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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by 321 on December 21, 2019, 11:11:32 am »
More bottoms-up reviews (wait, that sounds wrong... anyway!)

Kallie's Subroutine sees our two protagonists on very different paths, one still trying to solve the mystery and escape slavery, and the other now sinking fully into her new life as a four-digit robot. And the number of robots continues to grow! I liked the dark turn here as
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, after being so eager to get to the bottom of things at the start of the story. Then again, she seems happier now...

Speaking of mysteries, there's more latex/robot/mind control fun going on inOut of Mind Control 2. The induction via smoke detector was creative and (quite possibly) a first for an EMCSA story? I enjoy stories with brainwashed moles and betrayal, so I'm looking forward to the next installment.

The Internship opens this week with a scene that reminds me of "Attack Angels," with a character brainwashing herself at home, after a long work day. Of course
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. Nichole certainly is a fast learner. I'm not sure how you'd put these skills on a resume, but then again, I get the feeling that her internship is going to end with a job offer she can't refuse.

Bob's on a roll in Flightback. A free upgrade, a hot flight attendant fawning over him, and then a chat about erotic mind control stories leads to sexy (dare I say romantic?) fun. And we haven't even reached Germany yet! MetaBob does a good job here with making us care about his characters, and wanting to know more about them. It'll be interesting to see where this plane goes.

More comic book fun awaits in Issue #3 of Cape City Chronicles! Our brainwashed heroine is just starting out on her new, re-aligned career path, while Lieutenant Alvarez continues to chip away at the case. If only she knew what was going on behind her back! This feels like a good setup for the next installment!

Meanwhile, poor Gene continues to juggle his girls in Blizzard. I love the character development here, as Gene and his girlfriends all struggle with their emotions and feelings. They all get some sage advice that could very well determine the outcome of the story. Also, they may want to think about cleaning those boots. They've gotten a lot of use lately!

(I still need to read through Black Swan and a few others before Simon's newest update hits today...)
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by 4064 on December 21, 2019, 10:53:22 am »
Quote from: MetaBob on December 15, 2019, 02:11:46 am
AnimeCon Harem (mc ma ft) (1 new chapter)  by FortySixtyFour
After getting dumped by his girlfriend, Brian attends an anime convention with a special amulet.

Superb. As always. Makes me wish I hadn't posted the first chapter of Flightback this week.

A little Horatio Alger thing going, which is a sweet surprise, and beyond Emily joining the party, which has been apparent to me for a while, I perceive a few author giveaways from upcoming chapters:
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My Chloe character in Senioritis is named for FortySixtyFour's in this piece, but flipping her script entirely, reclaiming the good in her name. It's also a well-deserved homage.

Haha, the other fiction I write possibly leans too hard into the Horatio Alger sorta thing. Thanks for reading, man! Very pleased that now at least one other person is willing to accept a redemption scenario for Chloe characters. I mean, I write her as a bit of a hate sink, but from some of the reader responses I've gotten you'd think she was an eldritch abomination intent on performing human sacrifices and hellbent on spreading misery and destruction at any cost.
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Quote from: nametag on December 15, 2019, 09:53:06 am
I really want the rest of the harem in anime con harem to come together, but at the same time I am loving the slow burn on this. My only complaint is the time between entries, but good things are worth waiting for.

nametag, you appear every single time I've made a post here. Really appreciate your support, MCstories was the first site I started writing fiction on and if not for the right kind words at just the right time I don't know that I'd have bothered to keep trying back when I was struggling to balance work and writing. Message me sometime when you're free, I'm interested in what you might think of some of the chapters I'm working on.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by connie k on December 21, 2019, 09:21:17 am »
Thank you, Shadra.

I will take a wild guess and say the stories diverge considerably in the end.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by neverm1nd on December 21, 2019, 05:57:50 am »
Thank you Zork, BethanyP and Shadra for you kind words. It's always great to hea that people enjoy my writing! Thank you especially Shara for your nuanced take on the later chapters and the new ending. I definitely see what you mean, and some of the points you raised were by design. The main plot is definitely done by chapter 6, and the rest of it is indulgence and fetish fodder. Your mileage may absolutely vary on that :)

And concerning what you said about the new ending:
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by MetaBob on December 21, 2019, 01:34:38 am »
Quote from: Shadra on December 20, 2019, 07:55:21 pm
Rounding out the week with Flightback, just before the next update. Knowing the inspiration for the story, it's nice to see the idea grow into a proper story. Not sure I would have the confidence to write anything with myself as the main character.

As I've mentioned to Mɛta, he has great skill with his writing that I admit I'm a bit envious of. The story is well written with a sweet opening scene with a cared focus on the induction. Those that like pleasant tales will definitely find something to enjoy in this.

Thank you, Shadra! I'm very happy to have received the inspiration for this piece on your (and Carefully Random's) Discord server!

And thank you to 321 (plus one other inspiration, who I wish I could recall) for the question there: "I'm curious, though, if anyone has ever written an EMCSA story about an EMCSA story writer"

I cited br0adband in reply. And Wiseguy. I even included a somewhat inevitable Wiseguy homage in my chapter 2. I felt honored to do so, and still do.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 14th 2019
« Last post by Shadra on December 20, 2019, 07:55:21 pm »
Rounding out the week with Flightback, just before the next update. Knowing the inspiration for the story, it's nice to see the idea grow into a proper story. Not sure I would have the confidence to write anything with myself as the main character.

As I've mentioned to Mɛta, he has great skill with his writing that I admit I'm a bit envious of. The story is well written with a sweet opening scene with a cared focus on the induction. Those that like pleasant tales will definitely find something to enjoy in this.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 7th 2019
« Last post by MCaesar on December 20, 2019, 07:49:32 pm »
A buzzer-beater for Day-Old Thoughts, and it's for Dead of Night.

Here's my progression going through this story.
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While the ending might not have floated my particular boat, overall I was pretty riveted. The characters all rang very clear, and the prose really flowed. I liked it almost as much as I liked Kat and Mouse, which I liked a lot, though I didn't finish it in time to give timely feedback. Both had me on the edge of my seat.

Since I mentioned Kat and Mouse, just wanted to say (again) that it was a phenomenal story. It felt super grounded and the tension was so thick it was actually nauseating for me at times. Which is a good thing, I think. Well done. I really want sequels where Kat and Marisa become consultants or PIs and solve mind control cases for the FBI, or something like that. That would be dope.

And speaking of both stories, the biggest issue I have with both of them is that both are very lacking in eroticism to me. Dead of Night moreso. The hypnosis rarely comes off as sexy, seductive, or titillating. It's a device that supports the plot and the tones of uncertainty and fear. Supports them very well, I'll readily admit. Even in Kat and Mouse, where the two characters have an erotic relationship with hypnosis to start, the plot twists and perverts it, and not in a fun way. Compelling, but not in the sexy way I come to this site for. It very well could be that forcing more erotic elements into either story would have compromised the overall vision, but I'd love to see one that includes them organically.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 7th 2019
« Last post by scifiscribbler on December 20, 2019, 07:31:27 am »
Quote from: MCaesar on December 20, 2019, 02:42:47 am

I think I can get behind that. Been reading some "battle-of-wits" and "cat-and-mouse" stories lately, and been trying to pick them apart, and the progression of enslavement and the struggle between controller and victim are often the big conflict there. The high stakes and uncertainty I've been slurping up with those have probably colored my view a bit.

But if you're saying what I think you are, I do think I've got a bit better of a handle on it now. :)

I mean, fair's fair, you may come out of Chapter Four with the same issue. I won't claim to be a perfect writer.
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 7th 2019
« Last post by MCaesar on December 20, 2019, 02:42:47 am »
Quote from: scifiscribbler on December 20, 2019, 01:40:51 am
Glad you're enjoying, if on a chilled out stroll-in-the-park level.

For what it's worth: For me, the journey in this story isn't Millie's. Which may be clear after the final chapter, or I may have missed my mark.

I think I can get behind that. Been reading some "battle-of-wits" and "cat-and-mouse" stories lately, and been trying to pick them apart, and the progression of enslavement and the struggle between controller and victim are often the big conflict there. The high stakes and uncertainty I've been slurping up with those have probably colored my view a bit.

But if you're saying what I think you are, I do think I've got a bit better of a handle on it now. :)
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2019 Update Archive / Re: New Releases - December 7th 2019
« Last post by scifiscribbler on December 20, 2019, 01:40:51 am »
Quote from: MCaesar on December 19, 2019, 11:10:56 pm
It's Day-Old Thoughts On Week-Old Stories! This time is Zack and Millie.

A pleasant little story. The "flash-present" sections (where events while Millie is in trance occur in italics) are a neat device. And the introduction of the shopkeeper character with some mysterious past with Zack has been an intriguing addition.

I am a little curious when it's going to... "kick in," so to speak. There's a sense that the plot is building toward something, but there's not really any sense of what that might be. Besides "now Millie is now completely enslaved." Just replace the words "personal assistant" with "slave" in her head, and you've basically done it. She hasn't really been fighting or resisting at all. There are piles of stories that consist of a single scene of enslavement, and I don't really miss it when it lacks dramatic tension or a deeper plot. As I said, this one has been pleasant, like a nice stroll in the park, but after 10k words, I'm hoping for a little more excitement. Or I'll adjust my expectations.

Glad you're enjoying, if on a chilled out stroll-in-the-park level.

For what it's worth: For me, the journey in this story isn't Millie's. Which may be clear after the final chapter, or I may have missed my mark.
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