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« Reply #600 on: January 30, 2005, 05:23:54 PM »

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Elle and Vee and Exx
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"I won't help you anymore. This has to stop." Her voice strained. She scanned the caller id panel of the speakerphone as silent text scrolled by.

How trite. We've been over this. 'I'll never get away with this?' I obviously am.

"I know you don't want--"

Data squirt. Drunk.

She hiccupped. Her hands clenched. "No, let me finish. I'm sure--"

Data squirt. Hot.

Her hand went to her mouth as she hiccupped. "Bastard! If I can figure it out--"

Data squirt. Horny.

Tears edged at the corners of her eyes. She hiccupped. Small sips of air were all she could get. The hot numbness raced through all of her and made it hard to focus. She leaned closer to the phone display. Hiccupped.

Data squirt. Relax. Pretend everything is normal. Pretend the project is your own idea. Look down.

She glanced down. Mindless fingers fondled and tugged at her breasts; just the way she liked. The room spun. She was fucking wet. "You need my skill and the data. Don't, please don't. I'm no good to you as a dumb pair of hands."

Data squirt. Smile. Nipple sex. Don't make me angry. Make me happy.

Her mouth smiled. Treacherous hands pulled pleasure into her hot nipples. She squirmed and groaned.

Data squirt. Drunk. Happy nipples.

"Happy nipples," she groaned.

Data squirt. Come. Then get back to work.

"Wah," she moaned, jiggling in place. The orgasm ran through her twice. Then she put the smile back in place. Make him happy. Think of a way out. She shivered and went back to work.


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« Reply #601 on: January 30, 2005, 05:31:08 PM »

Now THAT rocks. With all the Elles and Vees and Exxes and Ems this is like the corner of Sesame Street and Times Square.  Cheesy

I love how you really can make it hot in so few words. I manage to only hint at hotness to come ... no pun intended.
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« Reply #602 on: January 30, 2005, 05:40:13 PM »

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Data squirt. Drunk. Happy nipples.

"Happy nipples," she groaned.

I want to go on record here as being the first to suggest that "Happy Nipples" would be a GREAT name for a rock band  Cheesy

---hot stuff!!!---

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« Reply #603 on: January 30, 2005, 06:04:52 PM »

Misspoken

"What are you doing?"

"I'm taking off my pants, of course."

"To do what, I might ask?"

"Why, to fuck you, honey."

"Just like that, huh?  What if I don't want to fuck?"

"But you just told me to."

"What?"

"You said, 'fuck me'."

"Ohh.  No, you silly goose -- I said 'fuck me.'  I just finally got the riddle in today's paper, and it was so obvious that, you know, I just said..."

"So you don't want me to fuck you?"

"No dear, I just wasn't thinking.  Sorry.  And, oh yeah -- happy nipples."

"Umm... What are my pants doing around my ankles?"

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« Reply #604 on: January 30, 2005, 06:56:12 PM »

Now THAT rocks. With all the Elles and Vees and Exxes and Ems this is like the corner of Sesame Street and Times Square. 
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Funny, I was just writing the wrap-up in a Park Avenue hotel penthouse.
We may be on the same wavelength, M.

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« Reply #605 on: January 30, 2005, 09:19:51 PM »

... this is like the corner of Sesame Street and Times Square.

Inspiration ^
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Puppet Show
Probably the most disturbing thing ever written by William Pratt

"And today's Sesame Street has been brought to you by the letters M and C and the number 69."

"Ohhhh Oscar! Why have you been hiding this all these years?"

"Stop talking and get back to work Maria. Before I get grouchy."
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« Reply #606 on: January 30, 2005, 11:45:20 PM »

Eye -- I see my favorite word 'Prologue' , so I will be expecting more of the same.

Michelle -- I have to agree with WZB... now, that's a first line!

------ And now for my continuing flash series on The Institute ---

Institute 1 -- How To Tell Her
Institute 2 -- Why Not To Tell Her
Institute 3 -- When To Tell Her
Institute 4 (pending) -- What To Tell Her


The reason for the 'further details' is jumps in the Institute's world timeline.

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When To Tell her
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"You can tell me about it," I said.

"No secrets, huh?" Elizabeth replied putting the menu down.

"Empathics have to guess what feelings mean," I reminded her.

"So what do you think my feelings mean?" she asked.

"You feel anxiety whenever you’re near me," I said. "It started a couple of weeks ago. I would guess it has something to do with me being EMC-POS."

"Not everything has to do with your Institute profile," she said dismissively. "This is a relationship thing."

"I don't understand," I replied.

"I don't need to be empathic to know when you aren't telling me something, Joseph," she said.

I tapped the table with two fingers. She cringed, along with everyone in the area. I closed my eyes and reined in my emotions. I opened them and saw that my watchers had stepped forward to stare down anyone taking too much interest in me.

"An interesting mix of feelings that you projected," she said shaking her head to clear it. "It's unfortunate that Healers are a combination of the most powerful projectives with the least control over their abilities."

"My Institute contract has been... bought," I said.

"Bought?" she asked raising her voice. "The Institute contract does not make you a commodity to be bought and sold!"

"Every Positive is a slave to the survival of our species," I recited.

"Institute propaganda," she said dismissing it with wave.

"Really?" I asked coldly.

"No," she replied. "But I'm a woman whose man is keeping secrets."

"Being allowed to buy a Healer contract is a large enough favor that the Euro-Institute had to accept David’s proposed merger," I told her.

"I had to get involved with the only EMC-POS that can, at will, heal a person's sex drive," she said studying me.

"I'm used more effectively in a hotel full of couples, but the hope of a cure IS useful propaganda,” I said. “Symbolics are still our best chance for a permanent solution though.”

"So when did you plan to tell me that you're leaving?" she asked.

"I've Healed you," I told her.

"Without asking me!" she said sitting up.

"I don't have to ask," I said in a hard voice. The Institute brooked no challenge to that.

"You violated the Lottery," she insisted. "The Institute only allows one Heal a week because of its affects on you! One couple every two weeks, Joseph; that’s the Lottery!"

"Read the fine print," I said. "I decide!"

She sat back and stared at me.

"Why did you decide I needed Healing then?" she asked.

"I'm being based out of the Euro headquarters," I said. "I wanted to leave you able to have everything you wanted."

"What's the use of Healing me when only Positives, someone a Symbolic has been in love with, and those you've Healed have normal sex drives?" she asked.

"The most recent test identified another Healer," I said. "The Institute has agreed to a Healing for the man of your choice."

I looked out the window when something hit me.

"You said Healers, why?" I asked. "The discovery of a new Healer hasn’t been announced yet."

She smiled and shook her head at me. The wave of her satisfaction struck me, putting me on alert. Next to David, Elizabeth was the most focused person I knew.

She reached out to turn my hand over. Her fingers lightly ran circles on the inside of my wrist and down to the palm of my hand.

Technically, a Healer is not a more powerful projector than a normal Empathic, but our gift of absorbing and healing physical damage means that we have a heightened ability to reflect physiological reactions, like arousal. Unfortunately, it makes us prone to the EM-Loop.

Elizabeth's Healing allowed her to reach out to me with her hands, emotions, and physical desire. Her feelings mixed with my lack of control caused a projection, which pushed Elizabeth higher but also set everyone in the area off.

Most Empathics use a shutdown to defend against an EM-Loop, but that works against the entire purpose of the Institute’s existence. I pressed my hands on the table and set for the backlash to my projection.

I absorbed the shockwave of sexual heat from the people in my range, magnified it with my own feelings, and blasted it back at them. This time I kept pushing, using my continued projection to deflect any response.

I needed to project until everyone burned out or fled.

"Enough, Joseph," Elizabeth said raising her head from the table much later. "Fuck! They're going to feel the residue of that for a week."

I relaxed into the chair and looked around. Most people had made it out and were probably searching for somewhere a little more private, but a few lay under their table in the warm embrace of satiation.

"Take care of the restaurant," Elizabeth said to one of my watchers.

"Yes, ma'am," he replied before walking away slowly.

"You initiated a Loop," I said trying to stay calm. “You know how dangerous that is!”

"A person who can do that, at will, to one of two Healing Empathics has a certain amount of bargaining power," she told me. "David, our boss, agrees."

"Our boss?" I asked.

"You're looking at the new head of the Euro-Institute," she said smiling widely.

"You have a corporate career," I said.

"What use is the corporate world if we don't ensure someone's going to be around to buy stuff?" she asked shrugging. "And you didn't really think my job meant more to me than you, did you?"

The last was asked with enough of a dangerous edge that I did not need my abilities to tell me answering it would be a mistake. I was still feeling some the effects of EM-Loop’s original trigger so I focused a thin projection at Elizabeth.

"Oh! That's a good place to start your apology," she said pushing the table towards me.

"Not again!" one of the watchers exclaimed.

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« Reply #607 on: January 31, 2005, 11:04:05 AM »

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“It’s my turn! Wednesdays are always mine!”

“You had it yesterday! And Tuesdays are supposed to be MY day!”

“Not my fault you called in!”

“My grandmother died!”

“Tough luck! Check the schedule!”

“Skinny bitch!”

“Yeah, well, at least I’m skinny – you might want to cut back on the fries. Now where are the headphones for drive-thru? There! Damn, I hope it’s slow!  Derrick, you there? <Giggle> May I take your ‘orders’?”

“Morning, Cindy. I knew you’d win. Cum for me, you little slut.”

“Oh. Mmmmm. God, yeah oh yeah oh yeah! OOOH, shiiiit, Oh YEAH!!! You’re the best boss ever! Thank you! Do it again!”

“In a while. The camera cut to you just as you lost it! Oh, tell J.C that I can see her stealing fries and I am docking her pay AGAIN! But first I want you to flash the next person to come through the drive-thru... ”

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« Reply #608 on: January 31, 2005, 11:46:19 AM »

Eye, good stuff. Michelle, cute little piece. I like the play on the title, and you were able to draw a quick picture with very few words. Well done.

I realized I should elaborate a tad here. Eye, your title certainly gives me a lot to think about. Also, I love how hot you were able to get in the story, and how fast you got us there. I look forward to more.
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« Reply #609 on: January 31, 2005, 11:52:24 AM »

Oh, and Jo, I liked how your "Misspoken" story was androgynous, but in a good way. Could be any type of relationship and yet, it was still hot.  And very economical use of dialogue and description.  Wink
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« Reply #610 on: January 31, 2005, 12:11:32 PM »

Michelle, cute little piece.

I've been called that before.  Wink
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« Reply #611 on: January 31, 2005, 12:12:54 PM »

Michelle, cute little piece.

I've been called that before.  Wink

Okay, that one line there ^^^^^ is really hot.
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« Reply #612 on: January 31, 2005, 12:15:08 PM »

Michelle, cute little piece.

I've been called that before.  Wink

Okay, that one line there ^^^^^ is really hot.

Really? HA ... let's see Daphne do a shorter flash than that!  Cheesy Wink
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« Reply #613 on: January 31, 2005, 12:52:45 PM »

Michelle -  Not to preempt Daphne, but how about...

"Fuck me... now!"

Chase -  Thanks... Hate to admit it now, but I was trying not to be androgynous, within the bounds of no narrative at all.  I tried to make the hypno'd male and controller female, but I now see it could work the other way.    Wink

More silly comments by me later.  After getting cuffed a bit for trying to be critical again, I was going to stop.  But f' it.  Joe and others had a point... the stories can all be stroke, but not all the comments have to be.

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« Reply #614 on: January 31, 2005, 01:09:58 PM »

"Fuck me... now!"

Very good... but perhaps not enough ground for MC fantasies to take hold. How about:

"Fuck me!"  "No, fuck me!"
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« Reply #615 on: January 31, 2005, 01:14:08 PM »

"Fuck me... now!"

Very good... but perhaps not enough ground for MC fantasies to take hold. How about:

"Fuck me!"  "No, fuck me!"

"I want you to goooooo ......ohhhhhh ......nooooo ...... I want you to cuuuuuuuuuum ....ohmygod ... I'm cumming!!!!"   Grin

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« Reply #616 on: January 31, 2005, 01:38:40 PM »

And, of course, there is the classic:

"Don't! Stop! Don't! Stop! Don't... stop! Don't stop! Don't stop..."
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« Reply #617 on: January 31, 2005, 01:41:47 PM »

And, of course, there is the classic:

"Don't! Stop! Don't! Stop! Don't... stop! Don't stop! Don't stop..."

That one is a classic!
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« Reply #618 on: January 31, 2005, 02:03:18 PM »

She's baaaackk...  sigh...

In the for what they're worth department...

By Daphne -

Metronome - Hot and good, and I want to take up the piano.

Visiting Hours - Kind of an evil version of Darkmind's, "Andy and Michele," with that vague MC that seems to be the hallmark of these shorties.

The Rescue -  Nice, but with no surprise here, as I could see the end coming from the title and by the third sentence.

Thought Experiment - Very nice, great conceit, very concise and meaningful.  And then the last sentence just seemed like a tense shift or something to me, even though it wasn't.  I'm still trying to figure out why it reads like it's wrong. Maybe if the prior sentence read "It was the best sex he'D ever had."  Sad

Scientific Explanation by WZB - Just nasty, nasty need there.

By Michelle -

I like Michelle's Em... oh yes, do I like Em.

Say Ahh - Kinda just seemed like another "defiant because they don't know they're under control" thingee; possibly another hallmark storyline.

All about Eva - I liked the eroticism and title, but got both hallmarks here again.

Yours Truly - I loved the twists and lying turns, but then got confused.  Rory and Susan never got it on on the bed... or Rory and Jeff in the shower?  I did like it that the couple were both more concerned about Rory cheating on them then their spouses cheating on them.

Have it His* Way  I'm Lovin' It - My favorite of hers.  Just a fun, great conceit, and still wondering why I never get the flasher at the drive-thru window... at least the female one.

Elle and Vee and Exx by EyeofSerpent - I couldn't see how this related to "Elle and Vee" at all, but I'm willing to wait to find out.  Smiley   Loved the conceit, the MC delivery, the heat, and the resistance.  Didn't like the cliched hiccup to show drunk (I don't know as I've ever hiccuped no matter how drunk I was, or heard anyone else do it), and was wondering who has red lettering on their caller-id (I've never seen caller-keyed text on one either - can I be any more niggly?).  A tough, edgy confrontation, though.

Inspiration by Bill - Funny, and sneakily erotic to me... not sure what that says about me, either.

When to Tell Her by Elsol - I really love how you write, the intricacy and personal interactions of dialogue and character.  Here's no exception. 

But I got so confused between this and the previous two chapters, in terms of who has what power and what it means and how it specifically interacts with the world, with the people around them, and with their "immediate" lover, that I had to stop so many times to figure it out that I lost the flow of the story, itself.  Other's intelligence will certainly vary.  Sorry.

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That's it... any and all retorts, rebukes, indifference, indignity, nodding acceptance, nodding off, thanks, etc. are gratefully appreciated. 

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« Reply #619 on: January 31, 2005, 02:17:21 PM »

Thought Experiment - Very nice, great conceit, very concise and meaningful.  And then the last sentence just seemed like a tense shift or something to me, even though it wasn't.  I'm still trying to figure out why it reads like it's wrong. Maybe if the prior sentence read "It was the best sex he'D ever had."  Sad

Yeah, I see what you mean. I'm not sure what would work better, there, but I'll see if I can come up with something more appropriate. It might be better with that sentence excised.
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« Reply #620 on: January 31, 2005, 02:26:37 PM »

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Elle and Vee and Exx by EyeofSerpent - I couldn't see how this related to "Elle and Vee" at all, but I'm willing to wait to find out.  Smiley   Loved the conceit, the MC delivery, the heat, and the resistance.  Didn't like the cliched hiccup to show drunk (I don't know as I've ever hiccuped no matter how drunk I was, or heard anyone else do it), and was wondering who has red lettering on their caller-id (I've never seen caller-keyed text on one either - can I be any more niggly?).  A tough, edgy confrontation, though.

ha! Damn, I never made the connection that she was supposed to be drunk.  I actually thought it was hotter that the girl was being forced to hiccup, as in, not only was the control mental, but physical as well. That even unconscious physical functions happened at the controller's whim.  As if the controller is controlling things that the victim couldn't even if they wanted to.

I mean, we see this in growth stories and such, but this would be different.

As another take on the hiccups thing, she could merely be hiccupping as a form of embarrasment for her, to look drunk. Again, strong control, absolute loss of same.  Which is also hot.

Additionally, Eye uses interuption as a form of evidence of the absolute control the text has over the victim.  And it's extremely effective.

"..don't want--"

"..I'm sure--"

"..I can figure it out--"


My only nit would be "Then she put the smile back in place."

Too inexact. Whose smile is it anyway?
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ha! Damn, I never made the connection that she was supposed to be drunk.  I actually thought it was hotter that the girl was being forced to hiccup, as in, not only was the control mental, but physical as well. That even unconscious physical functions happened at the controller's whim.  As if the controller is controlling things that the victim couldn't even if they wanted to.

I mean, we see this in growth stories and such, but this would be different.

As another take on the hiccups thing, she could merely be hiccupping as a form of embarrasment for her, to look drunk. Again, strong control, absolute loss of same.  Which is also hot.

Additionally, Eye uses interuption as a form of evidence of the absolute control the text has over the victim.  And it's extremely effective.

"..don't want--"

"..I'm sure--"

"..I can figure it out--"


My only nit would be "Then she put the smile back in place."

Too inexact. Whose smile is it anyway?


Very cool, Chase. You hit most implications right on. Even though there is plenty of room for reader interpretation. Here the controller is layering control in several directions at once.

Thanks for speaking up about it. In particular, the hiccups here are a 'cliche' imposed on the subject.

As for your nit: you are correct there as well. However, this is one of those style things I slip into my sentences. I like to eliminate overuse of possessive promouns wherever I think I can get away with it.

In this case, the implication that she is in control only of her own smile carries the intent, plus objectifies the smile itself as if it no longer belongs to her alone. Another form of 'hiccup' imposed.
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« Reply #622 on: January 31, 2005, 02:48:38 PM »

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In this case, the implication that she is in control only of her own smile carries the intent, plus objectifies the smile itself as if it no longer belongs to her alone. Another form of 'hiccup' imposed.

Ahh. *knowing nod* Yes, I can see that.  (Which, again, is hot! Wink )Though, perhaps if you emphasized "her" smile, as in, she's saying that to herself - trying to believe the truth of her own statement, finally, not even sure if she can. It was a bit subtle for me as it currently stands. I suppose that's obvious, since I brought it up as a nit. Tongue
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« Reply #623 on: January 31, 2005, 02:51:58 PM »

Daphne -

Sheesh, don't just change because of me -- besides, on the drive home I figured out that I was somewhat wrong in my reading of the ending.  You had just written...

And, still, he saw her every week.  He paid what she asked.  It was the best sex he ever had.  Even if he didn't, really.

You wanted it a current, ongoing thing from that, so "he ever had" was what you wanted.  My problem, as it finally dawned on me, is the juxaposition of "had", then "didn't", as in...

. . .It was the best sex he ever had.  Even if he didn't(have), really.  This didn't make good-sounding sense in my head (unfortunately, the only thing I have to work with).  So how about, without the tense shift, as I think you intended...

. . .It was the best sex he ever got.  Even if he didn't, really.  Or, with the tense change...

. . .It was the best sex he'd ever had. 

Even if he hadn't.


I kinda like the set-off line at the end, even though it's two or three one-sentence para's in a row.  Sigh, more input than you ever wanted, but selfishly speaking, at least I have it out of my head now.  Sorry...

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« Reply #624 on: January 31, 2005, 03:00:00 PM »

Eye -  See, I was trying to give you that benefit of the doubt about the hiccups, the thing I debated a hair with Wiseguy in his story post, about just how well people can act when under hypnosis.  In this case, act like they're drunk.  I suppose many would fake hiccups, though I'm fairly sure I wouldn't.

But what you and Chase are saying is that this is some prearranged directive from the controller?  That she's been taught to respond this way to "drunk"?  I can certainly buy that as a humiliation ploy, so to speak, but it would be interesting to see how many of the people that read your very good story actually took it in the way you meant it.

As you no doubt know by now, I don't deal with multiple reader interpretations very well.

Perhaps I'm not quite as normal as I think.   Undecided

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