2019, 04:48:39 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.
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