New Releases - June 29th 2019

[Anostus]

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Achieving My Destiny (mc mf md ma gr ft in) (new)  by Raptor4d4
“Head in the Clouds” Carl has been mocked all his life for his strange tastes and fetishes. Well, let them laugh. After years of study and dedication, Carl has created the tool that will change his life forever…

Algorithm (mc ff mf fd md) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Tiffany’s friends discover the mind blanking capabilities of an audio visual sensory input algorithm.  It isn’t long before they want to know how powerful the algorithm can be, but they will need test subjects: willing or otherwise…

Amareth Falls (mc ff bd ft sf) (new)  by Miss Praxis
In the far future where nanotech has become a burgeoning new enterprise, corporations rule whole planets and individuals are often taken for granted. A former mercenary named Amareth is captured by an evil crime boss and her AI. She is slowly and methodically twisted to their whims.

And, Wide Awake (mc fd) (new)  by me-chan
A friend lends a helping hand discerning being awake or otherwise.

Ashes (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Blackie
The family raised him not to use his ability on those without the ability. The world isn’t supposed to know the family exists. Or families. When he uses it to defend himself and is seen without knowing who it was, his world turns upside down on him.

Atonement (Half Shim) (mc ff ft gr la) (1 new chapter)  by Half Shim
Morgan is sent to the Farm to atone for her crimes.

Behaviour Modification (mc mm) (1 new chapter)  by The Slaver
A therapist attemps to cure a police officer with anger issues.

Binding Rings (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A chance discovery changes a young man’s life—and not always for the better.

Blizzard (mc mf ff) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
When Gene treats a strange visitor to better hospitality than she thinks she’s worth, she overcompensates him with three beautiful co-ed princesses. Auditors have been notified of the discrepancy.

Deep Undercover (mc mf md fd) (2 new chapters)  by 321
Paul is a private eye who dabbles in hypnosis. Cassie is his beautiful client. But there’s more to their relationship—and their case—than meets the eye.

Diary of a Hypnotist (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Atte. Akisa
A hypnotist recounts his exploits, both present and past, for the benefit of posterity.

Editing Reality Book Two: Sultry Fantasies Unleashed (mc mf gr in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
Steve gets a phone app that lets him edit other people.

Emma and the Ultimate Scam Artist (mc ff rb ft) (4 new chapters)  by Roboman127
Four people try to scam an ancient scam artist.

An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement (mc ff mf md ft) (1 new chapter)  by Mr. Scade
As Joan’s sister, Simmone, starts behaving mightily strange. Joan takes it upon herself to investigate why her sister is not participating in their sisterly activities. This decision takes her down a spiral of family secrets and enforced fetishism, as she slowly learns that someone has been in control of her family for a long time.

Fair Game (mc mf) (new)  by Sen Oluguat
Nobody likes playing trivia with the know-it-all Tiffany, but maybe there’s a way they can make the game more fair...

Fit to Serve (mc mf md ma ft) (2 new chapters)  by Fortunato
Jay gets his girlfriend a maid’s outfit for Christmas, just like the one that Tyrone got his wife.

Foot Star (mc ft) (new)  by Fortunato
A young woman becomes a media sensation after opening a series of special training videos.

Frontend Development (mc ff) (new)  by Cassandra Cavenaugh
Rose wonders why she is acting so submissive towards the one-night-stand she just woke up with.

Hocus Pocus (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Jan is not very enthusiastic when her friends drag her to a magic show.

Hostel (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by 321
Rebecca’s trip to Berlin takes an interesting turn.

In a Glance (mc ff cb ds ex) (1 new chapter)  by Madam Kistulot
Heart learns what it means to be a part of Chronos, and learns more about herself thanks to an appointment with The Lady.

Massaged By My Nerdy Brother (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by BurroGirl18 and Pan
A few innocent massages with her brother goes too far.

The Merger — Spirals (mc mf ff fd md) (1 new chapter)  by Sleepy Hypno
Mysterious players move to take ownership of the Spirals Nightclub, while Midnight acclimates to her new surroundings in New Chicago.

Mind-Control Panties (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by mypenname3000
A mysterious figure adds special items to the inventory of trendy clothing stores—panties with special phrases written on them.

Miss Calculated (mc mf) (new)  by Sen Oluguat
Doctor Valerie Powers invents a device to bimbofy her rival. Things don’t go quite according to plan.

Nani the Fuck (mc ff ds hm hu) (new)  by Skaetlett
Justine’s perfect life takes a drastic turn when she meets Giselle, local anime enthusiast at her college and skilled hypnotist.

Naughty Girl (mc mf md) (new)  by Fortunato
A call center employee deals with a diffcult customer.

Night Time Nudging (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
When a brother learns that his sister uses ASMR to sleep at night, an idea sparks in his head. What if he replaced the audio-files his sister listens to with hypnotic recordings?

Ordering On-line on Slaver’s Bay (mc mf md) (new)  by Chrysostomon
Terry and Bob discuss the various options for buying slaves on a dark web site.

Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (1 new chapter)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

River City Stories, Volume 4 (mc mf ff md fd rb cb) (new)  by Betsy Leohtar; Greyscribbler; J. Darksong; Robotunit8; Somnophile and Zyzzyva
Another group of stories taking place in River City, by another varied group of authors.

Skeinbound (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Meleva
Three young women set out on a winter’s journey, to prove their new adulthood or perish in the process. One trying to keep them fed, one trying to keep them safe, and one who’ll try anything to keep them all together.

Sleeping Dogs (mc ff bd) (new)  by controlthruhypno
A woman comes home to find her girlfriend cheating on her, with the neighbor’s 18 year old son of all people.

A Standard Physical (mc mf md) (new)  by MissV
Miss Venters has trouble controlling herself when she returns for a follow-up exam from Doctor Green.

Subroutine (Kallie) (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Kallie
Lori, a college student, discovers she has a hypnotic trigger that turns her into a mindless, obedient drone. How? Why? And what’s going to happen when her roommate finds out?

Takedown: Agent Leidner (mc mm) (new)  by The Slaver
A homophobic secret agent undergoes a psycho-debriefing.

Trials and Trances (mc ff mf fd) (1 new chapter)  by CrystalWitch
Four friends begin a hypnotic roleplaying game.

The Ultimate Rush (mc mf fd) (new)  by S. B.
A game of hide-and-seek inside an allegedly haunted house proves to be Matthew’s demise.

Whatever Gets You Through The Night (mc ma) (1 new chapter)  by T.MaskedWriter
A movie shoot in San Finzione is interrupted by a real-life murder.

Wolfords (mc ff hm) (1 new chapter)  by Trixie Adara
Michelle works for a terror of a boss, Mrs. Wasserman, who has a new product that may help with Michelle’s low productivity.

ZXY (mc mf md) (new)  by Jukebox
Miku’s a competitive woman, and she’s determined to hold out a little bit longer than last time before she sinks into Chris’s obedient trance. But even something as simple as reciting the alphabet backwards becomes complicated when you’re being hypnotized.

[321]

Yay! New things! Shiny new things!

Just a note on Deep Undercover: There's a slight title error there. It should be "Endgame 1-A" and "Endgame 1-B" for the two newest chapters. This is part of the experiment for this story- I'm intending to write several endings that all branch off from Part Eight. Eventually there will be an "Endgame 2-A" and an "Endgame 3-A" (etc etc).

[Shadra]

Just browising through, lots of good good stories this week it seems. Too bad I'm at work right now...

Did get to read Algorithm though. Probably one of the few times a story has managed to make me laugh out loud. Was a very enjoyable, focused chapter, that of course also leaves you wanting to see what may happen next.

[321]

Another hot, sexy, and sweet chapter of Blizzard. It's nice to think of snow and cold on a hot summer's day like today. 

Gene has really grown over the course of the story, and it shows here as he deals with several of the story's more ambiguous characters. and at the end of the day, he's got three playful, beautiful, slightly-more-burdened-by-credit-card-debt* girls waiting for him. 

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[CerebusOne]

321 continues the glorious two fisted assault with Deep Undercover and Hostel.

The first chapter taken Taken at face value is stunning triumph for Avery and the evil side of the game and I have nothing wrong with that. Some of the best stories, some of my favorites ended just that way both on this site and movies and novels.

Tara here is completely lost. The one person she trusted most, Paul is dead at her hands. Tara has in essence become Cassie. Just a willing slave of Avery and if she killed Paul there is nothing she would not do for him.

She tops it off by subsuming Megan for her master.

That last sentence, "This has turned out to be an amazing week". Yeah, it sure has. And the new Tara is so very happy about it. Like she got a long sought after job promotion. I bet Paul felt that way too, just in the inverse way, in his last moments before the woman he loved killed him. Amazing in exactly what he feared and could have been prevented had the confident, smart Tara listened to his warnings.

It this is indeed the dark ending, you made it with cold blood that really shakes a reader up, seeing Tara so happy to be bad and so willing. And I mean that in the best way possible. Chilling.....

If it really is going that way. With 321 the curve-balls are always being swung at. Why am I using a baseball metaphor? I hate that sport.

In the next chapter we get a lot more lowdown on events. We also get some of the hottest MC I have ever read. Thanks 321!!

Tara's thoughts about Avery and what she is willing to do was just volcanic. And you wrote it to perfection.

I just LOVED the method she came up with and used on Megan to elicit Paul's hidden keys that installed in her for safety just for this kind of situation. You could have just gone a direct same old route of more control, but no, that was so very slick and hot. Just the supreme trickster. And the fact that Megan was unawares was just the cherry on top. Both of them, Tara and Megan under control, lost, confused betraying and being betrayed.

And of course Tara is so messed up she is still turned into Cassie for her meeting with the Lieutenant. Also was great touch where she is jealous of Cassie and hates to become her for fear of losing time with Avery.

This whole chapter was really MC at it's best, both in description and thought. Just pure brilliance in all ways.....and as a huge bonus...a great plot! What else could a reader ask for?

Avery really seems to be on top of the situation in every way right now. But I wonder....Paul was a pretty sharp cat and I don't think he went down so easily.

The line of the chapter for me 4321:  "Master loves me as much as I love him."

Yeah, Tara, sure he does.

But I know one thing, I love this amazing story and I don't need to be hypnotized to believe that.

Then of course we have Hostelwhich now could be called, more accurately Brothel.

Sweet Alice reveals some secrets to her thrall Rebecca. Why not? She's under her control and Alice has big plans for her.

Rebecca and Emily meet again but they don't know it's really each other thanks to Alice's mental ministrations on both of them.

There is an exchange between them where Emily talks about how her 'Rebecca' is a hypnotist where you get the feeling Rebecca is going to make this breakthrough and start to realize what has happened.....she felt so close there.....

Rebecca has pangs of conscience about what she learns and about Olivia. But Alice is always there, the devil in disguise, trying to keep Rebecca nicely in the fold.

We also get more about the hypnotic history of Rebecca and Emily long before they went to Europe. I said it before and I'll say it again, I think this history will play a part in what eventually happens.

In the end, something very interesting happens. And it makes me wonder.....did Rebecca have that first breakthrough?

Another great chapter in the second terrific story by 321.

Amareth Falls by Miss Praxis give an excruciating blow by blow account of a woman's conversion into something else. Since Praxis made me like and care for the victim, Amereth, it was hard to take at times. But that didn't mean it wasn't hot or amazing to read. It was both.

The world building here and fairy were also very unique and so well done. I really liked everything about this story. Well thought out and written in all levels.

[CuyahogaKingKong]

See fear of that kind of thing is what's held me back from getting into Deep Undercover.  Reminds me of the brutally grim endings of the Adjusters.  Something about Deep Undercover raised warnings of a similarly grim outcome.

I think I'll continue to hold off until there's a clear consensus on which one is the good/happy/Not bleak ending.  I'm unusually sensitive to such things.

[SB]

My story is missing from the list above for some reason but it's on the What's New page at EMCSA. It's this one.

https://mcstories.com/UltimateRush/index.html

[Anostus]

My story is missing from the list above for some reason but it's on the What's New page at EMCSA. It's this one.

https://mcstories.com/UltimateRush/index.html

That is odd. I've recopied the text, and it appears to be in there now.

[321]

My story is missing from the list above for some reason but it's on the What's New page at EMCSA. It's this one.

https://mcstories.com/UltimateRush/index.html

That is odd. I've recopied the text, and it appears to be in there now.

*waves pocket watch* Of course it's there... it's always been there. You just didn't see it the first time, but it was there... you're certain of it now...

Also, a haunted house story? I'm gonna have to check this out right now.

EDIT: That was a great short, S.B. Incredibly spooky and just the perfect dash of disorienting, nightmarish horror to boot. With ONE exception.

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Someone please hypnotize me into forgetting that! 

[fumanchu]

Just have time for a short comment.  321 and Carefully Random are just killing it. 

[SB]

That is odd. I've recopied the text, and it appears to be in there now.

I suspect Simon forgot to add it the first time around and then updated the page in-between which would explain the inconsistency. No biggie.

*waves pocket watch* Of course it's there... it's always been there. You just didn't see it the first time, but it was there... you're certain of it now...

Also, a haunted house story? I'm gonna have to check this out right now.

EDIT: That was a great short, S.B. Incredibly spooky and just the perfect dash of disorienting, nightmarish horror to boot. With ONE exception.

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Someone please hypnotize me into forgetting that! 

Thanks. I love horror stories which is why I published this a while ago:

<shameless self-promoting another side of my writing>

https://amzn.to/2MFOKoH

</shameless self-promoting another side of my writing>

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[Writer345]

Subroutine (Kallie)  has got me well and truely hooked.  I particularly like the slow pace and the uncertainty in the minds of the girls.

Unfortunately there seems to be a lag between the posting of each segment but the story is well worth the wait.  Very little seems to happen each time but there is a definate and inexorable build up towards........?

Come on, Kallie, lets see the next chapter.

[Merry Brooks]

Getting started here. And for those who havent noticed yet, there is a swansong set of pieces this week from some old lady who probably should have retired years ago, not just now!

Algorithm

The trouble I have with this is deciding which would be the most fun role for me here. It should be Alice, but... This chapter is as strong, and delightfully as ever, and you should go read it, programmed or not. Cant wait to read the next bit, given where this is left.
High end of definitely enjoyed

And, Wide Awake

Fun hypno piece, loved the teasing going on in this. And thats all before the big reveal at the end, which I just loved. Must be careful who I get as a chauffeur when I need one!
Definitely enjoyed

The Merger — Spirals

Sorry, but it has to be said. Mr Card, here is my neck, please come and bite it! If you wish to seduce me first, thats fine, but seriously... And yes, I've worked out the surname, lol! Seriously, the scene before he arrives on the scene is red hot for me too. This is a great series
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Ultimate Rush

Yes, be careful who with, and where you play hide and seek lol. And yes, again, that vampire could take me anytime she wished. A great build, to the inevitable fd climax. This is fun, I must say
High end of definitely enjoyed

ZXY

Another fun hypno piece, this time its pretty clear where we're heading, with minimal resistance, though I do wonder how much she really wanted to resist in first place?
Definitely enjoyed

More to follow

[321]

Thank you for the kind words, CerebusOne and fumanchu. 

And don't worry, CuyahogaKingKong! At least one of these endings will end happily!

Just finished the latest chapter of Subroutine and whoa, everything I like about this story is on display here. Harper wakes up from her brainwashing session (seen in Chapter Six) angry and ready to take down the person responsible for all of this. Or is she? Will the temptations of controlling her roommate, and being controlled by her in return, prove to be too much? Does our mysterious mind controller have a few more tricks up their sleeve?

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[strikeThree]

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I wonder what everyone else thinks about Harper's newfound insistence that they deal with the problem asap. On one hand, it's definitely a bit selfish. On the other:

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[Writer345]

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I wonder what everyone else thinks about Harper's newfound insistence that they deal with the problem asap. On one hand, it's definitely a bit selfish. On the other:

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Yes, I like your thinking

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[strikeThree]

Algorithm

The trouble I have with this is deciding which would be the most fun role for me here. It should be Alice, but... This chapter is as strong, and delightfully as ever, and you should go read it, programmed or not. Cant wait to read the next bit, given where this is left.
High end of definitely enjoyed

Always asking the difficult questions here  . For me personally, I find Erin's role maps best to my own preferences so far. I love the idea of fighting for control, and even gaining it to some degree, only to ultimately fall sway to the "real" winner I've tried so hard to defeat. Makes it that much more special than just being the pawn who gets caught early, but I definitely don't begrudge others their own preference.

Still a lot of story left to tell, though, so who knows where everything will wind up. For all we know, Alice might be the dark horse winner who winds up claiming everyone else in the end.   

[Merry Brooks]

She might well be so, but I have my doubts.

Part 2

Blizzard

Loved this whole chapter. The girls are cute, the family are great, and Gene just deserves a lucky break or two, and sometime he might get one with the weather!
High end of definitely enjoyed

Fair Game

OK, the end section spoiled it for me, because up until then it was a fun way of equalising (or more) the contest. But judging by the previous work, and the other one this week, that may be the authors style?
Low end of definitely enjoyed, definitely a compromise mark

Foot Star

I've never really got the foot fetish thing (though I have had mine 'worshipped') to be honest, but this is a fun story regardless, as Callie just gets herself in, ever deeper. Love the way that just changing toenail colour didnt work though.
High end of definitely enjoyed, being maybe a shade kind for a different idea?

Miss Calculated

Valerie sort of gets what she deserves, Rebecca, not sure, she didnt seem a charmer, for sure. Beyond a bit of 'be careful what you wish for', not a lot here for me.
Easy way out, no rating, just on taste, and feel

A Standard Physical

Cant say this did a lot for me, but it was a first effort, and enough to make me read at least one more. It lives up to its title, its pretty standard mind control stuff, but if that works for you, its nicely enough presented at least.
Low end of definitely enjoyed. Might be a notch lower, but I'll be kind for a newbie

More to follow

[Fortunato]

Thanks, Merry. Honestly, this was inspired by the idea of Changeme's Media Whore (which I haven't read in a long time) in that I wanted to write a story about somebody who becomes a different kind of celebrity and, after shooting it off to Simon, I realized I hadn't put that into an author's note. The idea seemed odd and new-ish, so I ran with it.

-Fortunato

[Redsliver]

Another hot, sexy, and sweet chapter of Blizzard. It's nice to think of snow and cold on a hot summer's day like today. 

Gene has really grown over the course of the story, and it shows here as he deals with several of the story's more ambiguous characters. and at the end of the day, he's got three playful, beautiful, slightly-more-burdened-by-credit-card-debt* girls waiting for him. 

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I'm really enjoying the way Gene's managed to grow. I've been trying to write Gene as a caterpillar in chrysalis to becoming a real hoopy frood who always knows where his towel is. And

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Blizzard

Loved this whole chapter. The girls are cute, the family are great, and Gene just deserves a lucky break or two, and sometime he might get one with the weather!
High end of definitely enjoyed

He's certainly poised to get lucky. Glad you liked it!

[Carefully_Random]

Thanks Shadra, fumanchu, Merry, and strikeThree! Tiffany certainly does have her hands, umm mouth, well something full anyway 

And special thanks to Shadra for,  , browising through all my typos (repeatedly) and the the great editing advice.

Been short of time this week so only managed to read Sub Routine so far.  Super hot and interesting questions being raised by this one.  The plot, as they say, thickens...

Among other things...  (Yeah I'll get my coat)

[ErebusAether]

Fit to Serve: I'm still loving it. Has so many of my kinks. It's one stories I look forward to in all updates.

Foot Star: I'm not into feet, but I'm into females being mind controlled into sex workers. I'm also into them changing mentally and getting tattoos and doing there nails. I'd love a longer one about girls turning into porn stars of all kinds not just foot fetish ones.

[Merry Brooks]

Part 3

Achieving My Destiny

Diplomatic answer, nothing here I could possibly enjoy. Stick with this if sensitive, or the author
Less diplomatic answer (to amuse some)

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No rating, taste issues

Deep Undercover

Oh god, I'm loving this, but would still love a session, or 6, in Avery's brainwashing machine, but why would he want an old mare like me when he can get all these pretty young fillies? This is an ending, one of the options, but which one, who knows? Regardless, cant wait to see more
High end of definitely enjoyed. Avery puts me in that machine, Master can have whatever rating he desires!

Fit to Serve

I might have the issue that I'm beginning to dislike Jay, but other than that...? Loving the outfits, loving the changes in Courtney too. Maybe I need employment as a maid?
High end of definitely enjoyed

Naughty Girl

Oh goodness, I've worked in call centre for far too many years to not laugh at this. My big put off is all the Daddy (and odd Mummy) stuff, which is a big turn off for me, sadly. But if you enjoy that...?
Sorry, low end of definitely enjoyed is as good as I can give to a story with that much Daddy fixation

Whatever Gets You Through The Night

I love the 'B&E scene' that isnt, that is hilarious, especially so, when it comes to actually moving something, and the response. In truth the rest is as good as ever too. What is the Ministry of Science about to do, hmm?
High end of definitely enjoyed

More to follow

[Fortunato]

Thanks for the reviews Merry and Erebus! I'm obviously messing in some other fields, but I'm glad you're enjoying Fit to Serve still. Don't blame Jay for the way he is, Merry. He can't help it any more than poor Courtney can. And it's going to take a bit of time for them to acclimate to their new roles, so they need all the support they can get.

-Fortunato

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[...]Subroutine[...]

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I don't know how familiar Kallie is with the older story of the same title.

[raptor4d4]

Part 3

Achieving My Destiny

Diplomatic answer, nothing here I could possibly enjoy. Stick with this if sensitive, or the author
Less diplomatic answer (to amuse some)

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No rating, taste issues

I've noticed some time ago that my stories don't seem to be to your taste.  Which is fine.  Not everyone has the same tastes and others have expressed satisfaction with my work.  But to be fair, this story was born from one of my "sprint" attempts.  Sort of a quick and dirty story that I wrote to get me warmed up for other projects so I didn't put as much "umph" into it as I would some of my other stories with more depth. 

I've got more stories in the works, several part of a larger series.  At first glance some of them may seem simple and "written with one hand" as you so delicately put it but start putting them together and you'll see a puzzle coming together.  Got a lot of work to do and sadly not that much writing time to do them in these days but hopefully in the future you all will see more of my work.  Those of you who have expressed enjoyment of my stories, I thank you. 

As for you Merry Brooks, I found your threat of physical violence against me, even if made in "jest", to be less than amusing and in extremely poor taste.  If you truly find my work that dissatisfying, simply confine your review to a "No rating" or opt not to mention it at all as you've done in the past.  That is the truly diplomatic and decent approach. 

[gyrd]

I wonder what everyone else thinks about Harper's newfound insistence

Can't tell what this post or any of the posts in reply to it are talking about without opening the spoiler tags.  There seems to be a story out this week with a character named "Harper" in it.

[Merry Brooks]

Part 3

Achieving My Destiny

Diplomatic answer, nothing here I could possibly enjoy. Stick with this if sensitive, or the author
Less diplomatic answer (to amuse some)

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No rating, taste issues

I've noticed some time ago that my stories don't seem to be to your taste.  Which is fine.  Not everyone has the same tastes and others have expressed satisfaction with my work.  But to be fair, this story was born from one of my "sprint" attempts.  Sort of a quick and dirty story that I wrote to get me warmed up for other projects so I didn't put as much "umph" into it as I would some of my other stories with more depth. 

I've got more stories in the works, several part of a larger series.  At first glance some of them may seem simple and "written with one hand" as you so delicately put it but start putting them together and you'll see a puzzle coming together.  Got a lot of work to do and sadly not that much writing time to do them in these days but hopefully in the future you all will see more of my work.  Those of you who have expressed enjoyment of my stories, I thank you. 

As for you Merry Brooks, I found your threat of physical violence against me, even if made in "jest", to be less than amusing and in extremely poor taste.  If you truly find my work that dissatisfying, simply confine your review to a "No rating" or opt not to mention it at all as you've done in the past.  That is the truly diplomatic and decent approach.

I have the easy answer, I wont be reviewing any more in future, even more so after this.

And then people wonder I have considering giving up totally a few times, and am doing so again now. I honestly think some would be happy if they got no reviews at all! I might review something else at weekend, instead of stories

[Betsy]

Stuck in the Past
by Robotunit8

The Waxworks looks like a fun club. Wonder if I could go? It's over in America, which makes the commute a tad large for a drink, but what the hell, I could make it a fun weekend, couldn't I?
I admire Miss Nicholson enormously. If I woke up like that you'd be very hard pressed to find my sangfroid.
High end of definitely enjoyed.

A Whole Different Look
by Robotunit8

Now that's a disguise I could use myself. How much is it? You could make a legit fortune selling it to students. And there's a pod. I love pods. There's a turn this story takes I didn't expect. I love that. But there is a problem. The story turned sour when one of the masters suggested a rather unsavoury experiment on two innocent and charming characters. That was circumvented in the story, but it still leaves a sour taste. Would be high end otherwise.
Definitely enjoyed.

Walking on Sunshine
by Robotunit8

I don't think I'm giving away a spoiler when I say it's set in 1935 at Santa Monica Beach. I've never been there but ru8 makes it sound very nice indeed. Movie studios and technical stuff and weddings and honeymoons abound. This is a delightful fun story but it's marred badly by the message embedded in the story. That spoils it for me rather a lot, actually.
Low end of definitely enjoyed. Compromise rating.

[Writer345]

Part 3

Achieving My Destiny

Diplomatic answer, nothing here I could possibly enjoy. Stick with this if sensitive, or the author
Less diplomatic answer (to amuse some)

Sorry but you are not allowed to view spoiler contents.

No rating, taste issues

I've noticed some time ago that my stories don't seem to be to your taste.  Which is fine.  Not everyone has the same tastes and others have expressed satisfaction with my work.  But to be fair, this story was born from one of my "sprint" attempts.  Sort of a quick and dirty story that I wrote to get me warmed up for other projects so I didn't put as much "umph" into it as I would some of my other stories with more depth. 

I've got more stories in the works, several part of a larger series.  At first glance some of them may seem simple and "written with one hand" as you so delicately put it but start putting them together and you'll see a puzzle coming together.  Got a lot of work to do and sadly not that much writing time to do them in these days but hopefully in the future you all will see more of my work.  Those of you who have expressed enjoyment of my stories, I thank you. 

As for you Merry Brooks, I found your threat of physical violence against me, even if made in "jest", to be less than amusing and in extremely poor taste.  If you truly find my work that dissatisfying, simply confine your review to a "No rating" or opt not to mention it at all as you've done in the past.  That is the truly diplomatic and decent approach.

I have the easy answer, I wont be reviewing any more in future, even more so after this.

And then people wonder I have considering giving up totally a few times, and am doing so again now. I honestly think some would be happy if they got no reviews at all! I might review something else at weekend, instead of stories

Merry, please do not let one disgruntled 'person' upset you! 

Your reviews are the lynch-pin of this forum and us writers have come to look forward to your good humoured opininons of our work...  We need you! 

I for one enjoy reading about the stories that I don't have time to read and look forward to the good  natured banter that often develops between writers and yourself...  Your review pointed out a plot hole in my last story which, thanks to you, I was able to fill thus making "Yew and Me" much, much better as a result.

Please reconsider.  As  I said - We Need YOU!

[ExtantElan]

Part 3

Achieving My Destiny

Diplomatic answer, nothing here I could possibly enjoy. Stick with this if sensitive, or the author
Less diplomatic answer (to amuse some)

Sorry but you are not allowed to view spoiler contents.

No rating, taste issues

I've noticed some time ago that my stories don't seem to be to your taste.  Which is fine.  Not everyone has the same tastes and others have expressed satisfaction with my work.  But to be fair, this story was born from one of my "sprint" attempts.  Sort of a quick and dirty story that I wrote to get me warmed up for other projects so I didn't put as much "umph" into it as I would some of my other stories with more depth. 

I've got more stories in the works, several part of a larger series.  At first glance some of them may seem simple and "written with one hand" as you so delicately put it but start putting them together and you'll see a puzzle coming together.  Got a lot of work to do and sadly not that much writing time to do them in these days but hopefully in the future you all will see more of my work.  Those of you who have expressed enjoyment of my stories, I thank you. 

As for you Merry Brooks, I found your threat of physical violence against me, even if made in "jest", to be less than amusing and in extremely poor taste.  If you truly find my work that dissatisfying, simply confine your review to a "No rating" or opt not to mention it at all as you've done in the past.  That is the truly diplomatic and decent approach.

I have the easy answer, I wont be reviewing any more in future, even more so after this.

And then people wonder I have considering giving up totally a few times, and am doing so again now. I honestly think some would be happy if they got no reviews at all! I might review something else at weekend, instead of stories

As someone whom you only ever gave one bad review to (along with a threat of violence)  let me say I enjoyed it.  To each their own but I wouldnt mind if you beat me up more often. 

[Blackie]

I have the easy answer, I wont be reviewing any more in future, even more so after this.

I find your reviews  interesting. Alternate suggestion, if you don't like something that much, don't review it. The others who you've been encouraging here really seem to appreciate your time, your take, and your interest. You're encouraging people who need it. I don't need it, I'm a hermit and a brat. But others do.

[Betsy]

Merry, please do not let one disgruntled 'person' upset you! 

Writer345, I think you have slightly misunderstood Merry's position here. If you look back on your post, you'll find Merry's statement directly above your statement that I quoted here. To save you searching, I'll copy it here...

And then people wonder I have considering giving up totally a few times, and am doing so again now. I honestly think some would be happy if they got no reviews at all! I might review something else at weekend, instead of stories

To me, Merry's statement is unequivocal. It is NOT one person who has upset her, it's many, presumably over the years. That's my take.

Now, Writer345, I agree with your further statements

Your reviews are the lynch-pin of this forum and us writers have come to look forward to your good humoured opininons of our work...  We need you! 

I for one enjoy reading about the stories that I don't have time to read and look forward to the good  natured banter that often develops between writers and yourself...  Your review pointed out a plot hole in my last story which, thanks to you, I was able to fill thus making "Yew and Me" much, much better as a result.

Please reconsider.  As  I said - We Need YOU!

Merry is the only one who tries to review every story. Okay, she sometimes doesn't succeed, but there's no one else who comes close. She's a valuable asset who's loss will be felt by a lot of people here. But that's not the priority now, Merry is. I'll personally be devastated if Merry stops, but that's strictly up to her. Conditions change and the longer one is online the more problematic things get. We might, as you say, need her,  but is the feeling mutual?

The only position I think I can hold here is to back Merry in whatever decision she takes.

[Merry Brooks]

Thank you, Betsy, for the reviews. In the case of the first story, its not only the commute you might find an issue, the fact that the Club was 'in business' in 1927, and shut down, err, a few years ago, might also be an issue.
The second story, and the disguise, you'd have to ask Gene, or Nigel about the cost, Robbie was only the initial guinea pig. As to the 2 innocent and charming characters, thats not what Robbie said about them! They've got out of town, so I think they're safe now, anyway
I have been to Santa Monica Beach, a number of times, but never in 1935. Well, not in this life, I suspect Clara did on days off! Well, I'm not thrilled by the message you're talking about, but given how much of a struggle these were, and I had to leave JD to edit the mess, its a choice that has to be made. If they do sort out my brain sufficiently, then I would try writing again, but not otherwise. Indeed someone has suggested an alternate name, I've got an alternate concept idea, but it needs a doctor, Mr Frasier, or the like to do some major neural work for that to happen. I might also be getting some other bodywork issues sorted too.

And now, back to reviews, Part 4

An Episode of Lingerie Enslavement

I must be careful who I let buy me lingerie in future, clearly! Not that I've got a smart phone, but anyway... Oh fine, I'd love a satin negligee! Its certainly a fun story, thats for sure
High end of definitely enjoyed

Frontend Development

OK, this was sweet, and oh to be in Rose's place, and I can think of a few vintage actresses I'd enjoy being in the Willow role, opposite me. Like the fact its an interesting mix of consensual, and non consensual here
High end of definitely enjoyed

Hostel

I loved the casual way Alice owned up to what she ran, and as we know, its not strictly a hostel! Just a shame I'm far too old, and not attractive enough to get a stay there, I'd love it. Oh, and the whole story is an absolute delight too.
High end of definitely enjoyed. If Alice wants to brainwash me, she can have more

Nani the Fuck

A story of 2 halves. Loved the first half, not keen on the ending, but fine, I'm an old softy that way. But would I wear some of those outfits, you bet I would!
Low end of definitely enjoyed, as compromise

Subroutine (Kallie)

Oh god, so jealous of Harper here. Can someone please provide me with one of those latex suits, and masks, I'd happily put the mask on. And no, its not under my bed, as I have one of those beds with drawers in the bottom, whatever they're called? I loved the whole build here, as to how far Harper would take things, loved it.
High end of definitely enjoyed. If she's gone one more step, would have got more, but I suspect she will.

Last 4 to follow, though one of those is a number of sections, and quite lengthy, so not sure of when

[Merry Brooks]

Oh, and double post to cover all the comments.

Yes, it has happened a few times in the past, to put it mildly, both over comments, and spoiler complaints, which is I why I mention actual story content so much less now.

As to the current author, I'll say it once, he attacked at the wrong time, and that was mainly the reason for the outburst as it was. The last few days I've been in even more pain than usual, the back has been really bad, on top of all the brain issues I've got at the moment. And yes, I've got a brain scan on Friday, and however much I might enjoy the 'wired up with multiple electrodes' stuff (oh I will), I have to worry about what they might find. When the best option seems to be 'only epilepsy', thats not great?

ExtantElan, I worked out your stories, and me, werent going to get on, so I stopped reviewing, apologies if that hurts. As Pan will tell you, that doesnt mean I cant get on with people generally, it just helps to cut the workload.

I'm pretty certain I will carry on, unless they decide to put me down on Friday, lol. But yes, thank you for all the support, so much appreciated

[Betsy]

Thank you, Betsy, for the reviews. In the case of the first story, its not only the commute you might find an issue, the fact that the Club was 'in business' in 1927, and shut down, err, a few years ago, might also be an issue.

That's no problem. I'll use Ryanair.

[ExtantElan]

Oh, and double post to cover all the comments.

Yes, it has happened a few times in the past, to put it mildly, both over comments, and spoiler complaints, which is I why I mention actual story content so much less now.

As to the current author, I'll say it once, he attacked at the wrong time, and that was mainly the reason for the outburst as it was. The last few days I've been in even more pain than usual, the back has been really bad, on top of all the brain issues I've got at the moment. And yes, I've got a brain scan on Friday, and however much I might enjoy the 'wired up with multiple electrodes' stuff (oh I will), I have to worry about what they might find. When the best option seems to be 'only epilepsy', thats not great?

ExtantElan, I worked out your stories, and me, werent going to get on, so I stopped reviewing, apologies if that hurts. As Pan will tell you, that doesnt mean I cant get on with people generally, it just helps to cut the workload.

I'm pretty certain I will carry on, unless they decide to put me down on Friday, lol. But yes, thank you for all the support, so much appreciated

No hurts here, just showing an example where there is no need to hold a grudge. Its all good Merry, be well. Now I have to write a story about a catastrophic fire at a flapper convention...

[raptor4d4]

Merry, I'm not saying you should stop doing story reviews.  God knows there aren't enough of them out there.  Since I've started writing five years ago people, any sort of feedback I've gotten about my stories has been few and far between.  If you think my stories are bad, feel free to offer comments on how to improve.  If you don't like the overall theme of the story, simply say it's not to your tastes like you did in your "diplomatic" answer and move on.  The purpose of my earlier message was to address the fact that threatening to castrate me because you didn't like the content of my story was not a review or feedback.  It was a threat and that's not acceptable under any circumstances. 

I saw your follow-up message stating that my prior comment came at a bad time.  I'm sorry you're in pain and I genuinely hope that you recover.  Please do continue your work as a reviewer.  As I said, there aren't enough of them out there and I have enjoyed/appreciated your reviews of other stories in the past.  My earlier post was simply to point out that threats of violence against an author serve absolutely no purpose and, if anything, will only deter a writer from continuing to work and improve.  Long time ago a story I posted on AO3 that received a comment where someone told me I should go kill myself.  That comment got me down more than it should have and if not for the support of some good friends who enjoy my work I probably would have quit then and there. 

All I ask is that you please remember to show some tact, especially if you're attempting to offer a review about a story that you really disliked.  Now I hope you have a nice day and recover soon and, if you live in the USA, Happy 4th of July! 

[Writer345]

 Long time ago a story I posted on AO3 that received a comment where someone told me I should go kill myself. 

Yes one of my stories, I think it was on Literotica, received a similar comment...

I just posted back saying "You First"...  I never heard from the idiot again!

The one thing that I did notice about the Trolls on Litorotica, they all had the same name --- Anonymous!  And I bet that was the name of the one that had a go at you.

[Merry Brooks]

I once had a writer tell me that he was going to come and beat me up, for giving a spoiler on his story, even though it was near the end of the week, and most that were going to read it would have read it by then anyway. Funny thing is, he wasnt that far from me, but if he could find me, in the whole of Huddersfield, I'd be impressed!

No, Raptor, I'm not in the US, but thanks for the sentiment anyway. I posted a picture on Social Media today (Facebook, and Twitter) of Mae West dressed as the Statue of Liberty, thats my sort of level of 'humour', I'm afraid.

ExtantElan, what would be more interesting to me (and I'm sure a mind control element could be brought in) would be a soul swap into a young flapper's body. It nearly happened to one of my favourite silent movie actresses (that no one has ever heard of), Gertrude Olmstead in a 1925 movie with Lon Chaney, titled The Monster. She was restrained (of sorts) on a table, set to have her soul swapped with another, but was rescued before it happened. But me, swapped into a flapper body like her's, I'd be thrilled!
Now, if you want to turn that concept into a story, I might start reading yours again, lol! Challenge issued?

EEG is tomorrow, sadly only scanning electrodes, not brainwashing ones, but I can dream!

[ExtantElan]

ExtantElan, what would be more interesting to me (and I'm sure a mind control element could be brought in) would be a soul swap into a young flapper's body. It nearly happened to one of my favourite silent movie actresses (that no one has ever heard of), Gertrude Olmstead in a 1925 movie with Lon Chaney, titled The Monster. She was restrained (of sorts) on a table, set to have her soul swapped with another, but was rescued before it happened. But me, swapped into a flapper body like her's, I'd be thrilled!
Now, if you want to turn that concept into a story, I might start reading yours again, lol! Challenge issued?

EEG is tomorrow, sadly only scanning electrodes, not brainwashing ones, but I can dream!

Who said MC was just for the young?      My preference would just be with the MC without the swap, but whatev's
 It ill be a while, and probably under a different user name (though if you keep doing reviews this won't be a problem). Something you posted a while back struck me, and I have been holding on to the notion for a while though it will be changed by the time you read it.  The roaring 20's egyptology, soul swapping...

[strikeThree]

Yes one of my stories, I think it was on Literotica, received a similar comment...

I just posted back saying "You First"...  I never heard from the idiot again!

The one thing that I did notice about the Trolls on Litorotica, they all had the same name --- Anonymous!  And I bet that was the name of the one that had a go at you.

Literotica definitely has the trolliest commenters of anywhere i post to. Most of them are pretty nice, but a lot of places that sort of "go kill yourself" crowd doesn't even show up at all.

Storiesonline probably has the dumbest ones, though. I'm not fully convinced that a lot of them even read the story they're commenting over.

Fictionmania is easily the nicest. Maybe even too nice.

Mcstories basically doesn't have any, in my recent experience. Everyone stopped using email, or at least emailing me.

[Writer345]

ExtantElan, what would be more interesting to me (and I'm sure a mind control element could be brought in) would be a soul swap into a young flapper's body. It nearly happened to one of my favourite silent movie actresses (that no one has ever heard of), Gertrude Olmstead in a 1925 movie with Lon Chaney, titled The Monster. She was restrained (of sorts) on a table, set to have her soul swapped with another, but was rescued before it happened. But me, swapped into a flapper body like her's, I'd be thrilled!
Now, if you want to turn that concept into a story, I might start reading yours again, lol! Challenge issued?

EEG is tomorrow, sadly only scanning electrodes, not brainwashing ones, but I can dream!

Who said MC was just for the young?      My preference would just be with the MC without the swap, but whatev's
 It ill be a while, and probably under a different user name (though if you keep doing reviews this won't be a problem). Something you posted a while back struck me, and I have been holding on to the notion for a while though it will be changed by the time you read it.  The roaring 20's egyptology, soul swapping...

This was more or less the plot of "The Pyramids of Mars": a Dr Who adventure staring Tom Baker from back in the 1970's....

[CuyahogaKingKong]

Yes one of my stories, I think it was on Literotica, received a similar comment...

I just posted back saying "You First"...  I never heard from the idiot again!

The one thing that I did notice about the Trolls on Litorotica, they all had the same name --- Anonymous!  And I bet that was the name of the one that had a go at you.

Literotica definitely has the trolliest commenters of anywhere i post to. Most of them are pretty nice, but a lot of places that sort of "go kill yourself" crowd doesn't even show up at all.

Storiesonline probably has the dumbest ones, though. I'm not fully convinced that a lot of them even read the story they're commenting over.

Fictionmania is easily the nicest. Maybe even too nice.

Mcstories basically doesn't have any, in my recent experience. Everyone stopped using email, or at least emailing me.

I suddenly started getting some for Crutch.  I think five all together, all friendly and encouraging.  It probably helps that my stories are ridiculously nice, and thus unlikely to provoke rage.  People might roll their eyes at my saccharine nonsense but not take the time to threaten me over it.

[Merry Brooks]

Go read about it

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Monster_(1925_film)

Only snag with the gorgeous Gertrude is that I'd probably have to invite her to try out a handy lesbianator device, but other than that...

[321]

I suddenly started getting some for Crutch.  I think five all together, all friendly and encouraging.  It probably helps that my stories are ridiculously nice, and thus unlikely to provoke rage.  People might roll their eyes at my saccharine nonsense but not take the time to threaten me over it.

How dare you post a great, sweet, sexy, hot hypnosis story?? Why, I oughtta 

[gyrd]

Go read about it

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Monster_(1925_film)

Only snag with the gorgeous Gertrude is that I'd probably have to invite her to try out a handy lesbianator device, but other than that...

https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Film/TheMonster

[Blackie]

People might roll their eyes at my saccharine nonsense but not take the time to threaten me over it.

As a quality you pique my interest, given how dark my world is for fantasies. Results in a great appreciation of those not as dark as my own.

[mr potestas]

Properly Handled (mc mf ff md fd in) (1 new chapter)  by Extantelan
A brother and sister grow closer over a shared love of mind control and other various kinks and perversions.

I genuinely love Kacy's evolution as a character. Maybe "Kitten" was who she was deep down all along, but it did take some nudging for her to get to this point. The mind control was perhaps the key to making her what she now loves being. She does not need to be controlled anymore. Yet, she loves  that control, whether she is actively turning others on or being made to. Easily the hottest of the threesome!

[CuyahogaKingKong]

People might roll their eyes at my saccharine nonsense but not take the time to threaten me over it.

As a quality you pique my interest, given how dark my world is for fantasies. Results in a great appreciation of those not as dark as my own.

Over the past 20-odd years since I first read The Book (1st mc story I can remember) I've coincidentally been steadily losing the ability to imagine happiness, success, affection, etc in real life.  I've also been losing the ability to connect with real people. As a result I need positive fantasies and over empathize with fictional characters.  Its something In trying to work on and writing has actually been a big help.

[Blackie]

I've also been losing the ability to connect with real people. As a result I need positive fantasies and over empathize with fictional characters.  Its something In trying to work on and writing has actually been a big help.

I'm jaded myself. In addition to the depth of the abyss, I'm also a friggin' romantic sap. Positive stuff to be had in romantic comedy, after all.

I'm glad writing is helping.

[ExtantElan]

To Mr.Potestas:

Glad you like her, but who doesn't like a ride or die chick with a freaky side.

 I will say, as the story is about down to the finish line, she is actually spun out of Bobbi. One late night writing session took an odd turn and Bobbi exhibited some of the characteristics that Kacy has and while I then realized that my subconscious had been telling me all along I needed a third character and she needed to be X, which would also allow Bobbi to be the loveably flawed sexpot she is now. That's all I can say for  the time being, but it is good to hear you are enjoying it so far.

[321]

I never thought that I'd get to review a Robotunit8 story, much less three of them! 

Stuck in the Past
I love the idea of "historical" mind control and diabolical brainwashing conspiracies; I'd love to write one of my own one of these days. This one is short and sweet, and our protagonist suffers the added embarrassment of being programmed to forget all about it and then, years later, suddenly having it all come back to her! I do love how the secret club just... ends. Were they raided by the feds? Did they feel the heat from some supers? Did the place just fail to make rent, like the coffee shop down the street from me? If I missed a clue, don't tell me- I like the story this way!

A Whole Different Look
Ah, secret agents and mind control! And a fantastic identity-changing invention that our heroine gets to try out, in more ways than one! Is it too much to hope that we'll see more of this in a future River City story?

Walking on Sunshine
One wonders if one of the -ahem- "talent scouts" on the beach that day would later go on to discover Rita Hayworth herself ("I've been looking for you for years- you still look great!" A fun afternoon at the beach, with many nods to the reader. Cannot imagine who this "other crazy woman" is, but I'm sure that I'll enjoy her stories as well!

[Merry Brooks]

I never thought that I'd get to review a Robotunit8 story, much less three of them! 

Stuck in the Past
I love the idea of "historical" mind control and diabolical brainwashing conspiracies; I'd love to write one of my own one of these days. This one is short and sweet, and our protagonist suffers the added embarrassment of being programmed to forget all about it and then, years later, suddenly having it all come back to her! I do love how the secret club just... ends. Were they raided by the feds? Did they feel the heat from some supers? Did the place just fail to make rent, like the coffee shop down the street from me? If I missed a clue, don't tell me- I like the story this way!

A Whole Different Look
Ah, secret agents and mind control! And a fantastic identity-changing invention that our heroine gets to try out, in more ways than one! Is it too much to hope that we'll see more of this in a future River City story?

Walking on Sunshine
One wonders if one of the -ahem- "talent scouts" on the beach that day would later go on to discover Rita Hayworth herself ("I've been looking for you for years- you still look great!" A fun afternoon at the beach, with many nods to the reader. Cannot imagine who this "other crazy woman" is, but I'm sure that I'll enjoy her stories as well!

If you like to think that way, lets just say the Crash killed off the business in Stuck In The Past,, as there would have been less wealthy clients after that event. The truth, I think they made business in a city for a few months, then when it started to get looked into, they moved elsewhere.
A Whole different skin, well, given JD came up with the idea initially, he may be planning to use it, but I cant speak for him. But fine, I wanted to give it a go before retiring, but thought making it the trial version, he can tweak it as he desires.
As to the crazy woman in Walking In Sunshine, I had to give myself one last cameo, lets face it. There are nearly 90 other stories on the archive by her, so if you do some back reading...?

[Merry Brooks]

And so to complete. Bit different set up, and longer than usual

Starting with the 3 standard ones

Amareth Falls

OK, fine, hot button pusher! That latex bodysuit, and hood sound absolutely amazing, to be honest. Well, maybe not the anal fitting, but otherwise (and yeah, I'd live with it if I had to)...But its not only that, I loved Sylphi as a character, she was brilliant. Sad back story, but if you want AI with attitude, she's the one! Great story as whole, so...
Low end of much enjoyed

Atonement (Half Shim)

And yes, my only possible complaint about this is chapter lengths! I'd rather go there, without causing a crime, but other than that... Great story line, great characters, and as for the milking process, well...
High end of definitely enjoyed, and yes, that is marked down for length

Sleeping Dogs

Story line really wasnt my scene, and really, really needs a major edit. If you can ignore the edit issue, and enjoy humiliation, its for you
No rating, tastes issue

And now to the variation on a formula

River City Stories, Volume 4

Let me say that the only story here I didnt really enjoy, was Kindred Spirit. Betsy will know why, way to many deaths, and I'm a sensitive old soul on those matters. Fine, the character of Harley Carpenter made me laugh, all the same. Other than that, all the stories not written by me (I am not narcissistic) are really good in their ways, and well worth reading if you get the time, and havent done so already. Because so chapter is over 10 K, I'll give it high end of definitely enjoyed

As to mine, as mentioned, thats it for me, shortly of medical miracles being done. And fine, I'm an old softy, wanted both of my characters to go out having fun, though I gather that wont last long for Robbie at least. I've wanted to do something with Native American people, and JD and I had been talking about the Adjustment Skins, I got approval, and went with it. She wasnt originally going to Hawaii, was going to Alaska, but I found Hawaii on Google translate, but not Inuit, so...
As to Billie, I wanted to go back to the 20's with her, she is meant to be Flapper Girl, after all! And yes, I wanted to make the marriage formal too! I have no idea if when she gets written about again by others, they will use her maiden name, or her married one, not for me to decide.

I also want to thank again all those that have read my 'rubbish' over nearly 20 years for putting up with all my stuff, an awful lot of wish fantasy in there! The reviews will continue for now, as will the 55 word stuff at the Garden, but that will be it. Sorry, ability to focus is busted, a hazard of my brain going slightly AWOL, so I'm taking the hint

Oh, and finally, as always, thats all for this update, thanks as always to all authors, reviewed or not

[SB]

The Ultimate Rush

Yes, be careful who with, and where you play hide and seek lol. And yes, again, that vampire could take me anytime she wished. A great build, to the inevitable fd climax. This is fun, I must say
High end of definitely enjoyed

My sincerest apologies for the late reply, dear, but work has been crazy as of late and I won't be getting off days for a while. I'm glad you enjoyed this little dream-like femdom/horror piece. Fun is always good. Thank you.

[greyscribbler]

River City Stories, Volume 4

Let me say that the only story here I didn't really enjoy, was Kindred Spirit. Betsy will know why, way too many deaths, and I'm a sensitive old soul on those matters. Fine, the character of Harley Carpenter made me laugh, all the same. Other than that, all the stories not written by me (I am not narcissistic) are really good in their ways, and well worth reading if you get the time, and haven't done so already. Because no chapter is over 10 K, I'll give it high end of definitely enjoyed

Thanks Merry. And thanks to JD for asking me to contribute.  I'd never tried writing int he superheroine genre before, so wasn't sure how I'd go.  I might try it again.

Greyscribbler

[Betsy]

River City Stories, Volume 4

Let me say that the only story here I didnt really enjoy, was Kindred Spirit. Betsy will know why, way to many deaths, and I'm a sensitive old soul on those matters. Fine, the character of Harley Carpenter made me laugh, all the same. Other than that, all the stories not written by me (I am not narcissistic) are really good in their ways, and well worth reading if you get the time, and havent done so already. Because so chapter is over 10 K, I'll give it high end of definitely enjoyed

As to mine, as mentioned, thats it for me, shortly of medical miracles being done. And fine, I'm an old softy, wanted both of my characters to go out having fun, though I gather that wont last long for Robbie at least. I've wanted to do something with Native American people, and JD and I had been talking about the Adjustment Skins, I got approval, and went with it. She wasnt originally going to Hawaii, was going to Alaska, but I found Hawaii on Google translate, but not Inuit, so...
As to Billie, I wanted to go back to the 20's with her, she is meant to be Flapper Girl, after all! And yes, I wanted to make the marriage formal too! I have no idea if when she gets written about again by others, they will use her maiden name, or her married one, not for me to decide.

I also want to thank again all those that have read my 'rubbish' over nearly 20 years for putting up with all my stuff, an awful lot of wish fantasy in there! The reviews will continue for now, as will the 55 word stuff at the Garden, but that will be it. Sorry, ability to focus is busted, a hazard of my brain going slightly AWOL, so I'm taking the hint

Thanks for ploughing through it and reporting on it, Merry. At least you liked Vampires. And FYI, my story 61 Days in River City was originally intended for this anthology, but I sort of got carried away with it. And, as you say, the other stories in this anthology are well worth reading.

[Half Shim]

And so to complete. Bit different set up, and longer than usual

Starting with the 3 standard ones

Amareth Falls

OK, fine, hot button pusher! That latex bodysuit, and hood sound absolutely amazing, to be honest. Well, maybe not the anal fitting, but otherwise (and yeah, I'd live with it if I had to)...But its not only that, I loved Sylphi as a character, she was brilliant. Sad back story, but if you want AI with attitude, she's the one! Great story as whole, so...
Low end of much enjoyed

Atonement (Half Shim)

And yes, my only possible complaint about this is chapter lengths! I'd rather go there, without causing a crime, but other than that... Great story line, great characters, and as for the milking process, well...
High end of definitely enjoyed, and yes, that is marked down for length

Sleeping Dogs

Story line really wasnt my scene, and really, really needs a major edit. If you can ignore the edit issue, and enjoy humiliation, its for you
No rating, tastes issue

And now to the variation on a formula

River City Stories, Volume 4

Let me say that the only story here I didnt really enjoy, was Kindred Spirit. Betsy will know why, way to many deaths, and I'm a sensitive old soul on those matters. Fine, the character of Harley Carpenter made me laugh, all the same. Other than that, all the stories not written by me (I am not narcissistic) are really good in their ways, and well worth reading if you get the time, and havent done so already. Because so chapter is over 10 K, I'll give it high end of definitely enjoyed

As to mine, as mentioned, thats it for me, shortly of medical miracles being done. And fine, I'm an old softy, wanted both of my characters to go out having fun, though I gather that wont last long for Robbie at least. I've wanted to do something with Native American people, and JD and I had been talking about the Adjustment Skins, I got approval, and went with it. She wasnt originally going to Hawaii, was going to Alaska, but I found Hawaii on Google translate, but not Inuit, so...
As to Billie, I wanted to go back to the 20's with her, she is meant to be Flapper Girl, after all! And yes, I wanted to make the marriage formal too! I have no idea if when she gets written about again by others, they will use her maiden name, or her married one, not for me to decide.

I also want to thank again all those that have read my 'rubbish' over nearly 20 years for putting up with all my stuff, an awful lot of wish fantasy in there! The reviews will continue for now, as will the 55 word stuff at the Garden, but that will be it. Sorry, ability to focus is busted, a hazard of my brain going slightly AWOL, so I'm taking the hint

Oh, and finally, as always, thats all for this update, thanks as always to all authors, reviewed or not

That's always the problem, isn't it? I get a good idea and it turns into a novel. I'll have to work on making more shorts without trying to expand them into something large. But... I'm still working on Atonement. Hopefully should be all done in the next month.

[Merry Brooks]

I have to be fair to all, so therefore any update of more than 10 K automatically gets a 1 notch markdown. Its purely because of trying to read a lot of stories in a short period, thats all

[Half Shim]

I have to be fair to all, so therefore any update of more than 10 K automatically gets a 1 notch markdown. Its purely because of trying to read a lot of stories in a short period, thats all

Fair enough.