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New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« on: May 18, 2019, 01:30:44 pm »
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Algorithm (mc ff mf fd md) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Tiffany’s friends discover the mind blanking capabilities of an audio visual sensory input algorithm.  It isn’t long before they want to know how powerful the algorithm can be, but they will need test subjects: willing or otherwise…

All Bends to My Will (mc ff) (new)  by InLeaves
In a university where jocks reign supreme and bully the nerds in total impunity, Selina has it the worst of all. But then, a strange power starts to reverse the pecking order...

Ashes (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Blackie
The family raised him not to use his ability on those without the ability. The world isn’t supposed to know the family exists. Or families. When he uses it to defend himself and is seen without knowing who it was, his world turns upside down on him.

Bimbo or Billionaire: Custom Karma (mc mf md ma ft gr hm) (new)  by Master GEO
Rachel is a cute gold digger that has had a veritable goldmine dropped into her lap by very lucky circumstances! As her soon-to-be husband asked her to be in Bimbo or Billionaire, it was even more perfect as a friend of hers had gotten secret tech to restore her when it was all over! Super lucky! Surely it’s all coming up Rachel, right?

Binding Rings (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A chance discovery changes a young man’s life—and not always for the better.

Blizzard (mc mf ff) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
When Gene treats a strange visitor to better hospitality than she thinks she’s worth, she overcompensates him with three beautiful co-ed princesses. Auditors have been notified of the discrepancy.

Demon Wars (mc mf ff md fd in) (new)  by Chrysostomon
A mind-controlling demon and his sister are hunted by a team of Vatican agents.

Editing Reality Book Two: Sultry Fantasies Unleashed (mc mf gr in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
Steve gets a phone app that lets him edit other people.

An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement (mc ff mf md ft) (new)  by Mr. Scade
As Joan’s sister, Simmone, starts behaving mightily strange. Joan takes it upon herself to investigate why her sister is not participating in their sisterly activities. This decision takes her down a spiral of family secrets and enforced fetishism, as she slowly learns that someone has been in control of her family for a long time.

Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction (mc mf fd) (3 new chapters)  by S. B.
A collection of short writings focusing on various aspects of Femdom Mind Control.

Hostel (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by 321
Rebecca’s trip to Berlin takes an interesting turn.

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup (mc mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by AskJeeves
The CEO of a startup gives a compelling presentation to investors.

In the Beginning (mc mf md ma gr sf) (1 new chapter)  by CuyahogaKingKong
A girl living before the dawn of civilization has her life changed forever when she’s taken by a mysterious light in the sky.

Mad Monday (mc mf in) (2 new chapters)  by Pan
After swapping bodies with their teenage daughter, Andrew’s wife finds it hard to handle the hormones.

Magical Girl Syn (mc mf ff md gr) (1 new chapter)  by Jennifer Kohl
Cynthia’s magical powers are unlocked at the age of eighteen, but along with them comes a terrible curse. Wait a minute—is it really so terrible?

Muscle Bimbo (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Kallie
The nerdy, plain, shy Alex asks goth girl Winter out on a date, only to be told she’s not her type. But after that, Alex finds herself changing.

My New Salon (mc mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by Robert Towers
Madeleine is convinced by her roommate to try several new things.

Night Time Nudging (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
When a brother learns that his sister uses ASMR to sleep at night, an idea sparks in his head. What if he replaced the audio-files his sister listens to with hypnotic recordings?

Observer (mc ff mf md) (new)  by Quiet Hypnotist
Ayla is observing the pendulum. Ishana is observing Ayla. But who’s observing her?

Officer Friendly (mc mf ff in md) (new)  by Ice Bear
Detective Brindley becomes more and more obsessive in her investigation of a missing persons case involving Todd.

Paperback (mc mf ff ft) (2 new chapters)  by eviltwinmordred
An impressionable teenager finds an old mind-control fetish novel in a used book store.

Preparation (mc ff md) (new)  by MoldedMind
Alyssa’s boyfriend Bill likes to send her girls he has hypnotized and broken, as gifts. Alyssa wishes he would stop, yet she can’t seem to keep herself from being seduced time and time again. But is Bill really sending these gifts out of the goodness of his heart?

Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (2 new chapters)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

Religious Conversion (mc ff ma bd ds hm la ft) (new)  by J. F. Gargiulo
A pastor uses conversion therapy to control her daughter and a town’s women, but not everyone’s willing to submit...

Remind Me to Forget (mc ma) (new)  by Jukebox
Elaine programs her personal assistant service to program her.

Return of the Armored Warrior (mc ff md fd cb) (1 new chapter)  by J. Darksong
Erika Patrick, daughter of Tina Patrick, has moved to River City to make a new life for herself. She soon learns that things are a lot rougher in River City than back home in New York, but when Shining Paladin runs into trouble, she finds a mentor, someone who will take her under his wing, and together, they might not only rekindle an old legacy, they might even surpass it.

The Rose and the Frost (mc mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by Pan
A walk in the garden turns into so much more.

The Scent of Love (mc mm) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Brad, a nurse, is captivated by the smell of an unconscious patient, a John Doe.

61 Days in River City (mc mf cb) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
SureShot has a contract to kill Alicia. Sonia intends to stop him, even if she has to kill him, because she wants to kill Alicia herself. All the supers in River City are no help to Sonia at all.

Skeinbound (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Meleva
Three young women set out on a winter’s journey, to prove their new adulthood or perish in the process. One trying to keep them fed, one trying to keep them safe, and one who’ll try anything to keep them all together.

The Succubus’ Game (mc ff) (new)  by mr. potestas
A young Hunter agrees to play a Succubus’ game to save the woman this Demon possessed.

Tales of Hypnotopia: Holly’s Spa Vacation (mc mf md bd ft ex hm gr) (new)  by Daisy Isabella Britt de Melcker
The creepy guy at work tries to patch things up with Holly by giving her a free vacation to a suspiciously remote luxury spa.

Teacher (GiantNut) (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by GiantNut
A college student uses classified government information to reprogram his teacher.

Uplink (mc ff mf ma sf) (1 new chapter)  by nevermind
The promised future has arrived. Mankind has outgrown old Terra and lives peacefully among the stars. But when junior engineer Kyra Warner of the TSS Argo picks up the wrong item from an alien planet, the rest of her crew must soon find out that not everything in this universe is willing to coexist.

The Weaving Witch (mc ff) (new)  by Playright
A princess and her maid get lost in the woods and find more than she expects.

Were-Tigress (mc mf fd gr) (2 new chapters)  by MɛtaBob
A family man learns magic, mostly the hard way.

Whatever Gets You Through The Night (mc ma) (1 new chapter)  by T.MaskedWriter
A movie shoot in San Finzione is interrupted by a real-life murder.

Yew and Me (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Writer345
Lilith Yew, powerful leader of the Martian colonization movement, faces more threats to her efforts to establish human colonies on Mars.
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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #1 on: May 18, 2019, 01:34:23 pm »
eeeek am i a published writer now? :D
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I’m fairly confident she zapped me, or my brain at least, and those lights... those lights did -something-...
For now, I’m being ignored, still strapped naked and helpless to the chair as several men have joined the good doctor to look at whatever it is they’re looking at on that computer display, muttering to themselves and only occasionally glancing over at my as I’m trying avoid a panic attack.

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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #2 on: May 18, 2019, 02:41:48 pm »
eeeek am i a published writer now? :D

Congrats, Daisy!

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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #3 on: May 18, 2019, 02:45:05 pm »
It's Saturday. You know what that means? Why, another quality submission by 321, of course! Back at it with another delicious chapter of Hostel. The plot thickens, as we learn just what it is that's going on at this quaint inn in Berlin. As ever, the writing is of envious quality, hot as all hell, and 321 still manages it all at a pace that has me jealous. Maybe hold off on reading, because then you won't have to wait an entire week for the next chapter. Who am I kidding though, no one should wait for this.

After last week's cliffhanger of Carefully Random's The Mask, I'm sad to see the follow up not in this update. However, a new chapter of Algorithm is a more than suitable substitute. And what a chaoter this was, answering the questions left by its OWN cliffhanger! Such an exciting read, as we see just what Tiffany's plan was, and how it all plays out. And what, another cliffhanger? If I didn't know any better, I'd say Lucy was writing this story, with how cruel these waits are. Once again, another story that will make waiting an entire week seem unbearable.

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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #4 on: May 18, 2019, 03:10:15 pm »
Welcome, Daisy, to the Archive.  I’ve already commented and praised your Story, but I will say I enjoyed “Tales of Hypnotopia”.

My friend 321 brings us another spectacular chapter of “Hostel”. My favorite scene this week has Alice oh so casually telling two young ladies to just ignore her conversation with Rebecca.  It reminds me of Mr. Reardon telling Doreen to be “Quiet....please” in “Attack Angels”, the great “Charlie’s Angels “ episode.

The story is such a smorgasbord of Hypno tropes.  And I love how Rebecca says no no.....but not really.
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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #5 on: May 18, 2019, 03:48:52 pm »
321's Hostelstarts to really unwind for the reading, opening up the fuller picture of things and they are vast in scope and interest.

We find out that Emily is really seeing everything on her lone travel.

Rebecca is being 'recruited' for her hypnotic abilities by Alice. Somehow I don't think that decision is being left to her free will, even though Rebecca may think it is.

The huge scope of Alice's operation begins to take shape. She is an entrepreneur of the highest order, her slimy, greedy tentacles slithering out into so many people and venues.

And both Rebecca and Emily get introduced to 'acquaintances' of Alice, someone each has never 'met' before and find out they have doppelgangers of a sort for their best friends. Same names! Damn, what are the odds of that? That is a GREAT SCENE.

And..............we learn Rebecca hypnotized Emily back in college. Hmmmmm....somehow I don't think that was a flashback thrown in there just to fill the story with some words.

Mordred's Paperback continues on its exceptional course. Hot as hell mind control, gorgeous agents, intrigue, plot twists it has it all. And the lovely twinned double narrative making it two stories for the price of one!

Two chapter this week and lots going on. Stella is sent on a mission, one that directly conflicts with what her father did, as her dead mentor points out. But her control is so deep it matters not. Great stuff throwing that conflict in there. Stella and Laura come under suspicion because Stella did not clean up a bit of a mess as she should have, this time she listens to her old mentor. So some good remains in her.

Had to laugh at the narrator spending obscene money, he is filthy rich at that point, to find an old pilot of a show based on the book. Of course I have spent some pretty good money buying up old videos of MC shows and if I had his money there are some not on the market I would do the same thing for. Mordred once again so adeptly inside the head of an MC junkie.

That description of the girl who played Stella in the pilot, gorgeous but no actress, lol, yep, could be used to describe any of the pretty girls in those shows, such as Charlies Angels, which also gets a very apropos shout out in this chapter.

At the end, Stella is given another mission by Laura, a horrific one targeted right at her boss, the man trying to protect the world and his agents!! Cliffhanger.

In the next chapter, the last one of the story, sadly, Stella and Laura go to the Directors yacht to accomplish her programmed mission. And boy, what a surprise awaits her....and the reader! Never saw that one coming. Great job Mordred! And right when it looks like something really bad is about to happen, Stella's old mentor appears! Not really dead after all???

Also the narrator clues us in on his health not being so well. Why is this? What happened with him?

On the yacht some things happen that I admit surprise me. I didn't expect that story to go the way it did for reasons I had. I have to say I was very surprised in a good way at the bend PaperBack took.

Now the thing is this, it not only took a surprise turn for me in the comic, but also with the narrator, what he is, what has become of him, the price he paid to do so.

This story is not a gentle MC story in the end. It is all adult and can be viewed as the steep cost of doing MC business, both for the victims and the one doing the controlling. Playing with people's minds is a dark, evil path and the story reflects that both in comic and the narrator. Ones as great as this one are rare and so very special.

Thanks Mordred for doing this story, for all the reasons you know. You did it to perfection in saying what you intended all the while taking the reader on a wild, smashing ride.

I wish it could have gone on ten more chapters.


 
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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #6 on: May 18, 2019, 04:19:22 pm »
Thank you, Cerebus. 
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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #7 on: May 18, 2019, 04:23:01 pm »
Mordred,

Thank you. You're doing all the work, creating that very amazing, exceptional story, I am just having all the fun reading it.

Daisy,

I agree with Mordred. I thought  “Tales of Hypnotopia” was wickedly terrific story. Very well done!! Loved it.

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« Reply #8 on: May 18, 2019, 05:02:08 pm »
eeeek am i a published writer now? :D
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Weird, right? 
It's a good story.  Still super tempted to write a rebuttal piece of my own that imposes a happy ending on it though.  Which is a sign of quality, badly written downer stories don't effect me.
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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #9 on: May 18, 2019, 05:48:19 pm »
Daisy, I agree with Mordred. I thought  “Tales of Hypnotopia” was wickedly terrific story. Very well done!! Loved it.
Yay! Thank you! :D Also congrats on your 200th forum post! :D

eeeek am i a published writer now? :D ♥♥♥
Weird, right? 
It's a good story.  Still super tempted to write a rebuttal piece of my own that imposes a happy ending on it though.  Which is a sign of quality, badly written downer stories don't effect me.
Well, you can write an AU version of my fic. :3 Just let me read it when you're done~

I’m fairly confident she zapped me, or my brain at least, and those lights... those lights did -something-...
For now, I’m being ignored, still strapped naked and helpless to the chair as several men have joined the good doctor to look at whatever it is they’re looking at on that computer display, muttering to themselves and only occasionally glancing over at my as I’m trying avoid a panic attack.

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« Reply #10 on: May 18, 2019, 05:55:15 pm »
Ashes  Nailed it.  Not only some nice long chapters, but three of them right out of the gate?  Fantastic!

War is in the offing and I'm curious to see how it goes.  Great way to get the reader hooked!

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« Reply #11 on: May 18, 2019, 11:14:05 pm »
Yay! More Algorithm! And it was *nuclear* hot. Best chapter yet!
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #12 on: May 18, 2019, 11:30:57 pm »
Yay! More Algorithm! And it was *nuclear* hot. Best chapter yet!

Agreed! A hot merry-go-round of controlling and being controlled, of trigger phrases and trances and rapidly-shifting power dynamics... is Part 9 here yet?  :grin:

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Re: New Releases-May 18th 2019
« Reply #13 on: May 19, 2019, 01:32:58 am »
eeeek am i a published writer now? :D
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Well done, Daisy!  I remember the thrill that I got when my first story was posted...  Suddenly all of the blood, sweat and tears are worth it!
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #14 on: May 19, 2019, 04:12:38 am »
Officer Friendly was freaking awesome, perfectly paced and plotted.

I really wished that there had been some physical description of the ladies in the harem to the point of differentiating them, but given the PoV was another female I admit that my (personal) complaint is groundless... it wasn't that kind of story and I doubt I am the intended demo audience anyway. In fact I am surprised that I enjoyed it that much, a story of a woman's fall told through her perspective (I'm going to have to try telling a story like that).

This was great, thanks.



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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #15 on: May 19, 2019, 07:12:36 am »
After reading Master GEO's Bimbo or Billionaire: Custom Karma, I have to say that while I enjoyed the overall effect of Rachel becoming an anime-girl, I felt that there were too many changes involved that gave it an unfocused feel, like the author wanted to just throw every concept he had into one story instead of selecting a few to focus on here and keeping some others in reserve for a different story. That said, I really like the accent changes, the forced roleplay, and, oddly enough, Rei-Rei's new enthusiasm for socks which was completely unexpected. It's mostly a winner for me and it's a story I'll definitely reread.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #16 on: May 19, 2019, 08:57:40 am »
Completely forgot to mention Paperback previously, so let's go ahead and rectify that. What a wonderful conclusion to a great story. That twist, or really all the twists, were just so expertly delivered, and hot to boot. Really glad I gave this series a chance all those weeks ago, wouldn't change a thing about the story. Well... except maybe a request for more?

I read so very little while I was working on my own story. This unfortunately meant that I haven't kept up with any story by Mr. Scade. Reading An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement really has me regretting this. Reminds me of the wonderful stories from him that I used to read so many years ago. I'll have to find the time to go through anything I may have missed for sure. As for this story? Absolutely loved it, of course. When the main character investigates a bit too far into what her sister is up to, that scene and the resulting ones were just so delicious. Certainly a story I'll be reading each and every week is updated.

With so many great stories coming out, though, it seems my Saturdays are going to be almost entirely booked!

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #17 on: May 19, 2019, 11:34:49 am »
Getting started

Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction

Mindless Toy amused the old actress by far the most, probably for the obvious reasons. You Want Her has a few fun moments, but most not really my thing. First one has a relative issue, plus its by far the most sex related piece too.
Compromise? Definitely enjoyed. First gets more, other 2 less

Observer

OK, the end play was kind of neat, but other than that, its just fairly standard hypno stuff which is never going to excite me. Hypno fans will get more than me, mind
High end of enjoyed

Remind Me to Forget

Another hypno piece, but I have to admit to being amused by the way it all plays through the piece, very neatly done. The whole Alexa thing is a bit lost on me, but thats an age, and lifestyle thing, lets face it.
Low end of definitely enjoyed

61 Days in River City

Wasnt a lot here for me either, in truth. We are clearly beginning to get towards the big ending, in more senses than one, mind. I dont think River City will be sorry when these 2 get out of town, mind, lol.
Low end of definitely enjoyed

The Succubus’ Gamet

And quite a game it was too. As to what really happened there, who knows? Certainly makes a nice teaser for the main story, when released.
Definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #18 on: May 19, 2019, 11:57:03 am »
Yay! More Algorithm! And it was *nuclear* hot. Best chapter yet!

Agreed! A hot merry-go-round of controlling and being controlled, of trigger phrases and trances and rapidly-shifting power dynamics... is Part 9 here yet?  :grin:

I'll add another round of agreement to that.

At this point, it looks like all three of them have at least one other who has a trance trigger. Tiffany got out of the direct control, but seems to have forgotten that Lucy left a trigger command in her mind. Lucy now has two triggers in her, and Tiffany has a trigger for each of the others, but in theory whoever gets a chance to use their triggers privately first has the best chance to come on top (though while they're together, it's more of a Mexican standoff).

Plus whatever the note said.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #19 on: May 19, 2019, 12:44:02 pm »

The Succubus’ Game

And quite a game it was too. As to what really happened there, who knows? Certainly makes a nice teaser for the main story, when released.
Definitely enjoyed


Thanks for definitely enjoying! The fallibility of memory is a major theme of the upcoming story, so much so that neither version of events depicted in the teaser may be completely accurate. I plan to exacerbate that further by not looking to the teaser at all when finalizing the rather long Demon Lover over the next few days. Fun story to put together.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #20 on: May 19, 2019, 01:33:23 pm »
Completely forgot to mention Paperback previously, so let's go ahead and rectify that. What a wonderful conclusion to a great story. That twist, or really all the twists, were just so expertly delivered, and hot to boot. Really glad I gave this series a chance all those weeks ago, wouldn't change a thing about the story. Well... except maybe a request for more?

I read so very little while I was working on my own story. This unfortunately meant that I haven't kept up with any story by Mr. Scade. Reading An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement really has me regretting this. Reminds me of the wonderful stories from him that I used to read so many years ago. I'll have to find the time to go through anything I may have missed for sure. As for this story? Absolutely loved it, of course. When the main character investigates a bit too far into what her sister is up to, that scene and the resulting ones were just so delicious. Certainly a story I'll be reading each and every week is updated.

With so many great stories coming out, though, it seems my Saturdays are going to be almost entirely booked!

Thank you, Shadra.  This story was personal, something I really needed to say, even though it took time and effort.  I therefore doubt I will do a sequel.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #21 on: May 19, 2019, 07:22:24 pm »
Yay! More Algorithm! And it was *nuclear* hot. Best chapter yet!

Agreed! A hot merry-go-round of controlling and being controlled, of trigger phrases and trances and rapidly-shifting power dynamics... is Part 9 here yet?  :grin:

I'll add another round of agreement to that.

At this point, it looks like all three of them have at least one other who has a trance trigger. Tiffany got out of the direct control, but seems to have forgotten that Lucy left a trigger command in her mind. Lucy now has two triggers in her, and Tiffany has a trigger for each of the others, but in theory whoever gets a chance to use their triggers privately first has the best chance to come on top (though while they're together, it's more of a Mexican standoff).

Plus whatever the note said.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

Plus Tiffany will forget the whole night at midnight, she seems to have forgotten about that, too.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #22 on: May 19, 2019, 09:15:21 pm »
I'm trying to catch up on 2 weeks of reading. I'm still digging In the Beginning by CuyahogaKingKong. If you like slow builds, assholeish controllers, and plucky heroines who may or may not beat said assholeish controllers at their own game, this story is so, so worth it. I adore Ahn and am so rooting for her to become more than what her Master intends for her, but if she doesn't, I trust CKK's vision. Even if the story doesn't go where I really hope it will go based on the first 3 chapters, I trust that I'll still be a satisfied reader.

I'm also into a chapter of Ashes by Blackie. I know The Book is a classic of our genre and a favorite for good reason, but Blackie's 2019 output has hit me harder than The Book for reasons I can't quite explain. I'm digging what I've read of Ashes so far. Again, if you like slow builds, this may be a story for you. I'm willing to wait however many chapters it takes to get to the sexy bits (likely Chapter 3, given Simon's submission guidelines) because Blackie's nailing the characters and the narrative.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #23 on: May 20, 2019, 12:14:48 am »
I'm also into a chapter of Ashes by Blackie. I know The Book is a classic of our genre and a favorite for good reason, but Blackie's 2019 output has hit me harder than The Book for reasons I can't quite explain. I'm digging what I've read of Ashes so far. Again, if you like slow builds, this may be a story for you. I'm willing to wait however many chapters it takes to get to the sexy bits (likely Chapter 3, given Simon's submission guidelines) because Blackie's nailing the characters and the narrative.

Depends what you consider sexy. The presence of mind control becomes more overt, but there's nothing X-rated so far.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #24 on: May 20, 2019, 01:08:57 am »
Officer Friendly was freaking awesome, perfectly paced and plotted.

I really wished that there had been some physical description of the ladies in the harem to the point of differentiating them, but given the PoV was another female I admit that my (personal) complaint is groundless... it wasn't that kind of story and I doubt I am the intended demo audience anyway. In fact I am surprised that I enjoyed it that much, a story of a woman's fall told through her perspective (I'm going to have to try telling a story like that).

This was great, thanks.

Glad you enjoyed. This is indubitably a bit of hubris on my part; the amount of mail I get on the Friend Zone series is pretty heavy, and I return to them often enough that I sometimes forget to include descriptive details for folks who somehow don't have the myriad tales memorized. You're right that our protagonist didn't much care for that stuff anyway, but still, I get the impulse toward wanting visual clarity.

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« Reply #25 on: May 20, 2019, 08:49:29 am »
It's Saturday. You know what that means? Why, another quality submission by 321, of course! Back at it with another delicious chapter of Hostel. The plot thickens, as we learn just what it is that's going on at this quaint inn in Berlin. As ever, the writing is of envious quality, hot as all hell, and 321 still manages it all at a pace that has me jealous. Maybe hold off on reading, because then you won't have to wait an entire week for the next chapter. Who am I kidding though, no one should wait for this.

Thanks, Shadra! And thanks to fumanchu and CerebeusOne, as well. I'm really happy that you liked this chapter!

A special 'thank you' to Simon is in order as well. I didn't get back to civilization until 3 PM on Friday and Simon still managed to get this chapter into the update. How he works such magic, I'll never know, but it's wonderful!
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« Reply #26 on: May 20, 2019, 02:57:28 pm »
Im really suprised that you hate Elias.  He's not really been such an ass, has he? Smug maybe, and a shameless mansplainer. I mean he's not good (he really should have asked if Ahn wanted to go to a faraway land where he'd fix all her problems in exchange for her adoration), which is something I plan to drill into.

It might be a while though.  Psychologically I'm not in a place where I can keep writing something positive like this.  I'm going to try and plow through chapter 4, but I don't want to force it and how I feel right now might take it to a ugly place I don't want this one to go.
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« Reply #27 on: May 20, 2019, 03:24:15 pm »
I really liked the newest chapter of In the Beginning, and I never felt that Elias was being an asshole, especially when compared to some of the Controllers that stalk the corners of the Archive. In fact, I found the chapter rather sweet. He seems to genuinely care about Ahn, and his use of mind control is established as something that he knows is a dick move, and something he feels at least a bit guilty about. As far as non-consensual mc goes, you can hardly get any less evil in my opinion. Of course, it's still wrong -- we can't get around that -- but he's being as little an asshole as he could be without outright not controlling her. And at that point, it wouldn't be an MC story anymore.  ::)

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« Reply #28 on: May 20, 2019, 03:33:08 pm »
I really liked the newest chapter of In the Beginning, and I never felt that Elias was being an asshole, especially when compared to some of the Controllers that stalk the corners of the Archive. In fact, I found the chapter rather sweet. He seems to genuinely care about Ahn, and his use of mind control is established as something that he knows is a dick move, and something he feels at least a bit guilty about. As far as non-consensual mc goes, you can hardly get any less evil in my opinion. Of course, it's still wrong -- we can't get around that -- but he's being as little an asshole as he could be without outright not controlling her. And at that point, it wouldn't be an MC story anymore.  ::)

Well theoretically would it still be an MC story if he used his tech to cure Ahns crippling anxiety disorder in exchange for sex, as opposed to using it for that and to compel her into a submissive sexual role?
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #29 on: May 20, 2019, 04:31:02 pm »
As you see in a moment, I love Elias, and seriously, if he wants to transform me into a big boobed (seems to be his thing) version of the lady in my avatar (past life me), I'd be so grateful!

Part 2

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup

As entertaining, and as fun as ever. Oh goodness, would love a job there, if I was going to work again, believe me! This is just so beautifully put together, I must say.
High end of definitely enjoyed, unless Lavinia tells me to give more! :laugh:

In the Beginning

Huge fan of this too. Seriously, if Elias wants to give me a makeover, and then turn me into his slave, deal! Love this because everyone just cares so much for each other too
High end of definitely enjoyed. Almost gave more, but keeping scope for that, which it will probably get

Magical Girl Syn

As long as nothing nasty happens in the end to dear sweet Ruthie, I dont mind what chaos ensues before then. This is developing both delightfully, and intriguingly, as to who will win out, I must say
High end of definitely enjoyed

Preparation

And talking of authors whose stories I love, here's another one, with a delightful twist of sorts towards the end. Seriously, he could 'brainwash' me any time he wished. Delightfully done, just loved the ending
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Return of the Armored Warrior

Another entertaining chapter here, where things definitely dont all go to plans. Some fun ways of getting round problems, I must say
High end of definitely enjoyed

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« Reply #30 on: May 20, 2019, 04:36:31 pm »
As you see in a moment, I love Elias, and seriously, if he wants to transform me into a big boobed (seems to be his thing) version of the lady in my avatar (past life me), I'd be so grateful

If I ever get to the part where we meet the other brides, likely chapter 5 or 6, you'll see he is a man of wide ranging tastes.  Well in some areas.
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« Reply #31 on: May 20, 2019, 08:07:17 pm »
Thank you for the kind words, Merry! I’m enjoying keeping you guessing. ;) I’m writing the last few chapters now, and I hope you’ll still be guessing right up to the end. :)
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #32 on: May 21, 2019, 03:10:51 am »
I read so very little while I was working on my own story. This unfortunately meant that I haven't kept up with any story by Mr. Scade. Reading An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement really has me regretting this. Reminds me of the wonderful stories from him that I used to read so many years ago. I'll have to find the time to go through anything I may have missed for sure. As for this story? Absolutely loved it, of course. When the main character investigates a bit too far into what her sister is up to, that scene and the resulting ones were just so delicious. Certainly a story I'll be reading each and every week is updated.

 *squeals of joy* Thanks a world. Thanks a world.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #33 on: May 21, 2019, 04:44:40 pm »
Part 3

Algorithm

Talk about making things complicated here! But fine, I loved every minute of that, in truth. I cant see a truce arising here, but who wins out in end, who knows? Yes, I still want to be a victim of that device, so much
High end of definitely enjoyed

Blizzard

As entertaining as ever, if all a little complex for my poor busted brain, nowadays. Great story, and again, what relationship(s) come out of this, heaven knows? Great fun in interim, ignoring the sex bits, lol, I'm awkward that way! :laugh: Lovely feelgood story.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Hostel

Shame its only young, good looking girls that get all the interesting jobs via the hostel! :laugh: But yes, I'd love the brainwashing treatment at the end, regardless. Great story, highly recommended as a read. I suppose Alice might need an 'old administrator' to keep everything moving smoothly? ;)
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Whatever Gets You Through The Night

The delight of this is even the side characters (Oh, Nunzio...) are fun to read. As for the scene when Helen, and Mander get together, hilarious stuff. Tense ending, though instinct says Maria will survive, too big a character? Tank firing scene, oh dear!
High end of definitely enjoyed

Yew and Me

Well, this chapter livens things up in so many ways, especially at the end. Hopefully one of the 'Masters' is interested in mature British women to drone? Might have already caught a Russian eye, anyway? :laugh:
High end of definitely enjoyed

In truth, 3 of these could easily have got a higher mark, but I need to leave some scope, as they are running series. But I could tweak marks on those, with discussion? ;)

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #34 on: May 21, 2019, 04:57:28 pm »
Part 3

Yew and Me

Well, this chapter livens things up in so many ways, especially at the end. Hopefully one of the 'Masters' is interested in mature British women to drone? Might have already caught a Russian eye, anyway? :laugh:
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Thank you for you kind words, Merry, and I am glad that you are enjoying the romp across the Martian deserts (It's great having a whole planet to play on!)  I'd like to answer your second point but I can't without giving something away.

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« Reply #35 on: May 21, 2019, 04:59:11 pm »
Put it this way, Valsania had nothing to complain about in the reviews I gave for Yew! :angel:
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« Reply #36 on: May 21, 2019, 06:45:31 pm »
Hostel

Shame its only young, good looking girls that get all the interesting jobs via the hostel! :laugh: But yes, I'd love the brainwashing treatment at the end, regardless. Great story, highly recommended as a read. I suppose Alice might need an 'old administrator' to keep everything moving smoothly? ;)
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Trying to get a brainwashing operation off the ground while you're also running a hostel and a nightclub has to be exhausting work for one person! I'm sure that Alice would love to have you pitch in (I mean, the poor woman's still using file cabinets, for heaven's sake!)

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« Reply #37 on: May 21, 2019, 08:24:08 pm »
Blizzard is the perfect thing to read on this cold and snowy (yes, really!) afternoon. Oh, these two lines of dialogue warmed me more than any radiator!

“It’s hot. Don’t burn your tongue.”
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #38 on: May 22, 2019, 08:48:56 am »
I actually remember using filing cabinets in a couple of places I worked in the 1970's, one in term of stock levels (though no, the stock wasnt sexy young ladies :laugh:), and the other for purchase ledger follow up calls. I could just see Alice's entry for me, 'suitable for admin work only, do not send on sex duties', lol.

Funny thing is, I actually visited East Germany before the wall came down, but sadly I was never offered the chance to be thoroughly brainwashed while there!
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« Reply #39 on: May 22, 2019, 08:56:42 am »
I was never offered the chance to be thoroughly brainwashed while there!

That you recall =P

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #40 on: May 22, 2019, 09:01:15 am »
I was never offered the chance to be thoroughly brainwashed while there!

That you recall =P

It might be why I'm into all the numbers station stuff, I'm a sleeper spy! :grin:
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« Reply #41 on: May 22, 2019, 10:47:00 am »
I was never offered the chance to be thoroughly brainwashed while there!

That you recall =P

It might be why I'm into all the numbers station stuff, I'm a sleeper spy! :grin:

This one's for you, Merry, although you are probably aware of it (don't worry, it was one of ours)...

https://www.numbers-stations.com/e03/

It is also for anyone who was unaware of numbers stations and was confused by your reference....

(incidentally don't stop listening when the play bar gets to the end as there is much more of the transmission than a mere 4 and a bit minutes.)
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #42 on: May 22, 2019, 04:54:23 pm »
Oh yes, I love her, especially the increase in pitch at the end of each number group. She is my absolute favourite, I must say.

I have actually got a commission out for a piece relating to something similar to her, with S.B at present (was prepared to pay, but he said no, lovely man) which he will be doing in near future. This is because I have accepted I'm not going to be able to write anything lengthy any more, unless they can sort out my brain issues for me, which doesnt sound likely.

I'm hoping to get a couple of shortish anthology pieces done for the latest River City Anthology coming out in next few months, but then plan to officially retire from writing anything longer than 55 words. Garden visitors will understand the logic of that detail

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« Reply #43 on: May 22, 2019, 05:19:23 pm »
61 Days in River City

Wasnt a lot here for me either, in truth. We are clearly beginning to get towards the big ending, in more senses than one, mind. I dont think River City will be sorry when these 2 get out of town, mind, lol.
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« Reply #44 on: May 22, 2019, 06:42:00 pm »
Latest installment of Night Time Nudging sees more track placed down for the protagonist to expand his operation and a clear hint at a darker turn in the future; changing the tone from  playful, mildly perverse romp, in to a more exploitative narrative more in line with today's youth culture. I know in my story I lean more in to what's termed 'ENF' and far less severe sadism. Mindspark, however, doesn't seem to have any qualms stepping on characters to achieve a little degradation. This is why, despite the slowly changing tone, this is my favorite story here.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #45 on: May 23, 2019, 10:31:57 am »
Part 4

Binding Rings

My bind to this story ends here. The incest, the way Jason is now behaving, and everything else, not for me. So I stopped a short way into this chapter, due to all that.
No rating, obviously

An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement

Maybe someone needs to provide me with some of this lingerie, to spike up my sex life? :laugh: Probably doesnt help that its very rare I wear stockings, and I dont have a phone infatuation to help me get into this story. Its a well told story, and if you are into all that stocking fetish, you'll probably love it
But for my tastes, best I can do is low end of definitely enjoyed

Paperback

The ending is a bit of a mess for me, and the whole illness thing does nothing for me too. Fine, the director deserves what he gets, and Stella's ending is better than it looked like being, but anyway... Equally I love the whole Matrix/imprint thing, what can I say? But certainly more than a few interesting twists and turns at the end of this, thats for sure. So if I'm the lucky lady to become Stella, maybe we can discuss?
Definitely enjoyed, as a compromise

Uplink

Oh fine, this had just about everything this week, and I loved it. I'm assuming there must be at least one more chapter, due to the situation at the end? Hopefully Hera is looking for me, lol? Great stuff
High end of definitely enjoyed. Another that may well get more when matters are decided?

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« Reply #46 on: May 23, 2019, 01:20:35 pm »
Probably doesnt help that its very rare I wear stockings, and I dont have a phone infatuation to help me get into this story.

Maybe you just need some nice music to have a change in perspective? =D

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« Reply #47 on: May 23, 2019, 02:13:47 pm »
Part 4

Binding Rings

My bind to this story ends here. The incest, the way Jason is now behaving, and everything else, not for me. So I stopped a short way into this chapter, due to all that.
No rating, obviously

An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement

Maybe someone needs to provide me with some of this lingerie, to spike up my sex life? :laugh: Probably doesnt help that its very rare I wear stockings, and I dont have a phone infatuation to help me get into this story. Its a well told story, and if you are into all that stocking fetish, you'll probably love it
But for my tastes, best I can do is low end of definitely enjoyed

Paperback

The ending is a bit of a mess for me, and the whole illness thing does nothing for me too. Fine, the director deserves what he gets, and Stella's ending is better than it looked like being, but anyway... Equally I love the whole Matrix/imprint thing, what can I say? But certainly more than a few interesting twists and turns at the end of this, thats for sure. So if I'm the lucky lady to become Stella, maybe we can discuss?
Definitely enjoyed, as a compromise

Uplink

Oh fine, this had just about everything this week, and I loved it. I'm assuming there must be at least one more chapter, due to the situation at the end? Hopefully Hera is looking for me, lol? Great stuff
High end of definitely enjoyed. Another that may well get more when matters are decided?

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #48 on: May 23, 2019, 04:30:16 pm »
Probably doesnt help that its very rare I wear stockings, and I dont have a phone infatuation to help me get into this story.

Maybe you just need some nice music to have a change in perspective? =D

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #49 on: May 23, 2019, 05:37:02 pm »
I read the whole of Algorithm in one fell swoop and can happily echo what others have said before: This some of the most sizzling hot stuff I have read in while, especially this week's chapter.

One minor gripe I have is that everyone seems strangely laissez-faire about the whole mind control business and -- in the case of Erin and Lucy -- really eager to immediately abuse it. It made me feel like I had missed a chapter where it is explained why they aren't more shocked about the fact that such a thing exists and why they are so ready to turn (basically) evil. We get to see inside Tiffany's head, and know that she's a fetishist, so we get why she wants to act the way she does. But when Erin acts the same way, it seems kind of out of nowhere.

All that being said: Yes, it might feel a bit unmotivated, BUT the result is so, so hot that I don't care why Lucy suddenly became the angel of vengeance. I'm just glad that she is, becuase it means that the ensuing battle of wills has that much more heat and weight.

That was a bit ramble-y, I hope you get what I mean. Don't let the length of the criticism discourage you. I just had a hard time conveying my point with brevity. I'm really enjoying this story!

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #50 on: May 24, 2019, 05:09:18 am »
Blizzard

As entertaining as ever, if all a little complex for my poor busted brain, nowadays. Great story, and again, what relationship(s) come out of this, heaven knows? Great fun in interim, ignoring the sex bits, lol, I'm awkward that way! :laugh: Lovely feelgood story.
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Glad you liked it. Having a lot of fun with it. Hopefully I don't let the mcguffins get too involved but they are sexy boots.


Blizzard is the perfect thing to read on this cold and snowy (yes, really!) afternoon. Oh, these two lines of dialogue warmed me more than any radiator!

“It’s hot. Don’t burn your tongue.”
“Yeah, she’s got plans for it soon."

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #51 on: May 24, 2019, 12:57:38 pm »
Last 4

All Bends to My Will

One of those mixed feeling stories for me, and not just because of the before the change stuff. Lets face it, in the end, its nearly as hard to like Selina, lets face it. And yes, again, however nasty the jocks were, did they really deserve this? That, and the length issue. It doesnt help I dont get Anime in the slightest too!
High end of enjoyed, as good as it gets, with all that

Officer Friendly

Fine, it had a few moments, but this wasnt one of the authors stories aimed at me, lets face it?
No rating, taste issues. Fine if you like this sort of stuff, mind, as well written as ever with author

Tales of Hypnotopia: Holly’s Spa Vacation

Yes, another mixed feelings story, this seems packed with them. Holly wasnt nice, so I didnt care for her, but in truth, I'm not sure if any character in here was nice! Having said that, some of the transformation stuff done at the spa was hot for me, all the same. So I suspect I might enjoy a 'white' visit to said spa, lol, probably come out as a young chorus line dancer, or cute actress? But some of the things done to Holly, all the same, hmm...?
Compromise mark? Low end of definitely enjoyed? A white makeover at Spa, and I might reconsider? ;)

The Weaving Witch

OK, this was amusing, and I wonder what will happen to both girls, with the reveal at the end of this. Not that I blame Muriel, but besides all that...? Certainly an interesting way to set up the Princess for sure.
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Thats it for the standard part of this week, though there are a couple that, may, or may not get read yet, but if I do, I'll add them in. Thanks as always to all authors involved, reviewed or not.

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I was planning to get to the other 2 stories today, but then Ashes came up with another 25 K in words, so I decided it was easier to pass, however good it might all be, and given the author, it probably is, but I have some writing to attempt to do, and I'll need all the time I can find for that now, given my neural issues! I did start Bimbo or Billionaire: Custom Karma but in truth, however unlikeable Rachel is (and she really is), 3 sets of 4 way ties had me groaning, and bailing out, on grounds of ridiculousness. So that really is it, folks.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #52 on: May 24, 2019, 02:06:46 pm »
Interesting you didn't like Holly.  I only read the draft (decidedly not my thing) but Holly didn't really have any unlikable qualities.

My one note to Daisy was that Holly should be a bit less compliant and more feisty when she first arrives at the spa, so maybe there was a revision that made her a little less likable?
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #53 on: May 24, 2019, 02:24:20 pm »
It's been awhile since I read it, but I think it was the way she responded to the creeper at the beginning that doesn't exactly win her any sympathy points. Yes, he's a shitty person that should be fired, but the way she acted didn't do anything to get people on her side either.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #54 on: May 24, 2019, 02:52:49 pm »
It's been awhile since I read it, but I think it was the way she responded to the creeper at the beginning that doesn't exactly win her any sympathy points. Yes, he's a shitty person that should be fired, but the way she acted didn't do anything to get people on her side either.

Really?  To me it read as reasonable suspicion.  A complete 180 and extreme gesture out of the blue is a huge red flag.  He might as well have had "I have an ulterior motive" tattooed on his forehead.

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The thing is, the conspiracy is unnecessary.  The breast expansion and fat reducing tech alone would make them trillionaires.  That market is much wider and deeper than the buyer pool for secretly produced, expensively covered up, human fuck dolls.  That spa would be booked solid for the next 30 years at any price they chose to ask.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #55 on: May 24, 2019, 03:01:00 pm »
Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (2 new chapters)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

Things are still moving along here. Maybe getting a bit mushy, but I really like how Kacy's/Kitten's and Budda's relationship is evolving. Kacy and Bobbi's relationship is even hotter. They are really hot together, and the thought of Bobbi really joining them soon is really hot. Sure, Bobbi clearly did not expect the monster she released in Budda, but she also didn't expect liking it so so much! Messed up and wild story.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #56 on: May 24, 2019, 04:47:24 pm »
It's been awhile since I read it, but I think it was the way she responded to the creeper at the beginning that doesn't exactly win her any sympathy points. Yes, he's a shitty person that should be fired, but the way she acted didn't do anything to get people on her side either.

Yes, that is where she lost a lot of sympathy points for me, and also she was hardly a charmer at arrival at the spa, either, but that might just be all the work I've done in Customer Service not helping. Oh agreed, he's a nasty creep, but that was my whole point, apart from the girl on the reception desk at spa, name a character you could take any like to.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #57 on: May 24, 2019, 06:16:07 pm »
Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (2 new chapters)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

Things are still moving along here. Maybe getting a bit mushy, but I really like how Kacy's/Kitten's and Budda's relationship is evolving. Kacy and Bobbi's relationship is even hotter. They are really hot together, and the thought of Bobbi really joining them soon is really hot. Sure, Bobbi clearly did not expect the monster she released in Budda, but she also didn't expect liking it so so much! Messed up and wild story.
Thanks again for the input, glad you are liking my work so far. :p

Just a note taking this week off, so no new chapters but I'm glad you liked Kacy/Bobbi, as I felt that was the best stuff I've written in 10+ years (not that I've been writing all that time, just its been that long since my creative writing courses.) Had you asked me before, I would have said a 1000+ word sex scene was excessive but I think I pulled it off (I know I like reading it). If you've read MindSpark's (very good) Night Time Nudging you'll note its pretty clear why I don't consider Bubba to be the true antagonist of my story. That honor goes to my hot little pancake princess. :P. It will soon be time for her to take center stage in the latter part of the narrative.

And thanks again for the kind words, it is greatly appreciated.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #58 on: May 24, 2019, 07:35:26 pm »
I love how 61 Days in River City is steaming towards a conclusion. Finally, after all that Sonia and Vicky have been through! It's been a long seven weeks for those two.

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #59 on: May 25, 2019, 04:19:58 pm »
Sadly, I’m late to the “Algorithm” Show.  I’m now caught up, and it is every bit as good as my friends Shadra and 321 said it was.  So many twists, so many temporary victories and defeats.
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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #60 on: May 25, 2019, 06:38:46 pm »
After last week's cliffhanger of Carefully Random's The Mask, I'm sad to see the follow up not in this update. However, a new chapter of Algorithm is a more than suitable substitute. And what a chaoter this was, answering the questions left by its OWN cliffhanger! Such an exciting read, as we see just what Tiffany's plan was, and how it all plays out. And what, another cliffhanger? If I didn't know any better, I'd say Lucy was writing this story, with how cruel these waits are. Once again, another story that will make waiting an entire week seem unbearable.

Yes, I am fond of cliffhangers, and I'll tell you why... later.

Thanks, and sorry for the wait, life gets in the way of the writing sometimes :s

Yay! More Algorithm! And it was *nuclear* hot. Best chapter yet!

Agreed! A hot merry-go-round of controlling and being controlled, of trigger phrases and trances and rapidly-shifting power dynamics... is Part 9 here yet?  :grin:

I'll add another round of agreement to that.

At this point, it looks like all three of them have at least one other who has a trance trigger. Tiffany got out of the direct control, but seems to have forgotten that Lucy left a trigger command in her mind. Lucy now has two triggers in her, and Tiffany has a trigger for each of the others, but in theory whoever gets a chance to use their triggers privately first has the best chance to come on top (though while they're together, it's more of a Mexican standoff).

Plus whatever the note said.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

Plus Tiffany will forget the whole night at midnight, she seems to have forgotten about that, too.

Thanks all for lovely feedback.  I'm glad everyone is keeping up, I just hope I don't start to lose track myself! O_o

Certainly Tiffany has (thus far at least) managed to forget a couple of mildly important details, but we all lose focus a bit due to mind blowing orgasms sometimes, right? :D

Part 3

Algorithm

Talk about making things complicated here! But fine, I loved every minute of that, in truth. I cant see a truce arising here, but who wins out in end, who knows? Yes, I still want to be a victim of that device, so much
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Thanks Merry! Choose your controller wisely though, they don't all come with the same disposition...

I read the whole of Algorithm in one fell swoop and can happily echo what others have said before: This some of the most sizzling hot stuff I have read in while, especially this week's chapter.

One minor gripe I have is that everyone seems strangely laissez-faire about the whole mind control business and -- in the case of Erin and Lucy -- really eager to immediately abuse it. It made me feel like I had missed a chapter where it is explained why they aren't more shocked about the fact that such a thing exists and why they are so ready to turn (basically) evil. We get to see inside Tiffany's head, and know that she's a fetishist, so we get why she wants to act the way she does. But when Erin acts the same way, it seems kind of out of nowhere.

All that being said: Yes, it might feel a bit unmotivated, BUT the result is so, so hot that I don't care why Lucy suddenly became the angel of vengeance. I'm just glad that she is, becuase it means that the ensuing battle of wills has that much more heat and weight.

That was a bit ramble-y, I hope you get what I mean. Don't let the length of the criticism discourage you. I just had a hard time conveying my point with brevity. I'm really enjoying this story!

Thank you, neverm1nd :) I am going to fight the temptation to explain the motivations of each character here as I hope to have shown why each one is the way they are by the time the story rounds up.  Certain things now will hopefully make more sense, and certain things mentioned in previous chapters will tie in with the additional context, all going to plan.  Most of all I'm glad you're enjoying it! :)

Sadly, I’m late to the “Algorithm” Show.  I’m now caught up, and it is every bit as good as my friends Shadra and 321 said it was.  So many twists, so many temporary victories and defeats.

Not late at all really, welcome aboard! And thank you! :D  Part 9 on the way! :)

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Re: New Releases-Saturday May 18th 2019
« Reply #61 on: May 25, 2019, 06:59:09 pm »
Whatever Gets You Through The Night

The delight of this is even the side characters (Oh, Nunzio...) are fun to read. As for the scene when Helen, and Mander get together, hilarious stuff. Tense ending, though instinct says Maria will survive, too big a character? Tank firing scene, oh dear!
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On Literotica, the subtitle of the chapter after this is "Maria Gets Tanked."

And thanks, I'm pretty sure Nunzio will be back.  People seem to like him.
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« Reply #62 on: May 26, 2019, 07:55:22 pm »
Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (2 new chapters)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

Things are still moving along here. Maybe getting a bit mushy, but I really like how Kacy's/Kitten's and Budda's relationship is evolving. Kacy and Bobbi's relationship is even hotter. They are really hot together, and the thought of Bobbi really joining them soon is really hot. Sure, Bobbi clearly did not expect the monster she released in Budda, but she also didn't expect liking it so so much! Messed up and wild story.
Thanks again for the input, glad you are liking my work so far. :p

Just a note taking this week off, so no new chapters but I'm glad you liked Kacy/Bobbi, as I felt that was the best stuff I've written in 10+ years (not that I've been writing all that time, just its been that long since my creative writing courses.) Had you asked me before, I would have said a 1000+ word sex scene was excessive but I think I pulled it off (I know I like reading it). If you've read MindSpark's (very good) Night Time Nudging you'll note its pretty clear why I don't consider Bubba to be the true antagonist of my story. That honor goes to my hot little pancake princess. :P. It will soon be time for her to take center stage in the latter part of the narrative.

And thanks again for the kind words, it is greatly appreciated.

Oh, I agree! You don't always need that many words for a sex scene, but it's whatever feels right for the story. I didn't even notice that it was that long in your story. It worked fine :)