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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #25 on: May 28, 2019, 05:11:18 pm »
Dick Picture Perfect

No, I've never had the delight of a dick pic in my life. Maybe because I'm not young, and attractive, or maybe because I just dont 'do' male jerks? OK, this has promise, as chaos threatens to explode here, for sure. I suspect his attitude to the girls is going to decide things for me, oh, and any pregnancy count! :laugh: Looking promising at present
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That's the first time I've heard dick pics called a delight. I may steal that. I'll promise you two things: exploding chaos and a 0 pregnancy count. I plan the story to last at most a month of in universe time and if there are pregnancies no one'll know. Glad you liked it.


I Have No Idea

Goes looking for my pretty mermaid outfit! :P Sort of chaotic, mixed up ended I was half expecting, and no, I have no idea if I got the whole story, in truth. Been a fun read, would have been better with less pregnancies, but thats just me!
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I'm happy to get it out of my system. Mermaid outifits are at The Globe and in The Dungeon, but if you want to bring them to The Waterfront or the big fountain on The Strip I think the rules allow it. Thanks for reading!
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The use of the word delight may have had a large element of sarcasm involved, just saying... :angel:
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #26 on: May 28, 2019, 10:49:51 pm »
More reviews!

This week's edition of 61 Days in River City is full of great twists and turns. Vicky and Sonia have planned for everything... haven't they? Well, they should probably practice their interrogation techniques a little more, but no one is perfect.

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whatlookslike's Thief is a fun story about a treasure hunter who comes across the wrong sort of trophy in her search for good loot. Loved the ending, as well as the subtle "Duck Tales" reference (although a touch more realistic, lol):
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #27 on: May 30, 2019, 10:11:00 am »
Batch 3

Deep Undercover

Those who loves undercover spy stories, go read this. Hey, just go read it anyway, its brilliant. But yes, if you can work out all the double dealing here, good luck to you! Yes, I'd love tom be brainwashed by Avery, no great shock!
Low end of much enjoyed. Hoping that someone might brainwash me here, Avery? Doubt he's interested in disabled 60 somethings, mind? :laugh:

Stop Watch

Did give this one more read, hoping it might not be as incestuous as I feared, but it is, so end of road. Liked the technique, but father/daughter incest is a big squick for me
No rating, obviously, taste reasons

Uplink

Talk about a few interesting twists and turns, this has plenty. Yes, the obvious happens in the end, but not in as straightforward a way as you might expect.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Whatever Gets You Through The Night

I dread to think what the film budget would be for this 'scene' lol. It is wonderfully done, and the baddies do end up getting their just desserts too, in a crazy set up. As for the ending, well that should add to the fun!
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Yew and Me

I loved the scene where they go after the new Mistress on the block. Its wonderfully done, delightfully thought through, and no innocent drone was hurt in the entry, great stuff. I have a feeling Karpova might be in for a surprise too. Shame, as I'd love my brain 'sorted out' by her droning method. Of course, I suspect things might get interesting on that front yet. Author does say she has something lined up for me, that might be fun!
Low end of much enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #28 on: May 30, 2019, 11:06:05 am »
Bind Date (mc mf fd) (new)  by ZTV25
Rick goes on a first date with a succubus.

A blind date with a succubus? Well, the conclusion to this might be clear! :D Anyway, this certainly came off as a rather lighthearted and ridiculous. It was an interesting juxtaposition to have traditionally "evil" beings just out for a date -- not the kind of switch I am ever opposed to, but it have might felt too much of a stretch the way it was done. This was perhaps related to this being the first part. The guy also came off as a genuine idiot at the end, too. Probably intentional, but given the mind control happening here, not sure how much sense it made. Ultimately did not grab me personally.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #29 on: May 30, 2019, 12:01:47 pm »

Yew and Me

I loved the scene where they go after the new Mistress on the block. Its wonderfully done, delightfully thought through, and no innocent drone was hurt in the entry, great stuff. I have a feeling Karpova might be in for a surprise too. Shame, as I'd love my brain 'sorted out' by her droning method. Of course, I suspect things might get interesting on that front yet. Author does say she has something lined up for me, that might be fun!
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #30 on: May 30, 2019, 07:03:11 pm »
Master Owner Daddy Me was insanely good. I loved it best of the three Obedience Virus stories I've read (btw, are there more apart from Limerick's three?). Lots of room for a sequel.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #31 on: May 31, 2019, 12:10:49 am »
Master Owner Daddy Me (mc mf md) (new)  by Limerick
Edward and Rose have to figure out their marriage now that Rose is unquestionably obedient to him.

I have to agree with 1zaza1, this is my favorite of Limerick's stories in this universe. I'm sure there are a few stories that have influenced Limerick in developing the Obedience Virus cycle, but I see these 3 stories as a) a natural development of his interest in virus stories in general ("The Virus" by The Joker is probably the ur-story for us here), b) a pure distillation of how dom-sub/man-woman dynamics usually work in his stories, and, probably most of all, c) products of his interest in experimentation to keep writing interesting. I think Limerick is still toying around a little here, but he definitely seems to have found his groove to the point that this feels like a "normal" Limerick story. Which means it's well written and hot throughout, and if you write, you'll spend half the story in awe of just how effortless he makes it all look.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #32 on: May 31, 2019, 09:47:13 am »
Its the one story I've got left to read this week, and yes, I'm looking forward to it
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #33 on: May 31, 2019, 03:12:45 pm »
It's funny how a work can be strictly formula and work really well.  "Master Owner Daddy Me" is basically the exact same story as "Everything's OK".  But it's just as good as the first one.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #34 on: May 31, 2019, 05:01:32 pm »
It's funny how a work can be strictly formula and work really well.  "Master Owner Daddy Me" is basically the exact same story as "Everything's OK".  But it's just as good as the first one.

It probably is, but thanks to fate, I was looking at it with a different brain set, so...

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Exposed

GS knows how to build a story in a delicious way, this is no exception to that rule. How far this build is going to go, who knows, but I'm looking forward to finding out
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Laser Tag Party

Maybe the game was a little too complex for my poor busted brain, or maybe there was so much trying to work out exactly what everyone else was up to here, or something else, but this chapter didnt really do anything for me. Thats not saying I wouldnt love to experience Adjustment, because I'd love to, but this chapter just missed for me.
Also getting the length markdown, so highly end of enjoyed, and that might be a notch high? But yes, I'd love to know how its done, and have it doone, so mustnt be mean!

Master Owner Daddy Me

OK, I'll admit it, it was different reading this idea for the first time since my brain went weird, even if it wasnt a virus in my case. I'll probably say more on that to the author directly, and then see how he wants to react. Its a great story, I loved Rose, and I liked the way for a while at least that Edward really didnt want to do anything to her. The rest of the story plays out really well too. Go read, if you havent
Definitely enjoyed, mark down for length, obviously

One Chance to Impress Her

OK, I roared with laughter at the ending! And no, I dont get the boot worship stuff, just saying. I had some fun with it, fem domme lovers will get far more, obviously.
Definitely enjoyed. Probably would have been low end, but for the ending!

Thats it for this batch, thanks as always to all the authors involved. I've no doubt I'm not going to enjoy the size of the next batch, but until then...have fun!
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #35 on: May 31, 2019, 05:41:07 pm »
Thanks for the review Merry, otherwise I wouldn't have even noticed the title...


"Exposed"  GreyScribbler please tell me I provided at least a tad of inspiration for this(assuming you even read my stuff) .. I am reading your story now and it is a mixture of sublime and superb. I was going to complain about how fast the narrative turns after her bra comes off but you return to it, noting clearly that the fetish is not just in the act of revealing but also in the appreciation of what is revealed (and not just by the viewer/reader). The delay (brought about through textured descriptions/ the narrative structure) mirrors the tease before the payoffs of the exposure. This is awesome so far.

Thanks for writing this.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #36 on: May 31, 2019, 11:09:43 pm »
It's funny how a work can be strictly formula and work really well.  "Master Owner Daddy Me" is basically the exact same story as "Everything's OK".  But it's just as good as the first one.

Thanks reviewers. I have another story done, e-mail me if you want it. The next one is a very straightforward bimbofication, no bells and whistles.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #37 on: June 01, 2019, 01:00:58 am »
Thanks reviewers. I have another story done, e-mail me if you want it. The next one is a very straightforward bimbofication, no bells and whistles.
Would you consider a sequel to Master Owner Daddy Me? I loved Edward and Rose's loving yet unequal relationship and Rose's slow burn downward spiral, though there was less Daddy action than what was on the tin. There are also some loose ends.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #38 on: June 01, 2019, 09:36:39 am »

Exposed

GS knows how to build a story in a delicious way, this is no exception to that rule. How far this build is going to go, who knows, but I'm looking forward to finding out
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Thats it for this batch, thanks as always to all the authors involved. I've no doubt I'm not going to enjoy the size of the next batch, but until then...have fun!

Thanks Merry, glad you enjoyed it.  As to the build, it's a three part story, which is short for me.

The next update?  I'm tipping 50+ entries.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #39 on: June 01, 2019, 10:45:53 am »
Congratulations dear. I'll look forward to the other 2 sections of this

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #40 on: June 01, 2019, 11:52:42 am »
due to my health problems.
sympathy and wishes for easing your issues with health that cause you such problems. May there be relief in your very near future.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #41 on: June 01, 2019, 11:59:36 am »
due to my health problems.
sympathy and wishes for easing your issues with health that cause you such problems. May there be relief in your very near future.

Thank you. Its only amusing for me around here that its my brain that is my issue, though not in a nice, mind controlled sense
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #42 on: June 01, 2019, 02:02:12 pm »
Thanks reviewers. I have another story done, e-mail me if you want it. The next one is a very straightforward bimbofication, no bells and whistles.
Would you consider a sequel to Master Owner Daddy Me?

I don't think direct sequels work in these kinds of stories. The girl is fully bimbo or slave or whatever, ergo, the story is done. So usually I do stories in the same universe with a new set of girls and maybe a guest cameo by a past character. 

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #43 on: June 01, 2019, 02:15:22 pm »
As for the loose end
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Actually I had an idea in this world, though not one I'd necessarily be interested in reading erotica of.  A woman who was scared of being turned into a brainless fuckdoll seeks out her closest gay friend.  Would that work?  Could he keep dominance and ownership of her non-sexually?  Or would any straight guy be able to rustle her away?  Fun thought experiment.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #44 on: June 01, 2019, 03:49:23 pm »
This week's edition of 61 Days in River City is full of great twists and turns. Vicky and Sonia have planned for everything... haven't they? Well, they should probably practice their interrogation techniques a little more, but no one is perfect.

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Thank you 321. I'm glad your still enjoying it and I hope you like the rest.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #45 on: June 01, 2019, 04:24:20 pm »

Dick Picture Perfect (mc mf ff) (new)  by Redsliver
Will sends a dick pic to a girl, knowing that she would hate it. But it turns out that every woman who sees that picture needs more of it.

In Your Memory (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Jukebox
Jessica has the very important differences between memory and truth explained to her.

Level Ten (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Pan
Lisas brother learns that shes extremely susceptible to being hypnotized. Can he resist the temptations this discovery offers?


I have not read much recently.

Dick Picture Perfect: I liked the story, although I expected something different. I was left with the desire that the element 'photo' was more exploited. And maybe it would have been satisfying to know why the photo exerted that attraction on the girls.

In Your Memory: This story is impressive. The transitions are pretty good. The story is not revolutionary, but the MC narrative style is very enjoyable.

Level Ten: I need to give a rereading to this story, when Pan uploads the next chapter. To have a better panorama of the events.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #46 on: June 01, 2019, 04:48:39 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #47 on: June 02, 2019, 02:29:46 pm »

Dick Picture Perfect: I liked the story, although I expected something different. I was left with the desire that the element 'photo' was more exploited. And maybe it would have been satisfying to know why the photo exerted that attraction on the girls.

Thanks for reading. True, we don't know why the picture works, but I can't reveal all of the secrets on page one. We'll get there. With SCIENCE!!!!

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #48 on: June 02, 2019, 04:24:20 pm »
Thanks for the review Merry, otherwise I wouldn't have even noticed the title...


"Exposed"  GreyScribbler please tell me I provided at least a tad of inspiration for this(assuming you even read my stuff) .. I am reading your story now and it is a mixture of sublime and superb. I was going to complain about how fast the narrative turns after her bra comes off but you return to it, noting clearly that the fetish is not just in the act of revealing but also in the appreciation of what is revealed (and not just by the viewer/reader). The delay (brought about through textured descriptions/ the narrative structure) mirrors the tease before the payoffs of the exposure. This is awesome so far.

Thanks for writing this.

Thanks ExtantElan.  Glad you enjoyed.  I can't say that there were any direct inspirations fir the story, but anything I've read will have been bubbling away.  It's always hard (or at least I find it is) in stories like this to get the balance right.  Too quick and the richness isnlt there, too slow and it becomes laboured.  Hopefully the balance is about right.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 25th 2019
« Reply #49 on: June 02, 2019, 04:29:03 pm »
Exposed was incredibly hot. I am VERY much looking forward to future chapters. Greyscribbler is an absolute master at depicting the mental state and internal struggle of mind-controlled characters, and this chapter showcases that.

Thanks Midori.  Not sure I deserve all the praise, but I'll take it. ;-)
I do like to write from the victim's point of view.  Doesn't work all the time, but it seems to here.

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