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New Releases-March 23rd 2019
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Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate (mc mf ff md fd) (2 new chapters)  by 321
While handling what seems to be a routine kidnapping case, a trio of sexy private investigators uncover a diabolical mind control conspiracy.

Arabian Night (mc mm in hm bd ex) (new)  by Nicky Noxville
Jon is an engineer, stranded outside the United States of Columbia due to President Trumpetís travel ban. Fortunately, his fatherís family helps him find some life changing work to pass the time...

Bewitching Spells (mc fd) (new)  by CrystalWitch
Your mind is placed under a spell.

Binding Rings (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A chance discovery changes a young manís lifeóand not always for the better.

Clowning Around (mc ff ma ft hm in la bd ex hu) (new)  by J. F. Gargiulo
A woman wants to fulfill her lifelong dream of becoming a clown, and no one will get in her way...

Club Lust (mc ma fd md bd) (new)  by HB5211
Annie was consumed by work and her career.  When one of her friends gets an invitation to the hottest new club in town and can bring a friend, Annie has a decision to make.  Should she go and have some fun, or stay home working spreadsheets all weekend.  The decision may change her life.

College Undercover (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Greyscribbler
Carol goes undercover to find out what happened to missing college girls.

Crimson Gem (mc ff) (new)  by MoldedMind
Cynthia is captivated by a crimson gemstone she comes across in a store. How can it be possible that the flaw in the gemís center breathes and contracts before her eyes? If she watches long enough, it will have to reveal that secret to her. Just as long as no one sees her standing there, staring at it, she should be perfectly safe...

Digitized Submission (mc ff hm ft ds sf) (1 new chapter)  by Simurgh42
Abigail turns her friendís spoiled daughter into her foot worshipping servant using a new virtual reality game.

Drop and Give Me Twenty (mc mf fd) (new)  by Buster
Madeleine tries to get her husband to calm down during an argument.

Elraya (mc mf fd) (new)  by Kallie
Fran finds himself being courtedóor perhaps, huntedóby an imposing, demonic woman at a club.

Eternal Slave (mc mf fd ma bd ds ft hm hu sf) (new)  by Aristotle_Writes
An humorous, epic femdom fantasy. As Jackís last girlfriend leaves in disgust because of his submissive nature, he realizes that all he wants is to be a slave to women. Soon, strange things happen to him, and he ends up in an alien world where it seems his dreams will come true. But at a price.

Eve (Hypsan) (mc md) (new)  by Hypsan
Eveís friend Karen is used to reassert her programming.

FLASH! (GiantNut) (mc mf md in) (new)  by GiantNut
A genius brother tests out his new invention on his girlfriend and his sisteróa camera that has the ability to rewire a personís memory.

Following Her Dream (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Shadra
Janet takes the necessary steps towards obtaining her dream girl.

Heavy Petting: Mom Makes Waves (mc mf md in) (new)  by Fugue
Barbara is concerned about her son Kevin, who is sleeping his way through every one of her MILFy friends and acquaintances. What happens when sheís the odd woman out, the only one not bedded by him, the one left out of the conversations when her friends compare sexy notes about her son, about the guy that keeps blowing every one of their sexual fuses?

Help! Iím Trapped In A Romantic Visual Novel! (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by HypnoticHarlequin
After testing out a strange new VR game, Payton finds herself trapped in a visual novel centered around a very odd school. Can Payton escape with her mind intact?

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup (mc mf fd) (new)  by AskJeeves
The CEO of a startup gives a compelling presentation to investors.

I Have No Idea (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
Tanner wakes up from a blackout, and discovers that he started a billion dollar pharmaceutical company and created a slave paradise with a prototype mind control drug.

In A Dream (mc ff bd cb) (1 new chapter)  by Madam Kistulot
Rose couldnít be happier living in Chronos with Gemini.

Incubus (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Jennifer Kohl
Christina summons a demon, who has the ability to grant her greatest desire.

Jezz and Edge 2 ó Disco is a Dish Best Served Cold (mc mf md) (new)  by Chrystal Wynd
Jezzóalong with her sensei Edgeóare once again recruited to investigate a possible kidnapping involving mind-control.

Little Pink Pills (mc mf ff fd) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Strange behaviour and unusual occurrences at the pharmaceutical company that April works for coincides with the arrival of a mysterious package full of little pink pills. Can April get to the bottom of what exactly the pills do without succumbing to their ever growing influence around her?

Lucky Clover (mc md fd cb) (new)  by J. Darksong
Patricia Saint is was born under a lucky star. Blessed with wealth, beauty, and an uncanny luck, the world is her oyster. Alas, things get boring when everything is handed to you in a silver platter. So Patricia decides to take up thieving, not for necessity or greed, but for the thrill. But when the Beautiful Gems are called in to stop her crime spree, she may end up pushing her luck a bit too far...

Lustful Vengeance (mc ff md fd) (new)  by S. B.
For ages, The Amazonian Guards have protected the supernatural students dwelling in the prestigious Gehymnis Academy but a sinister conspiracy threatens to put an end to it all.

The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus (mc mf md) (new)  by Meleva
A story from a time before the stars, when men and the gods lived together as one. An axeman lusts after a goddess of beauty, and sets out to win her heart by any means.

Mind Control in Brookwyn (mc ff cb) (new)  by hypnoticassassin
A group of superheroines attempt to thwart a bank heist.

No Time for Boys (mc mf md rb) (new)  by Jukebox
Kaylaís sister sends her a Boyô as a gag gift, and now Kayla doesnít know how to switch it off. But it knows how to switch her off...

Oral Skills (mc ff ds) (new)  by sex-obsessed-lesbian
When Christine admits shyly to an alluring stranger at a party that no, sheís never eaten pussy... well, she never expected to get such an education.

Originals and Outsiders: Assemble (mc mf md cb) (2 new chapters)  by asianpersuasion
Super powered heroes arenít the apple of the publicís eye, but that doesnít stop Nick, Jason from being recruited to join a team of young teenage superheroes to try and learn how to save the world. Taught and mentored by the great heroes of the previous generation like Luminaire and Darklight or their headmaster, Kyle Albinn, the young kids soon find themselves way in over their heads...

A Plethora of Heathers (mc fd ds hm) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
Heatherís is a restaurant owned by Heather. Itís very profitable.

Push (Nicky Noxville) (mc mm ma hm) (new)  by Nicky Noxville
Ewan has addicted himself to black cock with popper training videos and his older stepbrother catches him, setting in motion Ewanís descent into true depravity.

Rabbit Hole (mc md fd) (new)  by SleepyTimeSlut
Classroom distractions in the form of a college girlís Tumblr feed cause more than one person to fall down the hypno-porn rabbit hole ...

Return of the Armored Warrior (mc ff md fd cb) (1 new chapter)  by J. Darksong
Erika Patrick, daughter of Tina Patrick, has moved to River City to make a new life for herself. She soon learns that things are a lot rougher in River City than back home in New York, but when Shining Paladin runs into trouble, she finds a mentor, someone who will take her under his wing, and together, they might not only rekindle an old legacy, they might even surpass it.

61 Days in River City (mc mf cb) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
SureShot has a contract to kill Alicia. Sonia intends to stop him, even if she has to kill him, because she wants to kill Alicia herself. All the supers in River City are no help to Sonia at all.

A Taste of Power (mc ff) (new)  by whatlookslike
Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This Is Our Story (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Ice Bear
Connor, the editor-in-chief of the high school yearbook, discovers that edits he makes to the yearbook come true in real life.

The Ultimate Form (mc mf md gr in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
A washed-up loser is chosen to be the subject of a military nanite experiment.

Unintended Bambi (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Trixie Adara
Colleen tries to return a strangerís phone but canít help listening to the strange music playing from its headphones.

Unlimited (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Pan
A hypnotist recounts the final sessions with his sister.

Uplink (mc ff mf ma sf) (1 new chapter)  by nevermind
The promised future has arrived. Mankind has outgrown old Terra and lives peacefully among the stars. But when junior engineer Kyra Warner of the TSS Argo picks up the wrong item from an alien planet, the rest of her crew must soon find out that not everything in this universe is willing to coexist.

Were-Tigress (mc mf fd gr) (1 new chapter)  by MɛtaBob
A family man learns magic, mostly the hard way.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #1 on: March 23, 2019, 12:45:23 pm »
Clowning Around was pretty good. I liked that Marisol had a personality and the tension that she had with her mother helped to drive the events. Not a fan of the way things turned out for them, though, mainly because that's not one of my kinks. That said, there's a hell of a lot of fetish-based fun to be had here.

Digitized Submission is slowly moving forward. I liked that Abigail's perspective has been omitted in this chapter and we just stay focused on Crystal's side of things. I really like the idea of Crystal "unlocking" new abilities as a slave and I'm looking forward to what will become of her as she continues descending.

Unintended Bambi is a tidy little bimbo story. It's what you'd expect for a story of its length and description, but it's done solidly. An appitizer when you're in the mood for reading multiple erotica in a sitting.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #2 on: March 23, 2019, 03:05:08 pm »
Reading following her dream eagerly. Can't wait for the final. It feels like a long denouement that I am thoroughly enjoying.
Also, Annachurian coming through with the twist.  :)
I am seeing Binding Rings earlier than others, but it is definitely keeping my attention.
College Undercover... So deliciously evil.
Lots of goodness this update.

Incubus is next on my list
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #3 on: March 23, 2019, 03:49:15 pm »
Reading following her dream eagerly. Can't wait for the final. It feels like a long denouement that I am thoroughly enjoying.
Also, Annachurian coming through with the twist.  :)

Thank you =) There's not much left, but I hope what comes is able to be satisfying to as many as possible.

And yes, to parrot what I am sure many people are going to be saying here, Annachurian is a fantastically fun read. Keep up the great work, 321.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #4 on: March 23, 2019, 11:48:38 pm »
Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate  by 321

Read this all the way through, and I had a bit of trouble getting into a mindset that can be tickled by the Ye Olden Hypno style of brainwashing used in this story. Was worth it though for this fun spy romp. And that coda... was simply pitch perfect. Well-oiled hinges indeed!


College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Drop and Give Me Twenty  by Buster

I donít always read femdom, but when I do I seem to have a knack for picking out good ones. This was more than I expected and less than I ultimately wanted, but still very much recommended.


Eve (Hypsan)  by Hypsan

Sadly that luck doesnít always extend to picking up yellow stories. ⚠️ HARSH CRITICISM WARNING ⚠️ Karenís entrance didnít come off as particularly menacing or creepy. Fuckpuppet resurfacing could have been done better by giving some sense of what Eve was starting to feel, or have that persona manifest partially before taking over fully. The mantra was fine but almost too long and could probably be tightened up to have more punch. And then there is the infinitely callous ending with snuff thrown in to try and twist the knife. Iím not against snuff per say, but the act needs to have a lot more meaning and weight behind it than we see here.


Following Her Dream  by Shadra

Bold move, soldiering on after that mic drop last week. Here I was stepping off the hype train after a very pleasant ride, but the departure whistle is blowing again so I guess Iím riding to the next stop!


Incubus  by Jennifer Kohl

Oh! Yes. Quite! Good show, dear Lady. Marvelous! <gif of The Collector from Infinity War after Gamora does the thing> Okay, Iím exaggerating a little, but this was a very nice start to the proceedings.


No Time for Boys  by Jukebox

Customer Satisfaction Guaranteed! (No srsly, weíre really not in the business of giving money back to people. Love it, or weíll make you love it.) I kinda feel like several disparate story elements got thrown into a pot, along with what was meant to be a spicy turnabout ending, but it never reached the point of, "Now you got a stew going!"


A Taste of Power  by whatlookslike

Me after reading the synopsis: "Thatís not how itís supposed to work..."
Me after reading this first chapter: "Hmm... could be an interesting tale. Show me more."

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #5 on: March 24, 2019, 12:32:00 am »
Bewitching Spells is a nice series of text trances I've read online elsewhere before, at least the first two chapters, and it was nice to read them again. Crystal Witch's spell casting gets better and better into the new chapter I hadn't read yet where lots of the old triggers are used to nice effect. Great writing and prose to me. Very much enjoyed her kind of bondage.

Crimson Gem was a simple and focused story with an intriguing focal point. That store owner has to know what she's doing, which makes me want to visit this store myself. I wonder, and maybe envy what could happen to Cynthia when she returns to the shop.

Drop and Give Me Twenty was an interesting take, one I'd never seen before for an induction starter. The story wasn't totally clear the first time, at least in where I thought it was going, but made sense in the end, and in a way, nice to see a recurring guilt trip like that.

Mind Control in Brookwyn is definitely in my lane for enjoyable cb hypno, complete with an ending I was honestly hoping for. Would really have preferred some better structuring for dialog and the long paragraphs, but a good story for me none-the-less.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #6 on: March 24, 2019, 02:45:22 am »
A Taste of Power
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I normally avoid vampire stories but for some reason I read this one and I'm rather glad that I did as it seems to be a good one!  I hope it carries on as it began and am looking forward to future chapters.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #7 on: March 24, 2019, 09:22:51 am »
As with AskJeevesí first story, I was her beta reader and also she has been brainwashing me into her helpless fuckpuppet for over a year, but still: Hot Blood punched all my buttons. This porn parody of the already kinda hypno-domme-y Theranos thing is off to a rousing start.
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« Reply #8 on: March 24, 2019, 01:52:37 pm »
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Incubus  by Jennifer Kohl

Oh! Yes. Quite! Good show, dear Lady. Marvelous! <gif of The Collector from Infinity War after Gamora does the thing> Okay, Iím exaggerating a little, but this was a very nice start to the proceedings.

Thank you kindly!
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #9 on: March 25, 2019, 10:10:24 am »
Hmm..  Eve was incredibly dark. And without a lot of setup or justification, or even for a credible purpose.

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Minor point, the lack of needed commas in the dialogue is jarring in places, despite the shortness of the story.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #10 on: March 25, 2019, 11:06:27 am »
Another strong installment of "Binding Rings".  Wonder what it signifies that the aunt apparently has gone missing.  Was looking forward to having the aunt and mom find out about each other.

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« Reply #11 on: March 25, 2019, 12:29:28 pm »
A Taste of Power (mc ff) (new)  by whatlookslike
Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This is the kind of story that can start off and whiny and annoying. Katie does go into detail about her negative feelings toward her roommate. Yet, it was surprisingly engaging. This was clearly building toward something. I also enjoyed the realism here. Never had such terrible roommates, but we all at least get annoyed by our roommates sometimes. They may snore, they may be messy, they may be noisy during sex. It often works out, but many definitely had those terrible roommates you're just stuck with. Yet, I found myself kind of liking Lucy. She was very aware and proud of herself as the queen goth bitch. As such, it was very much understandable that she grew tired of the incredibly passive Katie, and decided to force the most dramatic personality change the only way Lucy knew how. My only complaint was that the "reveal" was given away in the synopsis. Revealing and confirming the vampirism naturally would have had a more dramatic effect. I really did enjoy this otherwise. Can't wait for more!

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #12 on: March 25, 2019, 01:26:30 pm »
Volume I of "This Is Our Story" comes to a disappointing end.  I guess it was necessary to move the plot but a whole chapter devoted to the asshole bully wasn't fun to read.

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Meanwhile, it's odd to see "Unlimited" it coming up in the weekly "What's New" since it was posted to the forum and discussed in depth some time ago, but I'd like one more chance to say what an exceptionally good story it is.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #13 on: March 25, 2019, 01:58:03 pm »
Volume I of "This Is Our Story" comes to a disappointing end.  I guess it was necessary to move the plot but a whole chapter devoted to the asshole bully wasn't fun to read.

Glad I wasnt the only one who felt that way, at least it was a very short one

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Crimson Gem

Clearly you have to be wary of New Age shops? :laugh: Well, of course some might enjoy being trapped in that way, but anyway... Fairly straight forward story, not hard to see where events are heading, and they get there. These mysterious blondes, what can I say? OK, no more.
Definitely enjoyed

Oral Skills

No, never eaten pussy in my life, 'Mistress'! :angel:Of course I have, but to have that done to me, I could lie! :laugh: Pleasant enough lesbianisation piece.
Definitely enjoyed

A Plethora of Heathers

Oh please, Heaven Tanner Carpenter. Yes, I roared with laughter at that name, many will know why! Not that I would mind finding myself in one of those tubes, or booths, but besides that... Very classic, crazy Betsy humour here. Where is this place, I would love to go there to be brainwashed, sorry, to eat.
High end of defintely enjoyed

61 Days in River City

Talking of crazy Betsy humour, here's some more! And yes, fine, the whole vampire suggestion, and the street naming had me laughing again with her stuff. I'm only surprised there was no suggestion of a 30's flapper in the city! :laugh:
High end of definitely enjoyed

This Is Our Story

Other than the hint of Jordan, and his attitude to using TIOS at the end, I've enjoyed this all along. Who knows whether thats just a tease for me, or what might actually happen in part 2? Not quite the happy ending I was hoping for, but anyway...
Definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #14 on: March 25, 2019, 03:22:04 pm »
College Undercover... So deliciously evil.

Thanks Buster.  Carol is beset by some not nice people, isn't she?

College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Er, is that good or bad?

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #15 on: March 25, 2019, 05:04:11 pm »
A Plethora of Heathers

Oh please, Heaven Tanner Carpenter. Yes, I roared with laughter at that name, many will know why! Not that I would mind finding myself in one of those tubes, or booths, but besides that... Very classic, crazy Betsy humour here. Where is this place, I would love to go there to be brainwashed, sorry, to eat.
High end of defintely enjoyed

61 Days in River City

Talking of crazy Betsy humour, here's some more! And yes, fine, the whole vampire suggestion, and the street naming had me laughing again with her stuff. I'm only surprised there was no suggestion of a 30's flapper in the city! :laugh:
High end of definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #16 on: March 25, 2019, 08:40:05 pm »
Thank you lifmcs and mechan for the reads and the kind words.  :)
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #17 on: March 25, 2019, 09:57:25 pm »
Following Her Dream  by Shadra

Bold move, soldiering on after that mic drop last week. Here I was stepping off the hype train after a very pleasant ride, but the departure whistle is blowing again so I guess Iím riding to the next stop!

I was kind of surprised when a couple people were talking about the story after chapter 13 as if it was over. After hearing one person's feedback, I feel like that actually would have been a really interesting place for the story to end. Certainly a different kind of ending than I anticipated, but I still feel it would have been quite impactful. That said, there's definitely still a bit left to be told! Finally will get back to a certain aspect of the story that has been sorely lacking in the last few chapters as well. Thank you for your kind words, I hope the coming landscape from your window seat will keep you interested in riding until the end of the line! Or maybe I can just bribe you with some complimentary drinks during the trip  :P

Eve (Hypsan)  by Hypsan

Sadly that luck doesnít always extend to picking up yellow stories. ⚠️ HARSH CRITICISM WARNING ⚠️ Karenís entrance didnít come off as particularly menacing or creepy. Fuckpuppet resurfacing could have been done better by giving some sense of what Eve was starting to feel, or have that persona manifest partially before taking over fully. The mantra was fine but almost too long and could probably be tightened up to have more punch. And then there is the infinitely callous ending with snuff thrown in to try and twist the knife. Iím not against snuff per say, but the act needs to have a lot more meaning and weight behind it than we see here.

Definitely some fair points, though I'd still like to say that fuck did this story do it for me. In the end, I suppose that's all that matters. I haven't been reading nearly as much as I feel I should, but I'm glad I gave this one a chance.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #18 on: March 25, 2019, 11:48:42 pm »
College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Er, is that good or bad?

Greyscribbler

It remains to be seen. :mysterious jazz hands:

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #19 on: March 26, 2019, 09:59:48 am »
It remains to be seen. :mysterious jazz hands:
I literally LOL'ed.  This place needs a like button.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #20 on: March 26, 2019, 05:33:27 pm »
Part 2

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup

Think I'd prefer to be an assistant to an investor, but either way...Yes, presentation was quite something, and a fun piece too
Definitely enjoyed

Incubus

Jenny is a good, and fun writer to read, and this is no exception. I just love the attitude of the demon, I must say! Really looking forward to seeing what happens here next
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus

Not really my sort of story, but of course I love the way it all plays out. The logic of everyone is great too. Cleverly done, for sure
Definitely enjoyed

Rabbit Hole

This was even less my sort of story, in truth. OK, the teacher trap was fun, if well signposted
High end of enjoyed. Those who prefer sex driven stuff will rate more

Return of the Armored Warrior

Talking of authors I always enjoy, here's another. The banter between Gene, and Tina is great. And yes, if she wont take his offer, I will. I do wonder if Robbie is one of the others who has been there mind.
High end of definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #21 on: March 27, 2019, 02:02:21 am »
The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus

Not really my sort of story, but of course I love the way it all plays out. The logic of everyone is great too. Cleverly done, for sure
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Thank you, Merry! It was an unorthodox one for me too, but I'm glad someone else got a kick out of it.

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« Reply #22 on: March 27, 2019, 11:38:22 am »
Part 3

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate

Well clearly the doctor needs a controlled mother figure, to help look after the young ladies, ideally one who would rather enjoy being controlled in that way. Yes, the author does know the perfect lady for this, lol. On a serious note, what a great ending we have here, with plenty of suspense, and some would say the right result for everyone. Well, I'm sure Alton could have done without the wire across the throat moment, but other than that...
Low end of much enjoyed. I'm sure no audition for a role would be needed, but just to tip the balance. No, seriously, it deserves it

Binding Rings

My usual issue with this, the mother/son incest. Beyond that, its a well written story, with a delightful mc method, but because of that...
Low end of definitely enjoyed. Incest fans would give high end, I'm sure

Lustful Vengeance

I'm sure I'd love the pet animal makeover done to me, but fine, I am never as much of a fan when evil wins out over good like this. Lets face it, lustful revenge has never been my thing.
I'm going to go no rating. Not because there is anything wrong with the story, there isnt. Just really not my thing, thats all

Mind Control in Brookwyn

Oh fine, I'd probably love being mind controlled like that, but...its very straightforward stuff, and too omnipotent for my tastes at present. Fine, that might change, but it doesnt seem to plan any great challenges to standard form, just rather A-B-C in formula at this time.
High end of enjoyed? Its OK, I guess, but just so formulaic...

A Taste of Power

Being nasty to the sweet girl, not just controlling her, just never my thing. Clearly events might be about to change, but will have to hedge my bets on this for now.
No rating, taste issues? Just need to see where this goes next before committing more

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #23 on: March 27, 2019, 12:17:45 pm »
Meanwhile, it's odd to see "Unlimited" it coming up in the weekly "What's New" since it was posted to the forum and discussed in depth some time ago, but I'd like one more chance to say what an exceptionally good story it is.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #24 on: March 27, 2019, 12:31:23 pm »
Wow, a lot of feedback for my story! Hope I don't disappoint when Part 2 eventually gets made : ).

A Taste of Power  by whatlookslike

Me after reading the synopsis: "Thatís not how itís supposed to work..."
Me after reading this first chapter: "Hmm... could be an interesting tale. Show me more."
Haha : p. The idea of getting mind controlled into being submissive is great and all, but the opposite has a lot of potential for fun too! Hope it remains interesting for you.

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I normally avoid vampire stories but for some reason I read this one and I'm rather glad that I did as it seems to be a good one!  I hope it carries on as it began and am looking forward to future chapters.
I'm glad to know you enjoyed part 1 : ). Hope I don't disappoint!

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Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This is the kind of story that can start off and whiny and annoying. Katie does go into detail about her negative feelings toward her roommate. Yet, it was surprisingly engaging. This was clearly building toward something. I also enjoyed the realism here. Never had such terrible roommates, but we all at least get annoyed by our roommates sometimes. They may snore, they may be messy, they may be noisy during sex. It often works out, but many definitely had those terrible roommates you're just stuck with. Yet, I found myself kind of liking Lucy. She was very aware and proud of herself as the queen goth bitch. As such, it was very much understandable that she grew tired of the incredibly passive Katie, and decided to force the most dramatic personality change the only way Lucy knew how. My only complaint was that the "reveal" was given away in the synopsis. Revealing and confirming the vampirism naturally would have had a more dramatic effect. I really did enjoy this otherwise. Can't wait for more!
Glad you enjoyed it! I might have a little more in common than Katie than I'm happy with, but thankfully I've also never had flatmates that awful.

As for the reveal getting spoiled, whoops! I did wonder whether or not it was worth giving away in the description, but I figured it was better to let the reader know vampirism was going to be a large part of it.

A Taste of Power

Being nasty to the sweet girl, not just controlling her, just never my thing. Clearly events might be about to change, but will have to hedge my bets on this for now.
No rating, taste issues? Just need to see where this goes next before committing more
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #25 on: March 27, 2019, 06:23:03 pm »
I will see what I think when more gets posted, thats for sure

Part 4

Following Her Dream

Quite seriously, this only needs one thing to happen, and I'm sure I dont have to tell the author what that is, for this to get into absolute heaven country, which I certainly wasnt expecting a couple of chapters back. Will it all play out that way, who knows, but looking forward to finding out, for sure
High end of definitely enjoyed

I Have No Idea

Oh fine, I know what type of dungeon I'd enjoy, but anyway...Spanking isnt my thing, either, in truth. But when Frankie has finished with that sleek silver dress, I'm open to discussion! :laugh:
Definitely enjoyed

Little Pink Pills

More than a few twists and turns in this chapter, for sure. Would I like some pink pills? Well, maybe...? Cant wait to see what Monday will bring here
Definitely enjoyed. Tale of 2 halves, so compromise rating

No Time for Boys

Is it wrong that I dont mind lesbianisation stuff, but dont like making girls straight, even though I'm bi? I'm sure the Boy could make me see things his way, and I wouldnt object. Yes, I wasnt surprised by the ending, somehow
Definitely enjoyed

Uplink

Will the hive win, or are we in for a twist here? I know which my money is on, but other than that... I'm enjoying it, even if it has all been a little obvious so far.
Definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #26 on: March 27, 2019, 07:26:50 pm »
Following Her Dream

Quite seriously, this only needs one thing to happen, and I'm sure I dont have to tell the author what that is, for this to get into absolute heaven country, which I certainly wasnt expecting a couple of chapters back. Will it all play out that way, who knows, but looking forward to finding out, for sure
High end of definitely enjoyed

I don't think there's anything I could write that could match how amazing it is to read something like this. Thank you for that.

At the same time, you're killing me saying I should know what needs to happen to make the story even better. I'm tempted to ask, but I think I'll wait until the story is done and see how it matches. I do hope what remains will end up being as well received, even if it doesn't quite go the way you're thinking.

I do have the next chapter fully planned out, but the first sentence is proving highly elusive at the moment. Hopefully I can get over that hurdle soon!

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« Reply #27 on: March 27, 2019, 08:27:28 pm »
I Have No Idea

Oh fine, I know what type of dungeon I'd enjoy, but anyway...Spanking isnt my thing, either, in truth. But when Frankie has finished with that sleek silver dress, I'm open to discussion! :laugh:
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« Reply #28 on: March 27, 2019, 09:44:39 pm »
Uplink

Will the hive win, or are we in for a twist here? I know which my money is on, but other than that... I'm enjoying it, even if it has all been a little obvious so far.
Definitely enjoyed

My speculation on Uplink is that the Hive no longer exists, so the new Drones end up having to form/create a new one, which can then decide on new objectives - just having the secret to awakening AI without them falling to a runaway feedback loop gives them a huge bargaining chip if they want to negotiate rather than go for full assimilation (there are enough advantages to Agent infection that a version with just the telepathic links and physical augmentation without the drive to infect and devotion to the Hive would get plenty of volunteers).

That's not to say that the new Hive would choose that route - my prediction only goes as far as forming a new Hive and having to decide on their ongoing objectives, not what those objectives would be. And it's a "this could happen" not a "this will happen" prediction.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #29 on: March 28, 2019, 08:48:10 am »
Grey, my assumption hadnt gone down that route, but its certainly one thats possible. I could certainly happily volunteer, even more so now my whole body (and mind) seems to be in need of assistance to function properly now.

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« Reply #30 on: March 28, 2019, 10:08:31 am »
Shadra, dont bother asking, I'm not telling you! :P

Janet realises how sinful she's been and joins a convent, pledging herself to a life of celibacy. She leaves Snow and Violet staring at the device. Some say they are still staring to this day. Rachel marries into money and becomes a stay-at-home mom with triplets. The end.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #31 on: March 28, 2019, 10:29:56 am »
No, not in the slightest! :laugh:

You're thinking about someone who loves Rom-MC, so when it comes to Janet, and Rachel... ;) (and oh, hates pregnancy stuff)

Alternatively, Janet becomes so annoyed by some woman living in Yorkshire, and decides the only way she will get any peace is to use her device on her, and turn her into a mindlessly obedient, silver clad (or chrome bodied) robot! :P Either that, or design a time travel machine, and send her back to the 1930's with the knowledge, and skills to make it as a 20 something dancer in the musicals!
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #32 on: March 28, 2019, 11:08:00 am »
No no no...

Janet uploads her device to YouTube. Hilarity ensues.

She programs Violet and Snow to be a travelling sock puppet show, they tour South America where they attract a host of additional whimsical sock puppet characters.

Rachel discovers time travel in the bottom of her sock drawer and ends up opening a tavern in the old west.

All the while the penguins, having solidified an alliance with the Emu resistance, prepare to invade Australia. But that is a tale for another time...

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« Reply #33 on: March 28, 2019, 11:18:37 am »
You realize I'm now gonna think of a way to include penguins and/or emus into the story...

Greatly enjoyed your version of the ending though, may have to steal it.

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« Reply #34 on: March 28, 2019, 01:58:40 pm »
You realize I'm now gonna think of a way to include penguins and/or emus into the story...

Greatly enjoyed your version of the ending though, may have to steal it.

Haha, no, we all want to read your ending. Itís a great story, you got this :)

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« Reply #35 on: March 28, 2019, 02:55:38 pm »
You realize I'm now gonna think of a way to include penguins and/or emus into the story...

Greatly enjoyed your version of the ending though, may have to steal it.

Haha, no, we all want to read your ending. Itís a great story, you got this :)

Maybe not all of it, but I'm definitely mentioning emus at some point now. Can't stop what you already started!

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #36 on: March 28, 2019, 05:11:40 pm »
This is why I hate suggesting endings to authors, on a serious basis, in all honesty. :angel:
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #37 on: March 29, 2019, 11:16:22 am »
Part 5

Club Lust

Brook? Johnson? Oh my darling author, it might be coincidence, but I'm flattered! Fine, would be more apt as submissive surnames, but anyway... In truth, even without that, I'd have loved this. One great ingredient, the 'victims' only get to remember events for the night, until the next time at least, I approve. Hopefully the club owners have taken precautions on the pregnancy front, because if they have, this could get really good marks, just saying. I think I'm safe, too old (and lacking looks) to be an attractive target (and no money), though my lack of sex interest would clearly qualify me, lol. So if the club has an elderly gentleman, who wants a woman who wont exhaust him too much, give me a pill, or drink, lol.
High end of definitely enjoyed. Promise of no pregnancy (and kinky clothing), maybe more? ;)

Elraya

Went with this because of the demon thing, but fine, she's a bit harsh on the humiliation front for my tastes. But if it wasnt for that, would have got better marks. Yes, its well told, and cleverly done, but...
Definitely enjoyed

Eternal Slave

Two green fd's in a row, I know! :o But this promised humour, and provided it. I'm the sort of pervert who would love to find a man wanting to buy her satin ball gowns, so if he's still free? I might have to learn the Domme stuff, or be mind controlled into it, which would be far more fun! Leather, latex, why not? ;) Its delightfully done, and after that closing line, cant wait to see what happens next!
High end of definitely enjoyed

Jezz and Edge 2 ó Disco is a Dish Best Served Cold
 
Yes, given the assistance this author gives me, it might be easy to be biased towards his stuff. No, I dont need to be, and he probably wouldnt like it if I was. :angel: I love Jezz and Edge, they are 2 characters that play beautifully off each other. The fight scene, especially the closing line from 'Mr Garage' is an absolutely delight. Oh, the Disco scene is pure delight, and I've been promised, via the author that Edge says it will be simple to get the device working again, and set somewhere in late 20's, or early 30's, just for me. He says he may even bring me back to the present, at some point, though no rush! Jazz is a Dish best served with illicit Gin, darlings! ;)
Low end of much enjoyed. Genuine! :angel:

Lucky Clover

I wonder if Patricia came from Tralee? Garden folk will get that joke at least! This is very very good, with a lovely moral, and slightly surprising ending too. Mind, she was lucky, so... Great Frasier related piece.
High end of definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #38 on: March 30, 2019, 09:05:42 am »
And to complete

Clowning Around

Bit late now I guess, but scat, and golden shower warnings needed for this. So, yes, it was doing nothing for me anyway, then they came along, and that was it for me. Given I've discovered the authors previous story also included scat, wont be bothering with their stuff again
No rating, obviously

Digitized Submission

Never got the foot fetish, have never got into heavy humiliation. Therefore this missed badly for me, on 2 front, so bailed out
Again no rating, obviously

Help! Iím Trapped In A Romantic Visual Novel!

The only one to get a rating in the whole batch! In truth, this gets pretty weird, and I have no idea if thats it, or if there is more? Just hoping Payton will be OK, but far from convinced.
Yes, technology probably gets it an enjoyed, but as good as it gets for me. Way too weird!

Originals and Outsiders: Assemble

Sorry, but I cant get into this generation at all, doing little to nothing for me. Length was killer, over 12K, so wasnt going to kill myself time wise for this
No rating, no interest

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« Reply #39 on: March 31, 2019, 10:07:36 am »
Merry, thank you very much! Your review made my day. And I loved ďJazz is a dish best served with illicit gin, darlings!Ē  😁
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« Reply #40 on: March 31, 2019, 04:44:39 pm »
Merry, thank you very much! Your review made my day. And I loved ďJazz is a dish best served with illicit gin, darlings!Ē  😁

Glad you liked both, dear. The brain may not be as sharp as it was a month ago, but I'm still there at present :angel:
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« Reply #41 on: March 31, 2019, 05:49:32 pm »

Lustful Vengeance

I'm sure I'd love the pet animal makeover done to me, but fine, I am never as much of a fan when evil wins out over good like this. Lets face it, lustful revenge has never been my thing.
I'm going to go no rating. Not because there is anything wrong with the story, there isnt. Just really not my thing, thats all


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« Reply #42 on: April 01, 2019, 08:28:24 am »

Lustful Vengeance

I'm sure I'd love the pet animal makeover done to me, but fine, I am never as much of a fan when evil wins out over good like this. Lets face it, lustful revenge has never been my thing.
I'm going to go no rating. Not because there is anything wrong with the story, there isnt. Just really not my thing, thats all


That's fair. I honestly don't remember if you liked the original piece or not. When I wrote it, I had some ideas to develop the plot in other installments but they all fell through at the time. This was not one of them as I only got back into this particular universe because of a recent patron request/reward. Thank you for reading it nonetheless.  :)

Something similar, apparently, though I did give it a rating

The Lustful Twelve

Not really my scene, but given the author...Yes, the classroom scene amused me, and I suppose, secretly, the ending is very naughty too. But yes, I did feel sorry for Derrick, all the same
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« Reply #43 on: April 04, 2019, 07:26:51 pm »
Oh wow. So much to catch up on!

Betsy's 61 Days in River City brings us... vikings and vampires? Well, this ought to prove interesting! Let's hope that someone locks up the blood bank and the hakarl (on second thought, maybe not the hakarl)

I was really interested to see where Following Her Dream was going to go after the last chapter, and it didn't disappoint. It reminded me a bit of those old mob movies where the flawed hero keeps trying to get out and keeps getting pulled back in. And now poor Janet is being asked to become the very same person she was at the start of the story. What will she do? She's already started off down a path, but... let's just hope that Rachel doesn't show up in the middle of all of this!

This week's College Undercover gave us more of crime-fighting hooker cop Carol. There's a lovely noir tone throughout this chapter, full of hard-boiled and jaded characters (hell, there's even a scene in a cheap diner!). It'll be interesting to see what kind of chaos erupts when Patrick is taken down (or what kind of chaos might erupt if he doesn't)...

Crimson Gem was short and sexy. Loved the post-hypnotic suggestion at the end!

Finally, Jezz and Edge 2 was hilarious. I'd tune in every week if this were a TV show, even if they didn't spend every episode fighting hypnotized Charlie's Angels clones in a disco!   :)

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #44 on: April 04, 2019, 07:46:45 pm »
I was really interested to see where Following Her Dream was going to go after the last chapter, and it didn't disappoint. It reminded me a bit of those old mob movies where the flawed hero keeps trying to get out and keeps getting pulled back in. And now poor Janet is being asked to become the very same person she was at the start of the story. What will she do? She's already started off down a path, but... let's just hope that Rachel doesn't show up in the middle of all of this!

Thanks! There's so much I want to say in response but I don't know how to do so without spoiling anything xD I'll just wait until chapter 15 is released this Saturday to make the joke.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #45 on: April 04, 2019, 07:58:23 pm »
buster, Shadra, lifmcs, and Merry... thanks for the kind words! Writing "Action Force" has been a ton of fun. If only I had a time travel machine and the money to throw at one of those 1990s syndication studios...

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #46 on: April 04, 2019, 08:35:10 pm »
Thanks 321! Iím glad you appreciated the dramatic intensity involved in fighting hypnotized Charlieís Angels clones in a disco with ďEverybody was Kung-Fu FightingĒ playing. 😁
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #47 on: April 05, 2019, 05:06:11 pm »
Betsy's 61 Days in River City brings us... vikings and vampires? Well, this ought to prove interesting! Let's hope that someone locks up the blood bank and the hakarl (on second thought, maybe not the hakarl)

Hey, glad to see you back and thanks for your review. However, it maybe shows more of you than you'd like. You're fine with locking up the blood bank yet you still want access to the hakarl? Interesting.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #48 on: April 06, 2019, 11:07:26 am »
Betsy's 61 Days in River City brings us... vikings and vampires? Well, this ought to prove interesting! Let's hope that someone locks up the blood bank and the hakarl (on second thought, maybe not the hakarl)

Hey, glad to see you back and thanks for your review. However, it maybe shows more of you than you'd like. You're fine with locking up the blood bank yet you still want access to the hakarl? Interesting.

My master plan is to save the blood, and to let our viking superheroes take away all of the hakarl (which, I've been told, smells like 'an abandoned nursing home'). They can have all of the svio, too.  :)