New Releases-Saturday July 6th 2019

[Majorwrll]

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Ashes (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Blackie
The family raised him not to use his ability on those without the ability. The world isn’t supposed to know the family exists. Or families. When he uses it to defend himself and is seen without knowing who it was, his world turns upside down on him.

Atonement (Half Shim) (mc ff ft gr la) (1 new chapter)  by Half Shim
Morgan is sent to the Farm to atone for her crimes.

The Audition (mc mf md) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Blair thinks she’s auditioning for a movie, but actually she’s auditioning to be a slave.

Blink, Wink, Sink (mc fd) (new)  by me-chan
A shared gesture centers a fun, weekly session.

Camilla Tales — New Blood (mc ff) (new)  by Chrysostomon
A vampire is awakened in 1930s Germany.

Camilla Tales — The Beginning (mc ff) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Camilla is turned into a vampire by her mother.

Crossings (mc mf fd ft) (1 new chapter)  by MɛtaBob
Memory and reason restored, a man mastering magic journeys to new destinations, encountering ever more irresistible women.

Crutch (mc mf md ma) (1 new chapter)  by CuyahogaKingKong
A college student wants to help a classmate who just knee surgery, and ends up hypnotizing her to be his slave.

Deer Me: A Christmas Spirits Story (mc ma) (new)  by Fortunato
A woman walks into an adult toystore that is only open one day a year.

Dick Picture Perfect (mc mf ff) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
Will sends a dick pic to a girl, knowing that she would hate it. But it turns out that every woman who sees that picture needs more of it.

Editing Reality Book Two: Sultry Fantasies Unleashed (mc mf gr in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
Steve gets a phone app that lets him edit other people.

Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction (mc mf fd) (3 new chapters)  by S. B.
A collection of short writings focusing on various aspects of Femdom Mind Control.

Fit to Serve (mc mf md ma ft) (3 new chapters)  by Fortunato
Jay gets his girlfriend a maid’s outfit for Christmas, just like the one that Tyrone got his wife.

Ghost Boy (mc mf ff md fd in la hm) (new)  by MindSpark
Kyle has the ability to leave his body and become an invisible, ghost-like apparition. When he’s in this ‘ghost form’, he can influence the minds of anyone he touches. But, as he soon discovers, there’s far more to his power than just that.

Good Boy (Chrysostomon) (mc fd be) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Beth gets angry at the man who accidentally ran over her dog.

He Likes to Play With His Food (mc mf md ds) (new)  by The Winged Scorpion
Bridget moved to a small town and took a waitress job there. Rent was cheap and the job paid really well. It’s almost as if she was drawn there to be sacrificed to a vampire or something...

I Hate My Master (mc mm) (new)  by maxrpotter
Mark moves in with a new roommate, and finds himself getting annoyed by a few small things about him, like when he leaves dishes in the sink, or when he leaves his clothes around the place, or when he gives Mark orders that he is unable to disobey.

The Interview (Chrysostomon) (mc mf md in) (new)  by Chrysostomon
A psychiatrist interviews a patient who says she wants to return to her master.

Kingdom of Lost Memories (mc ff) (new)  by nevermind
When the Queen demands her tribute, a peasant girl is carried off to the far-away capital. In the royal castle, she learns of the terrible truth behind the regent’s rule, and of her own power.

The Mask Becomes You (mc ff mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Two college students discover a strange mask that makes the words of the wearer irresistible. They soon discover that it’s even hard to resist using the mask, and that the wearer’s thoughts may no longer be their own...

Massaged By My Nerdy Brother (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by BurroGirl18 and Pan
A few innocent massages with her brother goes too far.

The Merger — Spirals (mc mf ff fd md) (1 new chapter)  by Sleepy Hypno
Mysterious players move to take ownership of the Spirals Nightclub, while Midnight acclimates to her new surroundings in New Chicago.

Muscle Bimbo (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Kallie
The nerdy, plain, shy Alex asks goth girl Winter out on a date, only to be told she’s not her type. But after that, Alex finds herself changing.

My New Salon (mc mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by Robert Towers
Madeleine is convinced by her roommate to try several new things.

Nighthawks (mc mf md) (new)  by scifiscribbler
Susan and Alec rekindle a hypnotic relationship that she had moved past.

The Priest (mc mm ft) (new)  by potentialsinner666
A man keeps dreaming about his priest’s emerald green eyes.

Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (1 new chapter)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

Skeinbound (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Meleva
Three young women set out on a winter’s journey, to prove their new adulthood or perish in the process. One trying to keep them fed, one trying to keep them safe, and one who’ll try anything to keep them all together.

Split Slave (mc ff ma bd ds hm) (new)  by Skaetlett
Delta, a non-binary, kidnapped sex slave with a protective alternate personality, gets auctioned off to a multimillionaire who seems to have more in store than they’re ready for. Their Mistress thinks she knows everything about them and is wrong.

Stop Watch (mc mf md in ts) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A power that is too good to be true becomes a corrupting influence on a man and leads him into temptations he’d never thought possible.

String (mc ff) (new)  by MoldedMind
Angie has a very special induction for her girlfriend, Jill.

The Unholy Rites (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Chrissy
A teenager begins to fall under the spell of a demonically possessed priest.

Upgrades (mc ma md fd cb) (new)  by J. Darksong
After several years of adventure as the heroic Robotica, Roberta Bayport finally has the chance to regain her humanity and become a normal human again. It’s a dream come true. But while Robotica is a powerful and capable heroine, Roberta, as a human, is vulnerable. And when her nemesis catches her in the middle of the procedure, her perfect dream may become a nightmare...

Upregulated (mc ff sf) (new)  by If I Was Not You
A woman tells her date about her experiences as a research subject.

The Word In Question (mc mf md) (new)  by Quiet Hypnotist
The stranger sitting next to Ray has some interesting questions to ask her.

X-Static Process (mc mf md) (new)  by Jukebox
Melanie’s bank is robbed by a strange woman with no eyes, and something is beginning to happen to her that she doesn’t understand. The Process is beginning... and it will transform Melanie forever.

The Yoga Instructor (mc mm) (1 new chapter)  by potentialsinner666
A yoga instructor who takes advantage of his female students is instead taken advantage of by one of his male students.


Go Duke in the NBA.

[Shadra]

The Mask Becomes You returns with an incredibly hot chapter that finally shows us what happens after that amazing cliffhanger from the previous chapter... only to leave us with an even better, and perhaps more sinister, cliffhanger!

Loved every nail biting moment of it.

[321]

EEEEEEEEEeeeeeee new things! Shiny new things!

I've been looking forward to more than a few of these stories...

[TheWingedScorpion]

Long time reader (most of my years reading the EMCSA was still green), first time poster (on here and to the EMCSA). If you happen to read my debut story, I'd love to know what you think of it. My initial reaction when I first typed it down was, "my God, what have I done?" Hopefully some of you will enjoy it, but if not I'm not going to be easily hurt by some harsh criticism. I'd like to write some more in the future and I'll be lurking around these forums for feedback. Cheers!

[ExtantElan]

Long time reader (most of my years reading the EMCSA was still green), first time poster (on here and to the EMCSA). If you happen to read my debut story, I'd love to know what you think of it. My initial reaction when I first typed it down was, "my God, what have I done?" Hopefully some of you will enjoy it, but if not I'm not going to be easily hurt by some harsh criticism. I'd like to write some more in the future and I'll be lurking around these forums for feedback. Cheers!

OK I only read the first 5 or 6 paragraphs, this is what I noticed.

PoV starts Third person limited then moves to omniscient, as we are informed things by the narrator Bridgette cannot possibly know at first glance.  Some word repetition. Small town near the woods.. so the town is near the woods? We don't need to know she got a job as a waitress, you could just say waitress (or better) show her taking someone's order ((when possible show, don't tell)). She sees someone get jumped and ignores it to watch the guy? This might even be explained (like he's using some MC ability on her by then, but if so describe it.)

Suggestions. When you write, before you type you visualize the scene you don't have to describe anything at all (up to you) but always give the narrative from some consistent point of view (consider it the camera the reader uses to 'see' what you are writing.))

There is a lot of jumping around in those first paragraphs, like you are in a rush. Take your time, especially here. This is the part that will either hook the reader or ward them off. Being that this is erotica think of it as you trying to seduce the reader, think more sensory and less expository.

[Merry Brooks]

Long time reader (most of my years reading the EMCSA was still green), first time poster (on here and to the EMCSA). If you happen to read my debut story, I'd love to know what you think of it. My initial reaction when I first typed it down was, "my God, what have I done?" Hopefully some of you will enjoy it, but if not I'm not going to be easily hurt by some harsh criticism. I'd like to write some more in the future and I'll be lurking around these forums for feedback. Cheers!

Its the 2nd longest of the 17 on my list this week, so will be a few days, but I will get there, I promise.

[CerebusOne]

Haven't been feeling too hot this week but there are two stories I managed to go through that I need to mention.

Neverminds Kingdom of Lost Memories is so well written, so clever and very unique. Everything done here, the world building, the history of that world, the plot, the mystery, the two imperiled girls, Marigold and Irene, both of whom Nevermind really makes the reader care about so much is just so spot on perfect. I dare anyone not to have their heart ache for Irene and Marigold when you learn their story.

And with any great MC story, this story is HOT. This story lacks nothing. If you don't read it it's your loss and I'm serious when I say that.

This is not Nevermind's first story to catch my attention. The last one was just a few weeks ago, Contract which was totally different but also just top shelf. Not only is Nevermind such a terrific writer but very versatile.


The other is Chrissy's The Unholy Rites.  Poor Alicia, she is so nice, trying to keep her family together under the terroristic shadow of her abusive alcoholic dad.

But it gets worse. He has three devils in her life, Dad, her so called boyfriend Josh who is a slime ball inside and of course the demonic good Father James who had plans for her.

In this chapter we find out just how horrific Dad and Josh can be. Dad explodes in full out violence, over the choice of dinner. Yep, drunks do that. Josh uses a girl, a mean rival of Alicia's to prod her along the sex road threatening to break up with her and go with that other girl if Alicia doesn't start putting out more. This guy is the worst.

Chrissy is so good at describing the dynamics of the drunk dad and predatory boy friend. This stuff is just spot on and so well and intelligently executed.

And of course, good old Father James gives Alicia her second dose of control. Wow, where is this poor, sweet girl going to turn for help?

You can't go wrong with this story either.

[321]

Going to start with The Mask Becomes You, in which, hmm, let’s see... well...

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Okay, that’s not even a spoiler. HOLY COW WHAAAAAAAT???

Hot, amazing, sinister, wonderful. I need to borrow a time machine and get myself to August 2019 for future chapters!

Crutch continues with a new chapter! It opens with our hero spending a lot of time trying to work through what happened in Chapter 1, and honestly, who wouldn’t? Maybe it’s just me- everyone else would have her in a trance and dressed as a French maid by now- but I love the slow burn here between two very enjoyable, realistic characters.

(The careful, cautious, almost scientific hypno-play here is endearing and hot!)

[badpenny]

Long time reader (most of my years reading the EMCSA was still green), first time poster (on here and to the EMCSA). If you happen to read my debut story, I'd love to know what you think of it. My initial reaction when I first typed it down was, "my God, what have I done?" Hopefully some of you will enjoy it, but if not I'm not going to be easily hurt by some harsh criticism. I'd like to write some more in the future and I'll be lurking around these forums for feedback. Cheers!

I have your story open and look forward to reading it when I make my wordcount goal for the day. Welcome to the Forum and congrats on your first story! That's always an accomplishment worth celebrating. Even if this one isn't to my tastes (though an MD vampire story is, ah, well positioned to align with my EMC tastes), I hope you keep writing and sharing!

[lifmcs]

He Likes to Play With His Food  by The Winged Scorpion

That was pretty intense, almost too much so for my tastes, but Briget's initial descent was well crafted. Though after she says "Thy will be done," things got a little rougher. I have trouble with stories where someone seems utterly broken, and then it just keeps going. I suppose the answer is in the title to a degree, but at some point things got gratuitous. Specifically, the long section of nothing but him switching her thoughts around. And then after all that, she has enough sense of self remaining to beg him to put his psychic dick back in her mind? The math didn't quite work out on that. Overall though, I quite enjoyed the read. Nice debut, yo.


The Mask Becomes You  by Carefully Random

"Playtime's over, my pretties."


Nighthawks  by scifiscribbler

That was beautiful. And really hot.


String  by MoldedMind

Symbols! And Patterns! And Metaphor!


The Word In Question  by Quiet Hypnotist

This is the sort of clever wordplay I really appreciate.

[CuyahogaKingKong]

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Crutch continues with a new chapter! It opens with our hero spending a lot of time trying to work through what happened in Chapter 1, and honestly, who wouldn’t? Maybe it’s just me- everyone else would have her in a trance and dressed as a French maid by now- but I love the slow burn here between two very enjoyable, realistic characters.

(The careful, cautious, almost scientific hypno-play here is endearing and hot!)

Thanks.  I tried to visualize this scenario playing out, and as far as realistic reactions "Shit, she's gone insane, I should get her to a hospital before things get worse" seemed like one of the most likely.  Personally I don't like stories where "nice guy" controllers jump straight into using their accidentally acquired sex slaves without showing concern for their well being.  I prefer the openly predatory controllers to that sort of thing.  So Tom spends the lions share of this one making sure Steff is going to be ok.

[Merry Brooks]

The other is Chrissy's The Unholy Rites.  Poor Alicia, she is so nice, trying to keep her family together under the terroristic shadow of her abusive alcoholic dad.

But it gets worse. He has three devils in her life, Dad, her so called boyfriend Josh who is a slime ball inside and of course the demonic good Father James who had plans for her.

In this chapter we find out just how horrific Dad and Josh can be. Dad explodes in full out violence, over the choice of dinner. Yep, drunks do that. Josh uses a girl, a mean rival of Alicia's to prod her along the sex road threatening to break up with her and go with that other girl if Alicia doesn't start putting out more. This guy is the worst.

Chrissy is so good at describing the dynamics of the drunk dad and predatory boy friend. This stuff is just spot on and so well and intelligently executed.

And of course, good old Father James gives Alicia her second dose of control. Wow, where is this poor, sweet girl going to turn for help?

You can't go wrong with this story either.

Thanks for the description. I know that wont be my thing, so have removed it from my list

[catfish]

Re the most recent chapters of Editing Reality Book Two: Sultry Fantasies Unleashed...

Seth Myers, eh? This story is going to end with reality being edited so that he's a late-night talk-show host, isn't it?

(Yes, I know the spelling mypenname3000 is using isn't quite the same, but that's all I can think about when I see that character name.)

[Merry Brooks]

Getting started

Blink, Wink, Sink

A fun little hypno piece that I just about managed to avoid sinking into, lol. But yes, I could easily imagine some doing so, susceptible to such things, shall we suggest?
Definitely enjoyed

Deer Me: A Christmas Spirits Story

I dont know, you clearly have to watch these Steph's, especially ones with deer natures This is a fun transformation story, with a sweet ending, so yes, all in all, I loved it. So yes, if I'm offered the chance to put in a butt plug, in a shop, well...?
High end of definitely enjoyed

Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction

I must be getting less submissive in my old age, as I loved all three Dominatrix tricks here, willing, or otherwise. Fine, Bugs amused me the most, probably for the ending, but all are very good
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Word In Question

The second hypno piece here, which I probably enjoyed more, because of the convoluted logic surrounding it. I must be careful if I sit next to a stranger on a train clearly, though I doubt I'd make as attractive a victim as Ray?
Definitely enjoyed

More tomorrow

[CuyahogaKingKong]

I swear I named my Steff after a college friend of mine.  I had no idea that naming subjects that was so common. 

[SB]

Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction

I must be getting less submissive in my old age, as I loved all three Dominatrix tricks here, willing, or otherwise. Fine, Bugs amused me the most, probably for the ending, but all are very good
High end of definitely enjoyed

Yeah, that's it. You're definitely getting less submissive and embracing the inner hypnotic vixen you were always meant to be...  ;D Glad you had fun though I was almost certain Bugs would creep you out somehow. Don't mind being proven wrong though. Thanks, dear.

[Fortunato]

Ah, but this is Seph, Merry, one of the identities of the enigmatic Princess Persephone, a member of the Damned who is converting people into their own personal menageries of mind-controlled slaves.

-Fortunato

[Merry Brooks]

I swear I named my Steff after a college friend of mine.  I had no idea that naming subjects that was so common.

I'm sure you did, but if you look back the Deer Me story is based on one of my old stories

Ah, but this is Seph, Merry, one of the identities of the enigmatic Princess Persephone, a member of the Damned who is converting people into their own personal menageries of mind-controlled slaves.

-Fortunato

Oh fine, I'll believe you, though I will remind you who the inspiration was!

[Fortunato]

Indeed. It was not a coincidence the way I set that up, but that's entirely metatextual.

-Fortunato

[Blackie]

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Crutch continues with a new chapter! It opens with our hero spending a lot of time trying to work through what happened in Chapter 1, and honestly, who wouldn’t?

So Tom spends the lions share of this one making sure Steff is going to be ok.

It's superb so far, CuyahogaKink guy. I look forward to more. Love the sweet romantic aspect too.

[Shadra]

Mostly just going to reiterate what others have said about Crutch. While I generally prefer the I guess... less romantic stories, this one is still quite enjoyable with how pleasant everything is. Was a joy to read. The revelation of why she became that way was great.

I suppose stories like Blink, Wink, Sink just aren't for me. That said, it was well written for what it was, I just didn't get anything out of it personally.

I have a bit of a soft spot for new authors, and based on the other reviews, I decided to check out He Likes To Play With His Food. Vampire stories aren't strictly my thing, but if the MC contained within is done well enough, I can still certainly enjoy it. I loved the scene between Bridget and the two girls outside. Probably my favorite part of the story. Unfortunately, piercings are a squick to me, as well as some of the later abuse that was shown. I also think the mantra section went on much too long, and admittedly I scrolled past most of it. And personal impression... Fred just seems like a strange name for the character shown in the story. Still enjoyed it, as I'm sure others will as well, and I encourage the author to continue writing.

Kingdom of Lost Memories was such a lovely tale. I mirror the things everyone else has already said about it. I thought the transition of memories near the end was just so wonderful. Quite a well-told story. If I were to give one gripe, it was that

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That's all I had time for yesterday, which is surprising considering I had the worst headache of my life just prior to reading.

[CuyahogaKingKong]

It's superb so far, CuyahogaKink guy. I look forward to more. Love the sweet romantic aspect too.

That means a lot coming from you.  And stop coming up with better versions of my screen name! 

Mostly just going to reiterate what others have said about Crutch. While I generally prefer the I guess... less romantic stories, this one is still quite enjoyable with how pleasant everything is. Was a joy to read. The revelation of why she became that way was great.

Your proofreading and feedback has been invaluable.  I'm kind of surprised to hear you say that about romantic stories, because i'd say Following Her Dream is very romantic at points.  Until the last half of the last chapter completely undercuts that, but I won't go down that rabbit hole again. 

[Shadra]

Your proofreading and feedback has been invaluable.  I'm kind of surprised to hear you say that about romantic stories, because i'd say Following Her Dream is very romantic at points.  Until the last half of the last chapter completely undercuts that, but I won't go down that rabbit hole again. 

Always glad to help =)

I think I didn't explain it well earlier. I'm fine with romantic stories. If anything I'm kind of a softy for happy endings. I just prefer some drama, even some sinister elements, in stories I read. Hence Violet. I can enjoy a story without them, of course. Just a personal preference, but it doesn't really affect my opinion of Crutch. I still think it's great. =D

[CuyahogaKingKong]

Your proofreading and feedback has been invaluable.  I'm kind of surprised to hear you say that about romantic stories, because i'd say Following Her Dream is very romantic at points.  Until the last half of the last chapter completely undercuts that, but I won't go down that rabbit hole again. 

Always glad to help =)

I think I didn't explain it well earlier. I'm fine with romantic stories. If anything I'm kind of a softy for happy endings. I just prefer some drama, even some sinister elements, in stories I read. Hence Violet. I can enjoy a story without them, of course. Just a personal preference, but it doesn't really affect my opinion of Crutch. I still think it's great. =D

I actually considered introducing a violet-type character to try and steal Steff away.  Maybe a psych professor Tom would go to for advice on a "hypothetical" scenario.  Felt too contrived, and really the story is all about these two people.  The conflict is in their heads, not against anyone else.

In general I need to start being willing to be meaner to my characters so there can be some proper drama, but it probably won't be in either story I started so far. 

[Shadra]

I actually considered introducing a violet-type character to try and steal Steff away.  Maybe a psych professor Tom would go to for advice on a "hypothetical" scenario.  Felt too contrived, and really the story is all about these two people.  The conflict is in their heads, not against anyone else.

In general I need to start being willing to be meaner to my characters so there can be some proper drama, but it probably won't be in either story I started so far.

Yeah, I don't think it would really serve this story very well to have something like that. Though... I wonder if I would have thought the same of my story if I asked myself before Ch5. Granted, I had been planning on some drama from the beginning... but this isn't about my story.

There's still plenty of ways you can go with the story that could involve the two main characters as they try to figure things out. I don't want to color your plan for it by offering any examples, though.

[321]

Kingdom of Lost Memories was brilliant. It anticipates what we think is going to happen in the story and then tweaks it just enough so that we're surprised in spite of ourselves (well, that was me reading it, anyway).

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Man, that was hot. Well done!

[Blackie]

And stop coming up with better versions of my screen name! 

I'm pretty sure the city in Ashes is not in Cuyahoga county. Heck, it's nowhere near Cleveland either.

So, maybe, 'kinky feller in north eastern ohio' instead?

[Shadra]

Been reading a bit more than usual recently, which just means I'm disappointed I haven't read as much in the previous weeks. Anywho, let's just jump into it:

This was the first time I read something in Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction. It's refreshing to read something that's so one-and-done. I'm not sure which of the three I liked the most. Bugs was probably the most creepily enjoyable. Winter and Summer probably had the hotter MC moment. I do wonder, though... the gum thing. I can't tell if he intentionally spit it out, or if it was an accident. I know he was intended to be shown as a creep, but even then I don't really see him doing that on purpose. Yet I also don't really see how one could accidentally spit gum into someone else's face. And come on, that line about six months is funny!

With Fit To Serve... with how little I read of any story these last few weeks, it's been awhile since I caught back up with this one. To the point that I wonder if maybe I accidentally skipped some chapters. I think I feel a bit too bad for Courtney to enjoy this as much as I used to. I do like some of the changes that are happening to her, though! Wondering what will come next.

Massaged by My Nerdy Brother was a great read, which I wouldn't expect anything less given the author. It was also another story that I fell behind on, but this time I definitely picked back up at the right spot. Alison's slow changes are expertly plotted out, and fun to boot. If I were to say one thing, though... I understand it fits with the story, but I can't help but roll my eyes at the "ugly, nerdy virgin resorts to hypnosis to get the hot girl" trope, anytime I see it. Doesn't ruin my enjoyment, though! And hey, at least it's not one panel of swinging a pocket watch, or showing a girl some phone, and then the rest just a fuck-fest. I'm looking at you, Japanese manga...

Lastly, The Interview. Really enjoyed this one up until the last portion. I liked the MC elements a lot, and particularly enjoyed the climactic moment between Helen and Bill. All the mentions of pregnancy weren't really my thing, but that's just personal issue. I think what kind of brought it down for me was the last two sections.

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Probably will have more later today/tomorrow. There are some longer series I've been wanting to dig into, but it's kinda daunting when I'm a few weeks/months behind. We'll see how that goes.

[Fortunato]

Thanks for the review, Shadra. I'm not sure if you feel that FtS is too dark for your tastes, but I am interested in knowing what elements appeal to you specifically. I'm putting together the last two chapters of Fit to Serve right now, so you won't have to wait too much longer for the conclusion.

-Fortunato

[gyrd]

I understand it fits with the story, but I can't help but roll my eyes at the "ugly, nerdy virgin resorts to hypnosis to get the hot girl" trope, anytime I see it.

I'm a huge huge fan of Pan's writing but I haven't opened up "Massaged By My Nerdy Brother" for this exact reason.

[Shadra]

Thanks for the review, Shadra. I'm not sure if you feel that FtS is too dark for your tastes, but I am interested in knowing what elements appeal to you specifically. I'm putting together the last two chapters of Fit to Serve right now, so you won't have to wait too much longer for the conclusion.

-Fortunato

Let me try to compose my thoughts on this, maybe glance back and get a refresher of what all has happened, and I'll give a proper response later.

I'm a huge huge fan of Pan's writing but I haven't opened up "Massaged By My Nerdy Brother" for this exact reason.

I think it was only a brief mention of his appearance once or twice in every chapter. Certainly doesn't focus on it that I recall. I can't speak for how much that would bother you, but I think the rest of the content certainly wonderful enough to give it a try.

[CuyahogaKingKong]

And stop coming up with better versions of my screen name! 

I'm pretty sure the city in Ashes is not in Cuyahoga county. Heck, it's nowhere near Cleveland either.

I'm only about halfway through Ashes, and I must say it has a very Rust Belt feel.  The main character lives in a converted industrial building for one thing.  But the overall atmosphere has that comfortably decaying quality I associate with the region.

The Cuyahoga is of course the kinkiest of rivers, both in the sense that it is constantly bending and in the sense that it indulges in unnaturally perverse behavior for a river, such as bursting into flames.

[Merry Brooks]

Part 2

Dick Picture Perfect

Thankfully no one has ever sent me a dick picture, even more thankfully this guy hasnt! Mind, if he's seen my picture, he wouldnt want to! As always with Redsilver, the banter between characters is very good. Fun read
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Merger — Spirals

Note to Mr Card, my neck is available any time you wish! Mind, he probably likes his blood a little younger, but anyway... Also, does he like willing victims, begging him to bite them? Oh goodness, where is this club, and how do I get a job? Story is great, and I just loved the method of getting the message delivered, that really is quite something. I will have to pass on bonus chapter, unfortunately
High end of definitely enjoyed. If Mr Card wishes to discuss, feel free to bite me, sorry, message me

String

Fun hypno piece, with a ball of string, and a mind that gets tied in knots. Sorry, couldnt resist. Is delightfully done, hypno lovers will love
Definitely enjoyed

Upregulated

I wouldnt have minded being a research subject on this, to be honest. Oh fine, I'd have loved it. Reggie could have his way with me, anytime. Loved the way it all played out at the end too.
High end of definitely enjoyed. If Reggie wants to make me give more, yes please!

More to follow

[Pan]

I wondered why no one was commenting on the story! Yeah, the "super nerdy" aspect was directly from the story I'm adapting, so I felt like it was key to keep it in. Hopefully, as Shadra said, it's not enough to stop people from enjoying the tale as a whole.

[SB]

This was the first time I read something in Femdom Mind Control Flash Fiction. It's refreshing to read something that's so one-and-done. I'm not sure which of the three I liked the most. Bugs was probably the most creepily enjoyable. Winter and Summer probably had the hotter MC moment. I do wonder, though... the gum thing. I can't tell if he intentionally spit it out, or if it was an accident. I know he was intended to be shown as a creep, but even then I don't really see him doing that on purpose. Yet I also don't really see how one could accidentally spit gum into someone else's face. And come on, that line about six months is funny!

Thank you. I'm a big fan of flash fiction and an even bigger fan of micro-fiction which is truly a speciality of mine. In these snippets I go for different moods whenever possible. Bugs was inspired by my love of horror stories hence the creepiness factor. Winter and Summer is meant to be somewhat amusing and the gum thing is accidental. He chokes when she talks about mind-controlled slaves and spits it out, no Heimlich Maneuver required. He is indeed a bit of a creep but Summer isn't exactly a miss goody-two-shoes either. Her punishment is overkill but I had fun with the concept and the same goes for the invisible boobs in the other tale of this batch.

Thanks again.

[Shadra]

Thank you. I'm a big fan of flash fiction and an even bigger fan of micro-fiction which is truly a speciality of mine. In these snippets I go for different moods whenever possible. Bugs was inspired by my love of horror stories hence the creepiness factor. Winter and Summer is meant to be somewhat amusing and the gum thing is accidental. He chokes when she talks about mind-controlled slaves and spits it out, no Heimlich Maneuver required. He is indeed a bit of a creep but Summer isn't exactly a miss goody-two-shoes either. Her punishment is overkill but I had fun with the concept and the same goes for the invisible boobs in the other tale of this batch.

Thanks again.

It's certainly a commendable ability to be able to write so many contained shorts and keep them all fresh and unique. While male-sub isn't quite to my fancy, based on what I've read, I'll have to start going through the others at some point. I'd agree that Summer went a bit overboard, but it was still a fun thing to imagine!

I didn't get as much reading time today as I would have liked, but I did finish the latest chapter of Unholy Rites. Seeing her next meetup with the priest was just as good as the first one. The story is written really well, and is a joy to read. A bit more is revealed about the priest, but still leaves so many questions to be answered, which is nice. As for her home/love life... I can only hope something happens to a select few people to resolve some of the issues, because man is it a bit of a downer.

[Redsliver]

Dick Picture Perfect

Thankfully no one has ever sent me a dick picture, even more thankfully this guy hasnt! Mind, if he's seen my picture, he wouldnt want to! As always with Redsilver, the banter between characters is very good. Fun read
High end of definitely enjoyed

Will isn't the best guy is he? I'm glad he sticks out and is so different from Leo and Gene. Thanks as always!

[neverm1nd]

Thank you so much, Cerebeus, Shadra, and 321 for your overwhelmingly generous words. I'm blushing over here. To receive praise from so many fronts really means a lot, and I'm happy you enjoyed my writing. Thanks again, and thank you also for the shout-out to Contract, Cerebus!

Concerning something that Shadra addressed:

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[Shadra]

Thank you so much, Cerebeus, Shadra, and 321 for your overwhelmingly generous words. I'm blushing over here. To receive praise from so many fronts really means a lot, and I'm happy you enjoyed my writing.

It was a pleasure to read, and you deserve to know that! I think I can see why my suggestion wouldn't work with the story, but yeah... still would have been a great scene. You'll have to let me know if you use it in another story like you suggested!

Now that I've finished watching Stranger Things, I had some time to get some more stories in. First up, Deer Me. To be honest, transformation stories aren't really my thing, but it was still a short, fun read.

I really enjoyed the first chapter of Dick Picture Perfect, but I guess it's just a bit too much sex and not enough MC for me to really get into it. Don't get me wrong, it's really well written, and I'm impressed at how easy you make the conversations flow. Just not my style, so this will probably be the last chapter from me, sorry.

Upregulated was great. Part of this story reminded me of the movie Upgrade, though with a much less sinister plot. Story was paced very well, and it was fun getting into the head of the protagonist as all of the changes were made. I almost feel bad for the way things ended for two of the girls, but it was still amusing to see where the protagonist ends up afterwards.

The Word In Question. A lot of big paragraphs in this one, some of them containing dialogue between two different characters that made following along a tad difficult. I have to say, that line about your body ignoring the sensory input from the clothing you wear... kind of upset at the author because now I'm aware of it. Like when someone reminds you of the position of your tongue in your mouth, or that you are now aware of your own breathing. Okay, it wasn't really that frustrating to me, but did I get anyone else with that? Story had some interesting parts, but overall wasn't really my thing.

Lastly, I read X-Static. What a neat little mystery this was! Trying to imagine someone with those eyes is a bit chilling. And that reveal at the end was wonderfully... uh... revealed. Not to bring up another movie, but this reminded me of Blindness. Well... it was a book first, but both were good. Bit different than this story, but... if anyone's heard of that and read this, you'll probably understand the connection.

That's all for today!

[Redsliver]

I really enjoyed the first chapter of Dick Picture Perfect, but I guess it's just a bit too much sex and not enough MC for me to really get into it. Don't get me wrong, it's really well written, and I'm impressed at how easy you make the conversations flow. Just not my style, so this will probably be the last chapter from me, sorry.

Cool, thanks so much! I do like more subtler mind control and more sex so shame I'm not in your tastes but glad you liked what you did read.

[gyrd]

Well I finally did read "Massaged By My Nerdy Brother" and it is in fact terrific.  The 'nerd' part I just glided past and the rest was up to Pan's very high standard.

[Fortunato]

Thanks for the review Shadra. I prefer transformation stories over other types of MC (it's what brought me here in the first place), so I understand it's not for everyone. I am trying to write different types of stories, though, so maybe something else I've already written or have coming up would be more in your area of interest.

-Fortunato

[grey_shadow]

The Word In Question. A lot of big paragraphs in this one, some of them containing dialogue between two different characters that made following along a tad difficult. I have to say, that line about [redacted]... kind of upset at the author because now I'm aware of it. Like when someone reminds you of the [redacted], or that you are now aware [redacted]. Okay, it wasn't really that frustrating to me, but did I get anyone else with that? Story had some interesting parts, but overall wasn't really my thing.

A) I'm generally pretty resistant to such matters
B) Why would you do it anyway?

[Pan]

Well I finally did read "Massaged By My Nerdy Brother" and it is in fact terrific.  The 'nerd' part I just glided past and the rest was up to Pan's very high standard.

Aw, thanks Gyrd! I'm super proud of this one, tbh.

[mr potestas]

Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (1 new chapter)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

I must admit, this installment was a bit slow to get going. It was really more about character development, and in some ways, character confirming. Things are still moving forward between the siblings, if albeit a bit slower than before. Kacy wanting to hypnotize Bubba is a very enticing development. Very much a tease of an installment.

[Merry Brooks]

Last 4

Atonement (Half Shim)

Asking for a friend, does the mother have to care for the 'calf' our not? Love the whole thing with Daisy, just love the way thats all played out. Kylie lost any sympathy which she didnt have by what she did to Eve. Seriously, I would love the cow makeover, and definitely love the whole milking thing, I must say. Oh, story is brilliant too.
Definitely enjoyed. Would have got high end but for length thing with me

Crutch

OK, this ticks all my feelgood boxes, totally. Steff is adorable (regardless of the name), and I love her logic with the contract. Not complaining about the robot moment on there too. I love Tom, because he's trying to play this out in the best way possible for both of them. Its a lovely story line too.
Low end of much enjoyed, what the hell!

He Likes to Play With His Food

OK, fine, I wouldnt mind being his food too. I did feel the commands things towards the end were a bit lengthy, but that might just be a personal thing. Also, the way things ended up with Ashley, just hated that. So a real mixed feelings story for me.
Compromise mark, Low end of definitely enjoyed

Kingdom of Lost Memories

Oh fine, I loved this. Yes, if the queen wants an ancient, disabled slave, tell her to contact me. Sounds like she might be able to solve the disabled issue, anyway. As for the whole play of things of what happens to Irene, and not going down the most obvious route, loved it. Characters are all wonderfully written, as is the story
High end of definitely enjoyed

Thats it for this week. Thanks as always to all authors for their efforts, reviewed or otherwise

[badpenny]

Some thoughts on the handful of stories I've read so far...

He Likes to Play With His Food (mc mf md ds) (new)  by The Winged Scorpion
Bridget moved to a small town and took a waitress job there. Rent was cheap and the job paid really well. It’s almost as if she was drawn there to be sacrificed to a vampire or something...

I agree with lifmcs. This one is intense. I loved the first half of the story, when Bridget is falling under Fred’s thrall. It’s delicious and dark and, as lifmcs says, so well crafted. I also enjoyed the end, since I have a soft spot for stories that run relentlessly dark.

I think the nightclub can be tightened up. There came a point where I stopped reading and scrolled down to see I’d be rewarded once I got through a wall-o-italics (I was). I never did get through the text I scrolled past. I tried, but there came a point when I wasn’t getting anything out of it, so down to that delicious ending I went to revel in Bridget’s dehumanization.

I’ll be checking out Winged Scorpion’s next story!

Deer Me: A Christmas Spirits Story (mc ma) (new)  by Fortunato
A woman walks into an adult toystore that is only open one day a year.

So…reading this on the heels of “He Likes to Play With His Food” had me reading this through a pretty dark lens. I love how sudden the MC is here. Dana offers up a token protest when the shop owner sweetly insists she try out a butt plug but doesn’t acknowledge that it’s not at all normal to drop her pants in the middle of a store.

Nor is her transformation normal, except it is to her. Perfectly normal. As is her need to find the owner of that shop.

I love how unaware Dana was and how helpless she was to stop her transformation. Not that she wanted to.

I Hate My Master (mc mm) (new)  by maxrpotter
Mark moves in with a new roommate, and finds himself getting annoyed by a few small things about him, like when he leaves dishes in the sink, or when he leaves his clothes around the place, or when he gives Mark orders that he is unable to disobey.

Who doesn’t have an awful roommate story or two? I don’t know who’s the worse roommate here. Mark for bringing home “a few” chicks for some intentionally loud sex specifically so Chris would hear it, or Chris for turning Mark into his unwillingly-willing slave. (Just kidding. It’s Mark. Have some respect for thin walls and all that.)

Chris’s casual orders at the beginning of the story are hotter than they have a right to be given how non-sexual they are. I can safely say this is the first time an order to clean the bathroom got me all hot and bothered. I love how confident Chris is in his knowledge Mark will obey, no questions asked. (At least not until Chris lets him.)

I do not at all hate Mark’s master and am looking forward to future chapters.

Split Slave (mc ff ma bd ds hm) (new)  by Skaetlett
Delta, a non-binary, kidnapped sex slave with a protective alternate personality, gets auctioned off to a multimillionaire who seems to have more in store than they’re ready for. Their Mistress thinks she knows everything about them and is wrong.

So far, I’ve only read the prologue and first chapter. Skaetlett dropped the first 10 chapters in this update, and I’ll be going back to read more. This looks like it’s shaping up to be a story.

[Fortunato]

I appreciate the review badpenny! I'm glad you liked it.

-Fortunato

[Merry Brooks]

Thanks to Fortunato for pointing out I'd missing posting one section of review across. Yes, I'm blaming this on my brain issues, whether it was, or not!

Part 3

Fit to Serve

Is it wrong that I'd love to see someone buy the matching butlers uniform for Jay? Mindy, please...? Dont get me wrong, I still love what the maid outfits do to the wearer, and I'd love to wear one, but sometimes a guy can just get so much of a jerk, that...? Other than that, the story is as good as ever
High end of definitely enjoyed. Nearly marked it down a notch, but fine, being good

Nighthawks

Oh fine, I loved this. Its not strictly Rom-MC, but its pretty close. Its very much fair to say that Sue was consenting to quite a degree here, for sure. Its well written, handled wonderful, and loved the build to the inevitable result.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Upgrades

Before we go further, let me just mention one thing, given Roberta is a character I created. I did not in any way interact in the writing of this, or read any of it before posting. Seriously, its another brilliant JD story, and fine I love that machine, though my interest in it is more in Machina's way of using it, I must say. So yes, I should feel sorry for poor Robbie, but I dont, yet, anyway.
High end of definitely enjoyed. I might feel more, but I know that would be bias!

X-Static Process

Loved this too, and how it all played out. It is a bit dark, but its very cleverly handled. Not sure if I'd want to be a victim, or not, but it would definitely be interesting. Useful high JB quality
High end of definitely enjoyed

Last 4 to follow

[me-chan]

Blink, Wink, Sink

A fun little hypno piece that I just about managed to avoid sinking into, lol. But yes, I could easily imagine some doing so, susceptible to such things, shall we suggest?
Definitely enjoyed

Wasn't sure what your take on this would be Merry, but glad it got a definitely enjoyed out of you. And glad you avoided sinking, lest someone like Sabrina would've had to come pull you out or something.

I suppose stories like Blink, Wink, Sink just aren't for me. That said, it was well written for what it was, I just didn't get anything out of it personally.

Thank you for the compliment Shadra, and since stories like this aren't your preference, thanks for giving it a shot.

[Merry Brooks]

Who said I'd want to be pulled out? Mind, I suspect they would want to give me, as a woman, the dominant version of that makeover!

[me-chan]

Who said I'd want to be pulled out?

Fair point.

Mind, I suspect they would want to give me, as a woman, the dominant version of that makeover!

Hey, you never know.

[Lycanthrope]

In my very limited reading time I've been more or less keeping up with Blackie's "Ashes" and Sidia's "Binding Rings." I'd like to recognize a new story this week, though, that I very much enjoyed. I'm looking forward to more chapters!

Crutch (mc mf md ma) (1 new chapter)  by CuyahogaKingKong
A college student wants to help a classmate who just knee surgery, and ends up hypnotizing her to be his slave.

[CuyahogaKingKong]

Thanks Merry and Lycanthrope.  There's going to be more Crutch.  At least three more chapters is the plan as of this moment.  Essentially I know what the last chapter is but I keep thinking up things that might happen between here and there.

[Lycanthrope]

Thanks Merry and Lycanthrope.  There's going to be more Crutch.  At least three more chapters is the plan as of this moment.  Essentially I know what the last chapter is but I keep thinking up things that might happen between here and there.

I'm glad there will be more to the story, and I completely understand stories coming to life and demanding that you make them bigger. In 2010 I started a story that I figured I could finish for that month's Arena event. Nine months later I'd somehow written an erotic sci-fi novel.

[Merry Brooks]

Thanks Merry and Lycanthrope.  There's going to be more Crutch.  At least three more chapters is the plan as of this moment.  Essentially I know what the last chapter is but I keep thinking up things that might happen between here and there.

I'm glad there will be more to the story, and I completely understand stories coming to life and demanding that you make them bigger. In 2010 I started a story that I figured I could finish for that month's Arena event. Nine months later I'd somehow written an erotic sci-fi novel.

And if its the one I think it was, what a classic it was too!

[CuyahogaKingKong]

Thanks Merry and Lycanthrope.  There's going to be more Crutch.  At least three more chapters is the plan as of this moment.  Essentially I know what the last chapter is but I keep thinking up things that might happen between here and there.

I'm glad there will be more to the story, and I completely understand stories coming to life and demanding that you make them bigger. In 2010 I started a story that I figured I could finish for that month's Arena event. Nine months later I'd somehow written an erotic sci-fi novel.

The worst thing is I just now thought up an outline for a Crutch sequel.

[Merry Brooks]

And why not? Though unless you've finished the original, I would hold fire on writing it, in case a character gets feisty, and requires a rewrite

[Blackie]

The worst thing is I just now thought up an outline for a Crutch sequel.

Pshaw. And tut. This is clearly far from the worst thing at all. I anticipate your next chapter as I stall on my own (too much work all around the clock this week).