New Releases-March 2nd 2019

[ElmerFudd]

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Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate (mc mf ff md fd) (new)  by 321
While handling what seems to be a routine kidnapping case, a trio of sexy private investigators uncover a diabolical mind control conspiracy.

The Acts — The Shutdown (mc mf md) (new)  by TheHandsThatLead
Three friends flee north to escape the acts during the government shutdown, will they find their freedom?

And Your Little Dog, Too (mc mf ff fd be) (1 new chapter)  by Pan
The only thing Betsy hates more than her husband’s new workmate, Sue, is her pet.

The Bank (Roboman127) (mc ff rb) (1 new chapter)  by Roboman127
Robberies, kidnappings and Assassinations are being done by strange shiny black PVC women.  Two women going to the bank have their lives changed forever.

Bible Belt Redux (mc mf md in) (new)  by Pan
When Brodie flashes his ultra-religious sister, she is suddenly obsessed with his cock.

Brain Freeze (mc ff) (new)  by Jukebox
During a power outage, Quiana is visited by a lesbian neighbor bearing homemade ice cream.

But I Don’t Really Want This (mc mf md fd gr hm) (1 new chapter)  by Pomelo
Will and Nicole find their relationship changing again in at first subtle and then not-so-subtle ways.

Cascade Fire (mc mf fd la) (1 new chapter)  by MɛtaBob
Torn from his family, a man without a mind continues learning and sharing magic and more with beautiful women.

Christopher, Craig & Co. (mc mm) (1 new chapter)  by SoxnTies
The sequel to “Christopher & Craig” and “Campus Case Study”.

College Undercover (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Greyscribbler
Carol goes undercover to find out what happened to missing college girls.

Diversion Tactics (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Sinistra
Chloe knows Dr Mitchell only wants the best for her, but is changing her entire personality really necessary?

Dog’s Eye 2 (mc md hu) (new)  by J. Darksong
Another day in the life of Baby and her Master, as seen by the family pet, Finnegan.

Editing Reality Book One: Naughty Fantasies Created (mc mf gr in ts) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
Steve gets a phone app that lets him edit other people.

Emilia’s Exorcism (mc mf ff md fd ma bd ex) (1 new chapter)  by malsagulo
A deal with a tech-savvy witch unexpectedly gives a cranky young librarian the ability to tap into the mind of an insatiable slut. Plain, anti-social Emilia soon experiences levels of pleasure beyond her wildest dreams, thanks to a magical link with party girl and whore-for-fun Katya. But can she maintain control—or will she be consumed entirely by the sensual new world she’s discovered?

Field Test (BeaufitulFetish) (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by BeautifulFetish
Why is Carol tied to a chair, and what was in the water they are trying to force down her throat?

Following Her Dream (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Shadra
Janet takes the necessary steps towards obtaining her dream girl.

Help! I’m Trapped In A Romantic Visual Novel! (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by HypnoticHarlequin
After testing out a strange new VR game, Payton finds herself trapped in a visual novel centered around a very odd school. Can Payton escape with her mind intact?

I Have No Idea (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
Tanner wakes up from a blackout, and discovers that he started a billion dollar pharmaceutical company and created a slave paradise with a prototype mind control drug.

I Was Blackmailed (mc ff in) (1 new chapter)  by Princess Kay
A mixture of mind control and blackmail drives good girl Gloria into a loop of never ending sexual depravity. Will she come out of it with her mind or morals intact?

Is It Any Better? (mc mf md bd sf) (new)  by Eeka Somia
girl wakes up bound and naked. But the true nature of her plight is far, far worse than it first seems.

Little Pink Pills (mc mf ff fd) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Strange behaviour and unusual occurrences at the pharmaceutical company that April works for coincides with the arrival of a mysterious package full of little pink pills. Can April get to the bottom of what exactly the pills do without succumbing to their ever growing influence around her?

Magical Girl Syn (mc mf ff md gr) (1 new chapter)  by Jennifer Kohl
Cynthia’s magical powers are unlocked at the age of eighteen, but along with them comes a terrible curse. Wait a minute—is it really so terrible?

Making a Good Thing Better (mc mf ff md bd gr la) (1 new chapter)  by HB5211
Jeremy and Lara are a young married couple happy with each other, but always look for ways to improve their relationship. When they see an ad for a couples weekend promising a relationship enriching experience, they could not resist. The question remains, will they be able to handle the changes in store for them when the weekend is over.

The Morning Route (mc mf md) (new)  by Quiet Hypnotist
Finally a vacation! And then it’s a trip overseas! Okay, maybe there are strange herbs growing. And maybe the locals seem to have inexplicably naughty habits. But Valerie and Deborah would never be affected by that. Right?

Night Time Nudging (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
When a brother learns that his sister uses ASMR to sleep at night, an idea sparks in his head. What if he replaced the audio-files his sister listens to with hypnotic recordings?

Paragraphs (mc fd) (new)  by S. B.
All you have to do is read.

Resistance 2 (mc mf ff in gr) (1 new chapter)  by Rikimaru
Robert struggles to develop a cure for his infected family while trying to keep the Virus contained and concealed from the General’s forces and remain uninfected himself.

The Smell of the Greasepaint, the Roar of the Crowd (mc mf md ft) (new)  by Calico Jack
Mezmo the Clown recruits Cassie and her son to be assistants for a birthday party show.

Sorority Science Project (mc mf md gr) (new)  by doctorpluto
Wendy wakes up and goes to class, but she finds that everyone around campus has changed.

Spellthief Stolen (mc mf ff md fd) (2 new chapters)  by Meleva and Scalar Seventh
All she has to do is cross a garden, climb a tower, steal some spells, and get out. Just another job. Nothing simpler.

Stop Watch (mc mf md in ts) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A power that is too good to be true becomes a corrupting influence on a man and leads him into temptations he’d never thought possible.

Subliminal Toys (mc mf ff md in) (1 new chapter)  by controlthruhypno
A teenager discovers that his dead father had been using subliminals on his stepmother.

This Is Our Story (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Ice Bear
Connor, the editor-in-chief of the high school yearbook, discovers that edits he makes to the yearbook come true in real life.

The Triumphs of the Past (mc mf ma) (1 new chapter)  by Maximilian Cummings
The classic car that Eric obtains seems to have an effect on the women around or in it.

Uplink (mc ff mf ma sf) (1 new chapter)  by nevermind
The promised future has arrived. Mankind has outgrown old Terra and lives peacefully among the stars. But when junior engineer Kyra Warner of the TSS Argo picks up the wrong item from an alien planet, the rest of her crew must soon find out that not everything in this universe is willing to coexist.

Were-Tigress (mc mf fd gr) (1 new chapter)  by MɛtaBob
A family man learns magic, mostly the hard way.

The Youth of the Dark Lord (mc mf md ma hm) (1 new chapter)  by Jennifer Kohl
An apprentice magician has a plan for getting laid.

[Pan]

College Undercover (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Greyscribbler
Carol goes undercover to find out what happened to missing college girls.

Magnificent, as always.

Night Time Nudging (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
When a brother learns that his sister uses ASMR to sleep at night, an idea sparks in his head. What if he replaced the audio-files his sister listens to with hypnotic recordings?

"At the end of the day, it’d be me who Sammy would be pleasuring with her mouth.

Quite literally, in fact."

...what on earth is the non-literal meaning of that phrase?

This Is Our Story (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Ice Bear
Connor, the editor-in-chief of the high school yearbook, discovers that edits he makes to the yearbook come true in real life.

Of all Ice Bear's stories, this is probably the least hot and the most interesting. I'm reading not for the erotica (except for when he teases me with the step-sister), just because I want to see what happens next.

[Fortunato]

Calico Jack's The Smell of the Greasepaint, The Roar of the Crowds is a nice read for its fetish and humiliation content. I would support follow-up based on new victims in bizarre and embarrassing situations.

-Fortunato

Edited for typos.

[CerebusOne]

Some of the stories I managed to get in today:

Little Pink Pills by Carefully Random is very interesting though I'm not sure how it will really go and all that may be hidden underneath, which makes it all the better. I love layered stories and this one may be very much so that way. One of the many questions I have is who is really being controlled here, those who interact with the pill takers whose attraction becomes almost irresistible or the pill taker themselves? Or is it both, each in different ways.

There was a hint in this chapter that being a pill taker may not be as cut and dried as it first appeared, that something darker happens to them and their situation. If that is true this story is really nuanced. But I don't yet if I am correct in assessment or not. But I sure will keep reading and find out exactly what is up here. It really has my attention as something unusual and that is hard to find.

Scribblers College Undercover serves up his usual great writing in the continuation of the devolution of Carol, ex cop now whore. In this chapter we get a very well described up close and personal look of her double gilded cage, the one in her mind and the one she now lives in.

Finally 321 is back, so thankfully, with TV show Action Force: The Anchurian Candidate. Such a clever name for those who read it and see why. 321 hits all the tropes and marks of those 70s and 80s shows with her trio of hero's (female of course), the team, all of naturally with very diverse back grounds. The story itself is actually better than so many of those cheesy scripts back then. 321, where were you when they needed you?

The plot is of course well written and thought out, very absorbing: A famous actress is targeted for mind control to kill her senator lover to stop a summit meeting with the Russkies. The bad guy makes an attempt on her and things don't go quit as planned and a very interesting twist occurs instead. Fun and MC hi jinx then ensue in lovely fashion.

Tough girl Max's out of nowhere non sequitur "I think I love you," was just hot as fuck and was the erotic line and moment of the chapter.

Thanks for that, 321. And for the story. And now for a quick break from our sponsor.

My disappointment for the week? No Muscle Bimbo from Kallie again. I love that story. Here's to hoping for next week, Kallie.

[Merry Brooks]

Given it will be 24th of 26 for me to review here, let me say I have read Anchurian Candidate somewhere else, and lets just say its getting a good rating, and leave it at that

[Pan]

Night Time Nudging (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
When a brother learns that his sister uses ASMR to sleep at night, an idea sparks in his head. What if he replaced the audio-files his sister listens to with hypnotic recordings?

"At the end of the day, it’d be me who Sammy would be pleasuring with her mouth.

Quite literally, in fact."

...what on earth is the non-literal meaning of that phrase?

ohhhhh "at the end of the day" was the literal part. duhhhhh. 

[fumanchu]

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate (mc mf ff md fd) (new)  by 321
While handling what seems to be a routine kidnapping case, a trio of sexy private investigators uncover a diabolical mind control conspiracy.

So fun, so well executed.  The action sequences are as well executed as the MC ones, and the MC scenes are hot.

321 is the master of the post hypnotic trigger.

[gyrd]

"College Undercover" -- excellent as always.  Although one wonders where the story is going.  I guess there's the other shoe to drop when, as seems likely, someone from the mob world finds out about Carol's past life.

"Bible Belt Redux" -- why?  Still fantastic, of course.

I guess I am not as appreciative of great fiction as Pan because I want to see the protagonist of "This Is Our Story" control some minds, dammit!  The teacher, the crush, the hot mean girl...c'mon, buddy.

Disappointed no "Binding Rings" this week.

[Merry Brooks]

Getting started again

I Was Blackmailed

If it wasnt religion related, and incest, I could be absolutely loving this. Unfortunately both of those things are turn offs for me. I'm loving the tease from the sister, so almost inclined to get over that side of thing, but religion is a big turn off subject for me, though. Other than that, great story though
Definitely enjoyed

Is It Any Better?

Any story with 'death and destruction' as a major element like this one, is always going to be a big turn off for me. But fine the concept is quite something, and if you like dark and sinister, you'll get far more from this than I did.
I'm going to go no rating, on tastes, but if you like dark, you'll want to read this.

Magical Girl Syn

In answer to the author's query, I'd love to see more of Ruthie, but equally, as she says, if she feels the need, she'll demand it! Its a great, slightly crazy story that I'm addicted to, what more can I say? Author is a good writer, I guess?
High end of definitely enjoyed

Paragraphs

A novel way of writing a story I guess, and I could see why it was done, but fine, my arthritic wrists, and hands didnt enjoy all the extra scrolling involved because of that. Amusing piece of green fd though
Low end of definitely enjoyed (yes, first ever health markdown, lol)

Resistance 2

I dont think the Quarantine Zone is going to last much longer, judging by events! I'd love the body makeover, but I'd hate that sex drive, lol. Will Robert save the day, or eventually succumb as well, hmm?
Low end of definitely enjoyed

More to follow

[masterangel]

Think I forgot to submit my chapter this week. Guess that means one less story to read; but sorry if anyone was waiting for it.

[321]

Cerebus, Merry, fumanchu: I'm really glad that you liked "Action Force." Writing it was a lot of fun... like taking a trip back in time to a long-distant Saturday afternoon (has it really been that long?)

Also, a big thank you to everyone who offered comments and suggestions... the finished story is much, much better thanks to you!

[321]

Another fun week of stories!

Reading Jukebox's Brain Freeze in the middle of winter brought back memories of reading Redsliver's Blizzard in the summertime- a glimpse of future weather-related headaches, no doubt!    Loved the story, the characters, and the descriptive elements of the story.

Speaking of reminders, watching Carol go through her very careful motions in this week's College Undercover reminded me a bit of the ending (spoilers!) of The Stepford Wives, where all of the women/robots drift through the grocery store placidly, lost in a dream created by the programming in their minds. I'm not sure if Carol's going to be able to escape this any more than Stepford's Joanna was able to escape her creepy town. Not that Carol much wants to, I suspect. Or is that policewoman still hiding inside of her?

Shadra's Following Her Dream is back and man, what an exciting chapter! Janet undergoes quite a transformation between the first sentence of this chapter and the final one! There's a little rebellion brewing behind the scenes here, and I can't wait to see what happens next (and how)!

Magical Girl Syn is back as well with a short, but fun chapter that had me laughing several times. I absolutely love both the heroes and the villains in this story, and how they're all making small chess moves right now as they prepare for a bigger showdown.

S.B. delivers with a wonderful Choose-Your-Own-Mind-Control story in Paragraphs... except there's not much choosing going on here, is there? 

[fascinated]

I think Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate gets off to a terrific start. Aside from just being hypnotic AF and hot as hell, there's also the quality of the writing. See, maybe I'm attacking a sacred cow by saying this, but the Charlie's Angels episode "Attack Angels" (the most obvious influence on this story) is terribly written. This story has much better dialogue and grasp of character.

[Merry Brooks]

Part 2

Brain Freeze

Why dont I ever get an ice cream offer like this one? Seriously, is there a better way to be turned into a lesbian sex slave? Nice piece, and I do mean the story, not the ice cream, as I would have to try the latter to know!
High end of definitely enjoyed

But I Don’t Really Want This

Usual mix for me with this, some great moments, some that just leave me cold. I know I dont get the humiliation/exhibitionism stuff, so probably just me. Fascinated to see how this all plays out, mind
Low end of definitely enjoyed

Emilia’s Exorcism

Yes, it seems Emilia has got herself in a lot deeper (or is that a man's cock deeper into her?) than she might have planned. Definitely getting beyond the 'be careful what you wish for' stage at present. Fascinated to see whether she melds into Katya, or rescues herself, I know which my money is on. As for the last Siri moment, priceless!
Definitely enjoyed. Spell to turn me into a talented dancer, and I'll give more!

Field Test (BeaufitulFetish)

Part of me feels sorry for Carol, part of me wants to be as controlled as that, though ideally not for sex purposes. Certainly interested to see what is the next step that she will be taking. Now if they want to use that stuff to turn me into a mindlessly obedient robot...?
Definitely enjoyed. Nearly gave it high end, but Carol talked me out of it!

Stop Watch

OK, that was fun, and we're heading for a threesome I'd prefer to the one I was expecting it to be! The whole scene in Emily's house was amusing, to say the least. Clever story going down here.
High end of definitely enjoyed

More on Tuesday

[Shadra]

Shadra's Following Her Dream is back and man, what an exciting chapter! Janet undergoes quite a transformation between the first sentence of this chapter and the final one! There's a little rebellion brewing behind the scenes here, and I can't wait to see what happens next (and how)!

Thanks, as always, for the kind words. I had been looking forward to this point in the story for some time now, so I'm glad to finally have the opportunity to share.

I'll try to get the rest going when I can. I really hope the big reveal is satisfying... I'm kind of really worried it'll feel underwhelming =(

[greyscribbler]

College Undercover (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Greyscribbler
Carol goes undercover to find out what happened to missing college girls.

Magnificent, as always.

Thanks Pan. 

Greyscribbler

[greyscribbler]

Scribblers College Undercover serves up his usual great writing in the continuation of the devolution of Carol, ex cop now whore. In this chapter we get a very well described up close and personal look of her double gilded cage, the one in her mind and the one she now lives in.

Thanks CerebusOne.  The one she's living in is a very nice cage.  The door isn't even locked.

Greyscribbler

[Ice Bear]

This Is Our Story (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Ice Bear
Connor, the editor-in-chief of the high school yearbook, discovers that edits he makes to the yearbook come true in real life.

Of all Ice Bear's stories, this is probably the least hot and the most interesting. I'm reading not for the erotica (except for when he teases me with the step-sister), just because I want to see what happens next.

That is an amazing compliment. (I'll take it as such at least.) I loves me some superlatives.

[Merry Brooks]

You know I'm never reading for the erotica mind, and loving this too

Part 3

The Acts — The Shutdown

OK, fine, as a female submissive, I'd love that sort of processing. Not that anyone would really want me, but...I guess it depends how much cosmetic enhancement they can actually do? Oh fine, its dark, and might give some in power the wrong idea if they read it, but fine, I'd want to go to that lab to be processed!
High end of definitely enjoyed

Dog’s Eye 2

Mind, apart from being told by the pet, instead of 'Master', I suspect this might be closer to real life than some might think! I must admit, telling it from the pet POV makes for an interesting tail, sorry, tale. Definitely an amusing look at things
High end of definitely enjoyed

I Have No Idea

Fine, I admire Mel's attitude, if not her pregnancy. Loved the whole scene around the suit, at the club too. Oh fine, if I can have a no pregnancy clause in my contract, playing cosplay on that island would be a lot of fun.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Making a Good Thing Better

Fine, I have a soft spot for being bitten by a vampire, so its hard to hate this totally. Mind, changing me into a sexy young woman might be a challenge, even for them! Equally, I hate some of the humiliation stuff, but this one will get the author better marks than most, for the vampire thing. Dont know what I'll do if she ever writes a story where a middle aged lady gets turned into a chrome robot?
Definitely enjoyed

More to follow

[TheHandsThatLead]

The Acts — The Shutdown

OK, fine, as a female submissive, I'd love that sort of processing. Not that anyone would really want me, but...I guess it depends how much cosmetic enhancement they can actually do? Oh fine, its dark, and might give some in power the wrong idea if they read it, but fine, I'd want to go to that lab to be processed!
High end of definitely enjoyed

Thanks Merry, I'm sorry to say in this particular story the lab's limited to what is possible IRL with the exception of the implant of course

[greyscribbler]

"College Undercover" -- excellent as always.  Although one wonders where the story is going.  I guess there's the other shoe to drop when, as seems likely, someone from the mob world finds out about Carol's past life.

Thanks Gyrd.  Carol's situation is a little precarious.  Something has to give.

Greyscribbler

[greyscribbler]

Speaking of reminders, watching Carol go through her very careful motions in this week's College Undercover reminded me a bit of the ending (spoilers!) of The Stepford Wives, where all of the women/robots drift through the grocery store placidly, lost in a dream created by the programming in their minds. I'm not sure if Carol's going to be able to escape this any more than Stepford's Joanna was able to escape her creepy town. Not that Carol much wants to, I suspect. Or is that policewoman still hiding inside of her?

I hadn't thought of the parallel but I can see it. Carol doesn't seem to want to escape, but she hasn't been making a lot of choice son her own lately.

Greyscribbler

[Midori Konton]

Merry, 321, thanks for the kind words on MGS!

I was actually in the mood to read something new earlier this week, which doesn't happen often these days, so I gave College Undercover a try. Holy shit, that's good stuff.

[Svengli]

The Acts — The Shutdown (mc mf md) (new)  by TheHandsThatLead
Three friends flee north to escape the acts during the government shutdown, will they find their freedom?

I liked this story a lot. I enjoyed it more than earlier stories by the author. That might have to do with my particular perverse tastes but it could also be that the author is improving in leaps and bounds.

You could say dark, evil cabal stuff appeals to me or you could say dark, evil cabal stuff really, really appeals to me. Also, the story is excellent in it's simplicity.

[321]

I think Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate gets off to a terrific start. Aside from just being hypnotic AF and hot as hell, there's also the quality of the writing. See, maybe I'm attacking a sacred cow by saying this, but the Charlie's Angels episode "Attack Angels" (the most obvious influence on this story) is terribly written. This story has much better dialogue and grasp of character.

Thanks, fascinated!

I suppose that by the time "Attack Angels" was written, everyone was just going through the motions while updating their resumes. Although that still doesn't really explain Eric Braeden's odd line delivery...

[Redsliver]

I Have No Idea

Fine, I admire Mel's attitude, if not her pregnancy. Loved the whole scene around the suit, at the club too. Oh fine, if I can have a no pregnancy clause in my contract, playing cosplay on that island would be a lot of fun.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Yeah, I making the island positive, fun, and over the top was always important. The good news is, if you have a visit, the pregnancy thing was only for the executives, the girls and the guests weren't involved. Glad you liked it.

[mr potestas]

Emilia’s Exorcism (mc mf ff md fd ma bd ex) (1 new chapter)  by malsagulo
A deal with a tech-savvy witch unexpectedly gives a cranky young librarian the ability to tap into the mind of an insatiable slut. Plain, anti-social Emilia soon experiences levels of pleasure beyond her wildest dreams, thanks to a magical link with party girl and whore-for-fun Katya. But can she maintain control—or will she be consumed entirely by the sensual new world she’s discovered?

Katya is quite an interesting character. Clearly a nymphomaniac, but also a woman of principal! Making sure to use a whole pack of condoms to get their money's worth and to see if she could has that much sex was quite the line. This all continue to contrast perfectly with the bland Emilia. In some ways, things are done quite ironically here. Emilia seems a shell of a woman, yet she is the one magically inhabiting the mysterious yet full of life Katya. It all means something. That is one of the mysteries that effortlessly helps move this narrative along. Plus, though technically unsurprising, the twist at the end of this chap made this story just that much more captivating.

[TheHandsThatLead]

The Acts — The Shutdown (mc mf md) (new)  by TheHandsThatLead
Three friends flee north to escape the acts during the government shutdown, will they find their freedom?

I liked this story a lot. I enjoyed it more than earlier stories by the author. That might have to do with my particular perverse tastes but it could also be that the author is improving in leaps and bounds.

You could say dark, evil cabal stuff appeals to me or you could say dark, evil cabal stuff really, really appeals to me. Also, the story is excellent in it's simplicity.

Thanks Svengli, I'd don't think I'm improving that much so I'm going to go with the fact this one appeals to your tastes more than my others

Either way, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[mr potestas]

Brain Freeze (mc ff) (new)  by Jukebox
During a power outage, Quiana is visited by a lesbian neighbor bearing homemade ice cream.

Nice story, as it was well written. Great story to read in cold weather. I could almost feel that hot sticky weather radiate off the paragraphs! Oh, sure, there were no real surprises here, but this did not seem written with surprise in mind. A literally hot mind control story with ice cream was all this needed to be. Nefarious? Maybe, but the little debate added dimension to the story. Besides, it was a hot day, and the neighbor did make ice cream!

[Akisa]

Bible Belt Redux (mc mf md in) (new)    por Pan
[iWhen Brodie flashes his ultra-religious sister, she is suddenly obsessed with his cock.

The story seems good, but I think it would be good to see how it develops in the next chapter. Although I do not think that this related neither in narrative nor in positions, it reminds me of Saint Sylvie's Academy.

And I think that some components of that story could help the consistency and differentiation in the next chapters.

(Mmn, I correct myself. This would be the reissue of another story: 'Biblie Belt')

Brain Freeze (mc ff) (new)    por Jukebox
During a power outage, Quiana is visited by a lesbian neighbor bearing homemade ice cream.

Wonderful! Fairly entertaining.

The Smell of the Greasepaint, the Roar of the Crowd (nuevo mc md md md ft) (new)    de Calico Jack
Mezmo the Clown recruits Cassie and her son to be assistants for a birthday party show.

I really like the premise of the clown, it is very well characterized. And the story is enjoyable, if you do not mind the following points:

* The 'cruel' character wins.
* The narrative extols this cruelty.
* School bullying.
* Constant theme of humiliation.

Sorry but you are not allowed to view spoiler contents.

[Merry Brooks]

Part 4

Diversion Tactics

One of those weird things where I'd probably love being hypnotised like that, but at the same time, the humiliation factor is just a little bit too heavy for me? So though I find the concept hot, I end up feeling sorry for Chloe? Maybe its the whole audience thing, who knows?
Definitely enjoyed, definitely a compromise rating, that 'Mistress' might want to discuss with my mind?

Little Pink Pills

Fine, I'd love some of those pink pills at present, as I could sort out a couple of jerks annoying me in real life, with those. Then she can try the little silver pills on me, lol! Poor April, she could really do with a pink pill, or two just at the present moment. Really loving this so far.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Sorority Science Project

Another mixed feeling story. I love the concept of the Braindrain machine, but for all they're geeks, the guys arent seemingly likeable in the slightest! Some of the stuff is cleverly done, some I just hated.
So yes, again, I'll compromise. this time at low end of definitely enjoyed

Subliminal Toys

Story is cleverly done, but yes, the incest factor is always a put off for me, though I guess step mother is slightly less so? At the same time, if any man fancied controlling me like her, I'd love it to be done, neat method. And I know, its step sister too, so...
Low end of definitely enjoyed

More later

[Merry Brooks]

Part 5

The Morning Route

He can provide me with some of those herbs, but only if I'm going to get milked properly, moo! I always enjoy it when you dont necessarily see the controller plotting, as in this one, but fine, it was fun. I did work out they were eating the 'dangerous' herb, but beyond all that, a good fun story.
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Smell of the Greasepaint, the Roar of the Crowd

Another where I loved the process, but hated all the undeserved humiliation stuff. If it wasnt for that, I would have really enjoyed this, but that was a big downer for me. But other than that, the clown mc makeover sounds fun.
Low end of definitely enjoyed, a real compromise mark. Probably a bit on the kind side, given the humiliation, but I'll go with that. Undeserved humiliation lovers are going to like this far more than me

This Is Our Story

Fine, I felt so sorry for Connor, and fine for Hailey too. I know he tried to break it gently, but...So fine, maybe I wasnt too sorry at what Heather did to him! Great story, and looking forward eagerly to find out how this plays out
High end of definitely enjoyed

Uplink

Enjoying this one a lot too, though how much of that is the fact I'd like to be turned into a drone, but anyway... Will the inevitable happen, will Behlim save the day, who knows? Or will I be turned into a drone, and forced to give this really good marks, lol? Not that I'd mind, but... Who will be next?
High end of definitely enjoyed

Last 4 tomorrow

[malsagulo]

Plus, though technically unsurprising, the twist at the end of this chap made this story just that much more captivating.

Ah. Did you see it coming? Not that it matters, but I am always curious to see just how predictable my plots are.

[Merry Brooks]

And now, those final 4...

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate

I will say I have actually already the full 'script' of this elsewhere, and made suggestions about the Professor turning a more mature woman into a mindlessly obedient 'robot' for his harem, or otherwise, as I dont think I can play parts that young. So fine, the story is delicious, the brainwashing process sounds awesome, and something I'd definitely love used on me, acting, or for real! And yes, its captured its target perfectly, in more senses than one.
Low end of much enjoyed. Probably should have given it less, so the professor wants to capture, and convince me, but anyway...

Following Her Dream

My big issue with this is Janet isnt likeable, but compared to Violet... Its a cracking good game of chess, mind, though I do feel sorry for Rachel, all the same.
Definitely enjoyed

Help! I’m Trapped In A Romantic Visual Novel!

I've always wanted to experience the fully immersive VR thing, but maybe I'll pass on this game to do so? On the other hand, the method of brainwashing is quite delicious, so maybe I should? Certainly fascinated to see what the final outcome is here for Payton
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Triumphs of the Past

Maybe I should avoid any offers of car journey's with Max? Have to say that the stop with Jane, when they are on their way back is very good. You'd almost think the car was controlling matters, lol? I love max's style of writing, but not sure if thats just because of the Britishness of the situation, or the fact he's also a really good writer. Combination of both, I'm sure.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Thats it for this update, thanks as always to all authors in this update, reviewed or not

[Shadra]

Following Her Dream

My big issue with this is Janet isnt likeable, but compared to Violet... Its a cracking good game of chess, mind, though I do feel sorry for Rachel, all the same.
Definitely enjoyed

I find it interesting the different kind of responses I get for each character. I've had people rooting for Violet ever since she was introduced, as well as people seeming very relieved at the end of this recent chapter. I think the only unanimous opinions I get are people's sympathy for Rachel, and well... no one really talks about Snow =P

Im curious if you'd be willing to go into a bit more on your thoughts on Janet. I'd love to get your take on her, as I mostly have my own colored opinion, given I know where she goes in the next two chapters.

And of course, thanks for sticking with it =)

[Merry Brooks]

I think the reason no one comments about Snow is that she's very much a side character, compared to the other 3. I do feel sorry for her too, but she's been around less than Rachel, so my sympathy level isnt quite as high.

I could feel sorry for Janet, in the sense that I find Violet's humiliation of her a total turn off. But equally, all her non enslavement coherent thoughts only seem to relate to taking control back, and revenge if it happens, so she's not endearing herself to me. She needs to redeem herself, for me to care. But yes, she dropped herself in my bad books early on, with doing the dirty on Rachel, so would be hard work to do that

[grey_shadow]

I think Janet has realised that she made some real mistakes - not just security holes that let Violet usurp control, but things like not recognising or valuing Rachel's feelings. She's not in a position to redeem herself right now (at least not before the latest developments) but I'm optimistic that she will make better choices given teh opportunity.

And, yeah, Snow is being abused by Violet too, but not to the extent Janet and Rachel are, and we only see her in interactions with the other characters, rather than spending any time with her as POV, so sympathy for her is secondary to sympathy for the others. I wish her well, but I'm rooting for Janet, and if Janet pulls through, then Snow getting a better outcome is almost automatic.

[321]

And now, those final 4...

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate

I will say I have actually already the full 'script' of this elsewhere, and made suggestions about the Professor turning a more mature woman into a mindlessly obedient 'robot' for his harem, or otherwise, as I dont think I can play parts that young. So fine, the story is delicious, the brainwashing process sounds awesome, and something I'd definitely love used on me, acting, or for real! And yes, its captured its target perfectly, in more senses than one.
Low end of much enjoyed. Probably should have given it less, so the professor wants to capture, and convince me, but anyway...

Wow! I know it might be silly to say that I'm really honored, but wow, I am really honored! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it.

I'll have Doctor Franz send the van for you immediately. 

[Shadra]

Thank you for the responses. It's nice to get other opinions about the characters. Doing my best to untangle this messy knot of a chapter, and not take forever with it either, but I hope it ends up being both compelling and satisfying for everyone.

[Merry Brooks]

And now, those final 4...

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate

I will say I have actually already the full 'script' of this elsewhere, and made suggestions about the Professor turning a more mature woman into a mindlessly obedient 'robot' for his harem, or otherwise, as I dont think I can play parts that young. So fine, the story is delicious, the brainwashing process sounds awesome, and something I'd definitely love used on me, acting, or for real! And yes, its captured its target perfectly, in more senses than one.
Low end of much enjoyed. Probably should have given it less, so the professor wants to capture, and convince me, but anyway...

Wow! I know it might be silly to say that I'm really honored, but wow, I am really honored! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it.

I'll have Doctor Franz send the van for you immediately. 

Promises, promises. If he could arrange for me to be a fully talented musical chorus line dancer by next Friday, I'd be eternally grateful!

[SB]

Paragraphs

A novel way of writing a story I guess, and I could see why it was done, but fine, my arthritic wrists, and hands didnt enjoy all the extra scrolling involved because of that. Amusing piece of green fd though
Low end of definitely enjoyed (yes, first ever health markdown, lol)

Sorry about your arthitis and that it affected your enjoyment of the tale. Earlier this year, I wrote a piece entitled Lines as a part of my 55 words challenge that explores this concept on a much smaller scale obviously and then expanded it on this one. Truth be told, I believe I was in an altered state of mind when I devised this one but can't prove it because the details are vague at best. Thank you for taking the time to read and I hope the extra scrolling didn't hurt too much.

[SB]

S.B. delivers with a wonderful Choose-Your-Own-Mind-Control story in Paragraphs... except there's not much choosing going on here, is there? 

No, there really isn't as all paths lead the same way no matter what hence my description of it being a CYOA without the C. See the post above about how it came to be and thanks for the kind comment.