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New Releases - August 24th, 2019
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The Assassins (mc ff rb) (1 new chapter)  by Roboman127
Robberies, kidnappings and Assassinations are being done by strange shiny black PVC women.  Two women going to the bank have their lives changed forever.

At Her Service (mc mf fd) (new)  by S. B.
Sergei struggles with the realization that he’s probably been serving a hypnotic woman for quite some time without ever realizing it.

Behaviour Modification (mc mm) (1 new chapter)  by The Slaver
A therapist attemps to cure a police officer with anger issues.

Bluepilled (mc mf md ds sf) (new)  by Somnophile
A brilliant but amoral young scientist’s creation transforms his mother into a gorgeous bombshell...and his slave.

Building a Better Becky (mc ff) (new)  by TexTrance
A current ethnic slur for a cute and perky young white woman is a “Becky.”  A lesbian-leaning Becky appeals to women of color for help remodeling her life, and they decide to answer her plea while taking advantage of her in fun ways.

The Business Partner (mc mm) (new)  by The Slaver
Charles intends to hit up his father for some money, except he finds someone else waiting for him at his father’s house.

But I Don’t Really Want This (mc mf md fd gr hm ex) (1 new chapter)  by Pomelo
Will and Nicole find their relationship changing again in at first subtle and then not-so-subtle ways.

The Corruption of Candace Kraft (mc mf md) (new)  by scifiscribbler
Dr Kraft is annoyed to have to share her office space with another researcher.

Daughter Replaces Mother (mc mf md in) (new)  by Chrysostomon
After Lucy’s mother passes away, her father gives her an ultimatum that she cannot refuse.

Dhampir (mc ff mf fd) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Ellen awakens with supernatural abilities, and a thirst for blood.

Dumbed Doctor (mc mm) (new)  by Anonymous-047
Jan a married doctor, travels to the far east to partake in his fantasies, but on his latest trip, things become too real.

Editing Reality Book Three: Naughty Fantasies Unleashed (mc mf gr in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
Steve gets a phone app that lets him edit other people.

Every Woman Has a Price (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
Owen inherits a set of silver coins from his grandfather that lets him buy anyone.

Flower Girl (mc ff fu) (new)  by GigglingGoblin
A horny druidess finds herself serving as the “judge” for two rival alraunes holding a strange contest. Which flower girl is the more seductive, the more lovely, the more... irresistible? Will Larya end up too dumb and horny and happy to tell?

Ghost Boy (mc mf ff md fd in la hm) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
Kyle has the ability to leave his body and become an invisible, ghost-like apparition. When he’s in this ‘ghost form’, he can influence the minds of anyone he touches. But, as he soon discovers, there’s far more to his power than just that.

The Honey Trap (GigglingGoblin) (mc mf fd) (new)  by GigglingGoblin
While completing a delivery, an adventurer finds himself waiting in the parlor with three sultry, wasp-waisted blonde bombshells for company. But are these bee-like fey as sweet and dumb as they act? And even if they are, can he resist trying a taste of their addictive, mind-melting honey?

Hostel (mc ff mf fd md) (1 new chapter)  by 321
Rebecca’s trip to Berlin takes an interesting turn.

I Hate My Master (mc mm) (2 new chapters)  by maxrpotter
Mark moves in with a new roommate, and finds himself getting annoyed by a few small things about him, like when he leaves dishes in the sink, or when he leaves his clothes around the place, or when he gives Mark orders that he is unable to disobey.

Intended Attraction (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
In this sequel to Unintended Attraction, our hero starts to take for granted the growing mastery of his ability.

Intrepid Pawns (mc ff mf fd hm ds la) (1 new chapter)  by GigglingGoblin
To save their city, a band of knights sets out to track down a hive of honey-dripping Thriae fey. But can they work together long enough to resist the sweetest of temptations?

It Runs in the Family (mc ff in ma hm) (1 new chapter)  by Sammynona
Connie’s secretly in love with her best friend Tara. But also Tara’s older sister Jane. And their young mother Michelle too. It was always an impossible dream to make the Silva family into her own harem of lovers, until she found out that Tara’s grandmother was a hypnotist.

Kat and Mouse (mc ff mf fd md) (1 new chapter)  by SoVeryFascinated
Kat and Marisa love to play around with hypnosis. But their encounter with a mysterious music file is no game.

Let You Win (mc ff) (new)  by Jukebox
Marina’s very certain that she can hypnotize Josie again, but Josie’s pride is a little stung by the insinuation and she has to assert her self-control. Turns out her self is very well controlled indeed.

Massaged By My Nerdy Brother (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by BurroGirl18 and Pan
A few innocent massages with her brother go too far.

Member Privileges (mc mf ff md fd gr) (1 new chapter)  by William Pratt
Young, married couple Oliver and Marissa keep in touch through online video chat site while Oliver travels on business. When their current site suddenly changes ownership, the new owners bring some peculiar new rules.

Mind-Control Panties (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
A mysterious figure adds special items to the inventory of trendy clothing stores—panties with special phrases written on them.

The Need to Serve (mc mf ff md fd) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
The old world order is doomed and the new world order is coming. Most countries will fall but the UK is determined to fight back.

The New Boss (Astropirate) (mc mf md) (new)  by Astropirate
The new, young boss uses his irresistible powers of persuasion on the female staffmembers.

No Secrets (mc ff mf ma in) (new)  by SleepyTimeSlut
A girl just can’t stop herself from masturbating in front of her family.

Perpetual Slavery (mc mm ft) (new)  by The Slaver
Coach Macdonald answers the front door, and sees a flash of light.

Reunion (Bawarao) (mc mf ff md hm) (new)  by Bawarao
The former school nerd takes revenge at his high school reunion.

Straight to Her Head... (mc ff) (new)  by Sleepy Hypno
Bridget and Katheryn spend a nice evening enjoying a very special glass of wine.

Subject 11 (mc mf fd ma) (new)  by HB5211
Sam has become Subject 11 in a strange facility where males are milked without their consent.  His life will never be the same.

They all became Slaves and Robots for the Robomaster (mc ff md rb) (1 new chapter)  by Roboman127
A hidden power converts a man into Roboman The Robomaster.

Veins of Gold (mc mf fd) (new)  by Meleva
A mystic of the desert, Ket’ia offers a lesson into the ways of her people, the ways of others, and the true powers of gold.

Vera’s Revenge (mc ff rb ft) (1 new chapter)  by Roboman127
Vera jealous of her girlfriend’s promiscuous ways reels her in with the help of a powerful German Mistress.

Zaal the Breeder (mc mf md) (new)  by Chrysostomon
A policewoman investigates an unusual assault.

Zoroaster Met Himself (mc ff) (new)  by SveltPig
Elise, a hard working graduate student, has her academic plans badly disrupted when an ill-advised night of drinking turns out to signify more about her than just a few bad decisions.


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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #1 on: August 24, 2019, 03:10:51 pm »
Yay, new things! Looks like some good ones this week!  :)

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #2 on: August 24, 2019, 04:15:00 pm »
"Ethnic slur"? What?

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #3 on: August 24, 2019, 05:57:11 pm »
Yay, new things! Looks like some good ones this week!  :)

321,

You are correct. Including this one called Hostel. You should read it. I think you would enjoy. I know I sure am.

Out of the ones I have time to check today that I really enjoyed:

Chrysostomon's Daughter Replaces Mother. This one is short and sweet...or should I say short and hot and good. Not easy to write a short and make it interesting or hot, simply because there's not much time. You have to do it just so. Chryso managed to pull it off because Lucy's and Daphne's close relationship and Lucy's back story are successfully established with nice writing. The MC part is terrific, where the affected person completely disengages from their previous emotions of love and caring and instead now only exists for the controller. It slugs the victim and reader in the head like a hammer. Their reactions upon donning the necklace are hot. I really liked this story.


Then you have the two longer stories from two amazing writers that keep on flying down the tracks. Not straight tracks, but wild twisty ones that leave you holding on with white knuckles to stay in your seat. I always gotta run to these two when the new releases are out.

Both these stories are very different but are tied together by great, great writing and intricate tension fueled plots. For those who love intellectual mind control stories, it's all right here with nothing left out. Just so smart balls out fun and games at the highest levels.

SoVeryFascinated's Kat and Mouse really flips over on it's head as the formally strong, smart Kat is now the one in danger and Marisa, seemingly helpless before now has to save her. She has a plan. What is it? I can't wait to find out. It better work or they are doomed. Also, will Kat have anything left to help? She is strong and smart and understands hypnosis very well but clever Quentin, who also understands hypnosis at a high level is using selective memories and experiences she had during her life with Marisa to change her view of things. Boy so now we have a race with everything at stake, Marisa's plan vs Quentin's head work on Kat.

And last but never ever least there is 321' Hostel. Rebecca got a bit of a delay in her plans by a visit from a certain lovely Aussie that she happens to....covet in the worst way. This visit not only delayed her plans for Alice but also brought new temptations to her. 321 always does such a fine job of putting both and angel and devil on the protagonists shoulders. Will that delay cause problems? Oh you know the answer if you have reading 321's marvelous stories.

So at the end of this chapter 321 throws it all up in the air again. Carefully laid plans turned to dust but the actions of others, others not even aware of what is really happening.

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #4 on: August 24, 2019, 07:51:00 pm »
Hostel
I've never been let down by a chapter of this story, or any other by 321. Let's just start off with my favorite part, that entire Emu reference! And you kept it going so much longer... CR and I are going to have to step up our game. Perhaps an entire anthology revolving around emu-based hypnosis? I don't think I could have been smiling more while reading that.
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Oh the suspense!

Kat and Mouse
As good as was expected! I certainly can't stand the antagonist anymore, now that we seem to get a bit more knowledge about the kind of person he is, but I suppose that's the intention, which is great! The stuff with Kat was engaging and nerve wracking, and the parts involving Marisa were so tantalizing secretive... just like all the other chapters I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!

Building a Better Becky
Admittedly only read this because of the synopsis. Certainly didn't turn out the way I expected, but for once, this was a good thing. There is a hint of racial... play, I guess? But it wasn't really vindictive like I had thought it'd be. All pretty downplayed, I suppose. I'd say it's a pretty lighthearted story. Ultimately there wasn't really much in it for me. The hypnosis/mind control elements were... I guess told not shown would be the best way to describe it. The story is more of just a focus on one girl's journey to be someone different.

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #5 on: August 24, 2019, 10:25:22 pm »
I feel like every response I have to "Kat and Mouse" is OH MY GODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD but in a good way, in a twist-the-knife kind of way.
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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #6 on: August 24, 2019, 11:43:48 pm »
Yeah Kat and Mouse was uh, quality content for sure.

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #7 on: August 25, 2019, 07:03:11 am »
321 hits it out of the park yet again.  Hostel is a masterpiece of FF Hypnosis fiction.  I love how Rebecca struggles with the temptations her skill gives...I love even more the frequency she gives into her temptations.

Beyond the hypnosis, 321 ability to describe his settings, and most of all, his taut plotting and pacing are so present.
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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #8 on: August 25, 2019, 07:56:26 am »
Yeah Kat and Mouse was uh, quality content for sure.

Here is the very essence of writing: no matter how many good reviews you get, you see that "uh" and think, "wait, are they being sarcastic? Did they hate it? Am I really no good?"

Thanks for the kind words about "Kat and Mouse," everyone.

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« Reply #9 on: August 25, 2019, 08:18:18 am »
I find myself not fond of all aspects of it, for various reasons, but my top-level view is that it's a compelling, well-written story that has me *EXCESSIVE COUGHING* fascinated. The "uh" was mostly a pause for dramatic effect to emphasize that I think it is in fact quality content, but also a teensy bit of qualifier that I'm not keen to expand on, because it's largely a matter of personal taste.

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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #10 on: August 25, 2019, 01:32:32 pm »
Getting started

Let You Win

Fun piece of logic challenge where both might think there's winning (and maybe they are), though Marina seems to have the upper hand to me
Definitely enjoyed

Member Privileges

As long as Eileen survived, just saying...? ;) Its Geo at his entertaining best, and clearly you dont believe all that you see, so hopefully? Where it goes from here, heaven knows?
High end of definitely enjoyed. Probably being generous given the Eileen situation, but otherwise.

Straight to Her Head...

I was lovely this even before the late twist which I never saw coming, but loved it when it did. Seriously, I'd love to have a date like this, just saying... ;) Great little story
High end of definitely enjoyed

Zaal the Breeder

I decided to give this a try, even with the word breeder in the title, and yes, that side of events, unsurprisingly did little for me. The rest made for a pleasant enough read.
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Zoroaster Met Himself

OK, this is great fun, and well worth a read, if its your scene. I love Elli, though I'm more like Elise, or was anyway, I'm sure. Nice snappy piece, looking forward to more
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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #12 on: August 25, 2019, 06:15:15 pm »
Is there more coming for blue pilled? Because the early parts were interesting but the end seemed a bit rushed to get to the sex.

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« Reply #13 on: August 25, 2019, 11:00:15 pm »
I just want to say that Reunion was unexpectedly sweet.

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« Reply #14 on: August 26, 2019, 10:29:13 am »
Don't worry, Merry. You know I'm not a Grimdark guy.
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« Reply #15 on: August 26, 2019, 04:23:55 pm »
I just want to say that Reunion was unexpectedly sweet.

I initially passed over it, as revenge fantasies tend to go too far.  Usually it's minor slights avenged with life-destroying excess.  Not the case here.  This one managed to keep just on the right side for me (although tbh I could have done without the cuck stuff).
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« Reply #16 on: August 26, 2019, 05:10:25 pm »
Yeah Kat and Mouse was uh, quality content for sure.

Here is the very essence of writing: no matter how many good reviews you get, you see that "uh" and think, "wait, are they being sarcastic? Did they hate it? Am I really no good?"

Thanks for the kind words about "Kat and Mouse," everyone.

I felt as if I really need to answer the "am I really no good" question here, because honestly "Kat and Mouse" might be my favorite new story here in a long time.   (I'm new to being a member but not to reading the stories!)  The level of nuance in the plot compels a slow, careful read (and then re-read) lest you miss something important, and the two main characters are both fleshed out and far too easy to become invested in.  I'm hooked and I need to know what happens!  The villain of the story is becoming exponentially less likable and more terrifying with every week.  Definitely a story that has stayed in my head long after reading each of the last two weeks, which really is one of the biggest compliments I can give.  Thank you, SoVeryFascinated! 

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« Reply #17 on: August 26, 2019, 05:32:06 pm »
Don't worry, Merry. You know I'm not a Grimdark guy.

I know, thats why I stayed on the high side with the mark, and not the lower side
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« Reply #18 on: August 26, 2019, 08:25:57 pm »
Yeah Kat and Mouse was uh, quality content for sure.

Here is the very essence of writing: no matter how many good reviews you get, you see that "uh" and think, "wait, are they being sarcastic? Did they hate it? Am I really no good?"

Thanks for the kind words about "Kat and Mouse," everyone.

I felt as if I really need to answer the "am I really no good" question here, because honestly "Kat and Mouse" might be my favorite new story here in a long time.   (I'm new to being a member but not to reading the stories!)  The level of nuance in the plot compels a slow, careful read (and then re-read) lest you miss something important, and the two main characters are both fleshed out and far too easy to become invested in.  I'm hooked and I need to know what happens!  The villain of the story is becoming exponentially less likable and more terrifying with every week.  Definitely a story that has stayed in my head long after reading each of the last two weeks, which really is one of the biggest compliments I can give.  Thank you, SoVeryFascinated!

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« Reply #19 on: August 27, 2019, 04:16:40 pm »
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After Lucy’s mother passes away, her father gives her an ultimatum that she cannot refuse.

Short but hot as hell. Good stuff.
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« Reply #20 on: August 27, 2019, 04:22:58 pm »
Part 2

Building a Better Becky

Fine, I loved this. I know, I need a different form of rebuild, but this is fun. Great story, happy ending, what more could I ask for. Yes, if you have race issues, avoid, but fine for the other 99%, its fair to say. The whole building process (not robot, in case anyone thought otherwise) is a delight
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The Corruption of Candace Kraft

Fine, I have my happy family issue with this, but otherwise the mind control is very neat. And of course the end suggest it may not end as Mr Bimbeau hopes, but I suspect it will. You know, seriously, the idea is hot, but unless the mother thing is to twist things, be happier if the woman was single
Definitely enjoyed

Every Woman Has a Price

The play between the characters is good, and strong, and I always prefer a story that adds variation to the standard formula, and this sure does. The end leaves things interesting too
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Intended Attraction

Talking of stories where the play between the characters is good, here is another one. Yes roared with laughter at the way the two girls carry on here
High end of definitely enjoyed

It Runs in the Family

It seems Connie gives herself as many new issues as the ones she clears up. But yes, some of Naomi's logic at times is just hilarious. Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out
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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #21 on: August 27, 2019, 04:47:41 pm »
The Corruption of Candace Kraft

Fine, I have my happy family issue with this, but otherwise the mind control is very neat. And of course the end suggest it may not end as Mr Bimbeau hopes, but I suspect it will. You know, seriously, the idea is hot, but unless the mother thing is to twist things, be happier if the woman was single
Definitely enjoyed

Let me save you the next four chapters, as the author - you will not enjoy how this story wraps up.

You might well enjoy stories later in its timeline - this is 2005 for a reason, Bimbeau is going to find himself changed as much as Candace, and there is a family there to pick up that story in a later series.

This started as a prelude to a story about Kara, fourteen years on. But this time around I found more in Candace than I did when I first started fleshing all of this point, and her descent became the focus of the prelude to the point it was a story of its own.

But the Kraft family tragedy won't be repaired for a long time - though when it is, mind control will be a key motivator.

(Just, don't put yourself through the next chapters if you don't like that aspect!)
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« Reply #22 on: August 27, 2019, 11:15:13 pm »
What are you worried about? I just murdered around 40 people in mine.
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« Reply #23 on: August 28, 2019, 01:29:38 am »
What are you worried about? I just murdered around 40 people in mine.

I write my stuff with the hopes folks will enjoy them. Corruption isn't the happy ending; in overall structure, it's the bad news in the opening five minutes of the film that drives the plot. So given it's also five chapters, why put someone through all of that?
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Re: New Releases - August 24th, 2019
« Reply #24 on: August 28, 2019, 07:06:58 am »
Every Woman Has a Price

The play between the characters is good, and strong, and I always prefer a story that adds variation to the standard formula, and this sure does. The end leaves things interesting too
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Excellent! Making the characters play together is always the fun bit. Plus, I love Janice. I'm curious to what variations to the formula stand out to you. Generally, I'm not trying to think outside the box, it's more like I couldn't find the box with two hands and a flashlight.