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New Releases-March 23rd 2019
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Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate (mc mf ff md fd) (2 new chapters)  by 321
While handling what seems to be a routine kidnapping case, a trio of sexy private investigators uncover a diabolical mind control conspiracy.

Arabian Night (mc mm in hm bd ex) (new)  by Nicky Noxville
Jon is an engineer, stranded outside the United States of Columbia due to President Trumpetís travel ban. Fortunately, his fatherís family helps him find some life changing work to pass the time...

Bewitching Spells (mc fd) (new)  by CrystalWitch
Your mind is placed under a spell.

Binding Rings (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Sidia
A chance discovery changes a young manís lifeóand not always for the better.

Clowning Around (mc ff ma ft hm in la bd ex hu) (new)  by J. F. Gargiulo
A woman wants to fulfill her lifelong dream of becoming a clown, and no one will get in her way...

Club Lust (mc ma fd md bd) (new)  by HB5211
Annie was consumed by work and her career.  When one of her friends gets an invitation to the hottest new club in town and can bring a friend, Annie has a decision to make.  Should she go and have some fun, or stay home working spreadsheets all weekend.  The decision may change her life.

College Undercover (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Greyscribbler
Carol goes undercover to find out what happened to missing college girls.

Crimson Gem (mc ff) (new)  by MoldedMind
Cynthia is captivated by a crimson gemstone she comes across in a store. How can it be possible that the flaw in the gemís center breathes and contracts before her eyes? If she watches long enough, it will have to reveal that secret to her. Just as long as no one sees her standing there, staring at it, she should be perfectly safe...

Digitized Submission (mc ff hm ft ds sf) (1 new chapter)  by Simurgh42
Abigail turns her friendís spoiled daughter into her foot worshipping servant using a new virtual reality game.

Drop and Give Me Twenty (mc mf fd) (new)  by Buster
Madeleine tries to get her husband to calm down during an argument.

Elraya (mc mf fd) (new)  by Kallie
Fran finds himself being courtedóor perhaps, huntedóby an imposing, demonic woman at a club.

Eternal Slave (mc mf fd ma bd ds ft hm hu sf) (new)  by Aristotle_Writes
An humorous, epic femdom fantasy. As Jackís last girlfriend leaves in disgust because of his submissive nature, he realizes that all he wants is to be a slave to women. Soon, strange things happen to him, and he ends up in an alien world where it seems his dreams will come true. But at a price.

Eve (Hypsan) (mc md) (new)  by Hypsan
Eveís friend Karen is used to reassert her programming.

FLASH! (GiantNut) (mc mf md in) (new)  by GiantNut
A genius brother tests out his new invention on his girlfriend and his sisteróa camera that has the ability to rewire a personís memory.

Following Her Dream (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by Shadra
Janet takes the necessary steps towards obtaining her dream girl.

Heavy Petting: Mom Makes Waves (mc mf md in) (new)  by Fugue
Barbara is concerned about her son Kevin, who is sleeping his way through every one of her MILFy friends and acquaintances. What happens when sheís the odd woman out, the only one not bedded by him, the one left out of the conversations when her friends compare sexy notes about her son, about the guy that keeps blowing every one of their sexual fuses?

Help! Iím Trapped In A Romantic Visual Novel! (mc ff) (1 new chapter)  by HypnoticHarlequin
After testing out a strange new VR game, Payton finds herself trapped in a visual novel centered around a very odd school. Can Payton escape with her mind intact?

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup (mc mf fd) (new)  by AskJeeves
The CEO of a startup gives a compelling presentation to investors.

I Have No Idea (mc mf ff md) (1 new chapter)  by Redsliver
Tanner wakes up from a blackout, and discovers that he started a billion dollar pharmaceutical company and created a slave paradise with a prototype mind control drug.

In A Dream (mc ff bd cb) (1 new chapter)  by Madam Kistulot
Rose couldnít be happier living in Chronos with Gemini.

Incubus (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Jennifer Kohl
Christina summons a demon, who has the ability to grant her greatest desire.

Jezz and Edge 2 ó Disco is a Dish Best Served Cold (mc mf md) (new)  by Chrystal Wynd
Jezzóalong with her sensei Edgeóare once again recruited to investigate a possible kidnapping involving mind-control.

Little Pink Pills (mc mf ff fd) (1 new chapter)  by Carefully Random
Strange behaviour and unusual occurrences at the pharmaceutical company that April works for coincides with the arrival of a mysterious package full of little pink pills. Can April get to the bottom of what exactly the pills do without succumbing to their ever growing influence around her?

Lucky Clover (mc md fd cb) (new)  by J. Darksong
Patricia Saint is was born under a lucky star. Blessed with wealth, beauty, and an uncanny luck, the world is her oyster. Alas, things get boring when everything is handed to you in a silver platter. So Patricia decides to take up thieving, not for necessity or greed, but for the thrill. But when the Beautiful Gems are called in to stop her crime spree, she may end up pushing her luck a bit too far...

Lustful Vengeance (mc ff md fd) (new)  by S. B.
For ages, The Amazonian Guards have protected the supernatural students dwelling in the prestigious Gehymnis Academy but a sinister conspiracy threatens to put an end to it all.

The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus (mc mf md) (new)  by Meleva
A story from a time before the stars, when men and the gods lived together as one. An axeman lusts after a goddess of beauty, and sets out to win her heart by any means.

Mind Control in Brookwyn (mc ff cb) (new)  by hypnoticassassin
A group of superheroines attempt to thwart a bank heist.

No Time for Boys (mc mf md rb) (new)  by Jukebox
Kaylaís sister sends her a Boyô as a gag gift, and now Kayla doesnít know how to switch it off. But it knows how to switch her off...

Oral Skills (mc ff ds) (new)  by sex-obsessed-lesbian
When Christine admits shyly to an alluring stranger at a party that no, sheís never eaten pussy... well, she never expected to get such an education.

Originals and Outsiders: Assemble (mc mf md cb) (2 new chapters)  by asianpersuasion
Super powered heroes arenít the apple of the publicís eye, but that doesnít stop Nick, Jason from being recruited to join a team of young teenage superheroes to try and learn how to save the world. Taught and mentored by the great heroes of the previous generation like Luminaire and Darklight or their headmaster, Kyle Albinn, the young kids soon find themselves way in over their heads...

A Plethora of Heathers (mc fd ds hm) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
Heatherís is a restaurant owned by Heather. Itís very profitable.

Push (Nicky Noxville) (mc mm ma hm) (new)  by Nicky Noxville
Ewan has addicted himself to black cock with popper training videos and his older stepbrother catches him, setting in motion Ewanís descent into true depravity.

Rabbit Hole (mc md fd) (new)  by SleepyTimeSlut
Classroom distractions in the form of a college girlís Tumblr feed cause more than one person to fall down the hypno-porn rabbit hole ...

Return of the Armored Warrior (mc ff md fd cb) (1 new chapter)  by J. Darksong
Erika Patrick, daughter of Tina Patrick, has moved to River City to make a new life for herself. She soon learns that things are a lot rougher in River City than back home in New York, but when Shining Paladin runs into trouble, she finds a mentor, someone who will take her under his wing, and together, they might not only rekindle an old legacy, they might even surpass it.

61 Days in River City (mc mf cb) (1 new chapter)  by Betsy Leohtar
SureShot has a contract to kill Alicia. Sonia intends to stop him, even if she has to kill him, because she wants to kill Alicia herself. All the supers in River City are no help to Sonia at all.

A Taste of Power (mc ff) (new)  by whatlookslike
Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This Is Our Story (mc mf md) (1 new chapter)  by Ice Bear
Connor, the editor-in-chief of the high school yearbook, discovers that edits he makes to the yearbook come true in real life.

The Ultimate Form (mc mf md gr in) (1 new chapter)  by MindSpark
A washed-up loser is chosen to be the subject of a military nanite experiment.

Unintended Bambi (mc mf ff md) (new)  by Trixie Adara
Colleen tries to return a strangerís phone but canít help listening to the strange music playing from its headphones.

Unlimited (mc mf md in) (1 new chapter)  by Pan
A hypnotist recounts the final sessions with his sister.

Uplink (mc ff mf ma sf) (1 new chapter)  by nevermind
The promised future has arrived. Mankind has outgrown old Terra and lives peacefully among the stars. But when junior engineer Kyra Warner of the TSS Argo picks up the wrong item from an alien planet, the rest of her crew must soon find out that not everything in this universe is willing to coexist.

Were-Tigress (mc mf fd gr) (1 new chapter)  by MɛtaBob
A family man learns magic, mostly the hard way.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #1 on: March 23, 2019, 12:45:23 pm »
Clowning Around was pretty good. I liked that Marisol had a personality and the tension that she had with her mother helped to drive the events. Not a fan of the way things turned out for them, though, mainly because that's not one of my kinks. That said, there's a hell of a lot of fetish-based fun to be had here.

Digitized Submission is slowly moving forward. I liked that Abigail's perspective has been omitted in this chapter and we just stay focused on Crystal's side of things. I really like the idea of Crystal "unlocking" new abilities as a slave and I'm looking forward to what will become of her as she continues descending.

Unintended Bambi is a tidy little bimbo story. It's what you'd expect for a story of its length and description, but it's done solidly. An appitizer when you're in the mood for reading multiple erotica in a sitting.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #2 on: March 23, 2019, 03:05:08 pm »
Reading following her dream eagerly. Can't wait for the final. It feels like a long denouement that I am thoroughly enjoying.
Also, Annachurian coming through with the twist.  :)
I am seeing Binding Rings earlier than others, but it is definitely keeping my attention.
College Undercover... So deliciously evil.
Lots of goodness this update.

Incubus is next on my list
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #3 on: March 23, 2019, 03:49:15 pm »
Reading following her dream eagerly. Can't wait for the final. It feels like a long denouement that I am thoroughly enjoying.
Also, Annachurian coming through with the twist.  :)

Thank you =) There's not much left, but I hope what comes is able to be satisfying to as many as possible.

And yes, to parrot what I am sure many people are going to be saying here, Annachurian is a fantastically fun read. Keep up the great work, 321.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #4 on: March 23, 2019, 11:48:38 pm »
Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate  by 321

Read this all the way through, and I had a bit of trouble getting into a mindset that can be tickled by the Ye Olden Hypno style of brainwashing used in this story. Was worth it though for this fun spy romp. And that coda... was simply pitch perfect. Well-oiled hinges indeed!


College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Drop and Give Me Twenty  by Buster

I donít always read femdom, but when I do I seem to have a knack for picking out good ones. This was more than I expected and less than I ultimately wanted, but still very much recommended.


Eve (Hypsan)  by Hypsan

Sadly that luck doesnít always extend to picking up yellow stories. ⚠️ HARSH CRITICISM WARNING ⚠️ Karenís entrance didnít come off as particularly menacing or creepy. Fuckpuppet resurfacing could have been done better by giving some sense of what Eve was starting to feel, or have that persona manifest partially before taking over fully. The mantra was fine but almost too long and could probably be tightened up to have more punch. And then there is the infinitely callous ending with snuff thrown in to try and twist the knife. Iím not against snuff per say, but the act needs to have a lot more meaning and weight behind it than we see here.


Following Her Dream  by Shadra

Bold move, soldiering on after that mic drop last week. Here I was stepping off the hype train after a very pleasant ride, but the departure whistle is blowing again so I guess Iím riding to the next stop!


Incubus  by Jennifer Kohl

Oh! Yes. Quite! Good show, dear Lady. Marvelous! <gif of The Collector from Infinity War after Gamora does the thing> Okay, Iím exaggerating a little, but this was a very nice start to the proceedings.


No Time for Boys  by Jukebox

Customer Satisfaction Guaranteed! (No srsly, weíre really not in the business of giving money back to people. Love it, or weíll make you love it.) I kinda feel like several disparate story elements got thrown into a pot, along with what was meant to be a spicy turnabout ending, but it never reached the point of, "Now you got a stew going!"


A Taste of Power  by whatlookslike

Me after reading the synopsis: "Thatís not how itís supposed to work..."
Me after reading this first chapter: "Hmm... could be an interesting tale. Show me more."

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #5 on: March 24, 2019, 12:32:00 am »
Bewitching Spells is a nice series of text trances I've read online elsewhere before, at least the first two chapters, and it was nice to read them again. Crystal Witch's spell casting gets better and better into the new chapter I hadn't read yet where lots of the old triggers are used to nice effect. Great writing and prose to me. Very much enjoyed her kind of bondage.

Crimson Gem was a simple and focused story with an intriguing focal point. That store owner has to know what she's doing, which makes me want to visit this store myself. I wonder, and maybe envy what could happen to Cynthia when she returns to the shop.

Drop and Give Me Twenty was an interesting take, one I'd never seen before for an induction starter. The story wasn't totally clear the first time, at least in where I thought it was going, but made sense in the end, and in a way, nice to see a recurring guilt trip like that.

Mind Control in Brookwyn is definitely in my lane for enjoyable cb hypno, complete with an ending I was honestly hoping for. Would really have preferred some better structuring for dialog and the long paragraphs, but a good story for me none-the-less.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #6 on: March 24, 2019, 02:45:22 am »
A Taste of Power
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I normally avoid vampire stories but for some reason I read this one and I'm rather glad that I did as it seems to be a good one!  I hope it carries on as it began and am looking forward to future chapters.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #7 on: March 24, 2019, 09:22:51 am »
As with AskJeevesí first story, I was her beta reader and also she has been brainwashing me into her helpless fuckpuppet for over a year, but still: Hot Blood punched all my buttons. This porn parody of the already kinda hypno-domme-y Theranos thing is off to a rousing start.
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« Reply #8 on: March 24, 2019, 01:52:37 pm »
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Incubus  by Jennifer Kohl

Oh! Yes. Quite! Good show, dear Lady. Marvelous! <gif of The Collector from Infinity War after Gamora does the thing> Okay, Iím exaggerating a little, but this was a very nice start to the proceedings.

Thank you kindly!
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #9 on: March 25, 2019, 10:10:24 am »
Hmm..  Eve was incredibly dark. And without a lot of setup or justification, or even for a credible purpose.

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Minor point, the lack of needed commas in the dialogue is jarring in places, despite the shortness of the story.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #10 on: March 25, 2019, 11:06:27 am »
Another strong installment of "Binding Rings".  Wonder what it signifies that the aunt apparently has gone missing.  Was looking forward to having the aunt and mom find out about each other.

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« Reply #11 on: March 25, 2019, 12:29:28 pm »
A Taste of Power (mc ff) (new)  by whatlookslike
Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This is the kind of story that can start off and whiny and annoying. Katie does go into detail about her negative feelings toward her roommate. Yet, it was surprisingly engaging. This was clearly building toward something. I also enjoyed the realism here. Never had such terrible roommates, but we all at least get annoyed by our roommates sometimes. They may snore, they may be messy, they may be noisy during sex. It often works out, but many definitely had those terrible roommates you're just stuck with. Yet, I found myself kind of liking Lucy. She was very aware and proud of herself as the queen goth bitch. As such, it was very much understandable that she grew tired of the incredibly passive Katie, and decided to force the most dramatic personality change the only way Lucy knew how. My only complaint was that the "reveal" was given away in the synopsis. Revealing and confirming the vampirism naturally would have had a more dramatic effect. I really did enjoy this otherwise. Can't wait for more!

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #12 on: March 25, 2019, 01:26:30 pm »
Volume I of "This Is Our Story" comes to a disappointing end.  I guess it was necessary to move the plot but a whole chapter devoted to the asshole bully wasn't fun to read.

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Meanwhile, it's odd to see "Unlimited" it coming up in the weekly "What's New" since it was posted to the forum and discussed in depth some time ago, but I'd like one more chance to say what an exceptionally good story it is.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #13 on: March 25, 2019, 01:58:03 pm »
Volume I of "This Is Our Story" comes to a disappointing end.  I guess it was necessary to move the plot but a whole chapter devoted to the asshole bully wasn't fun to read.

Glad I wasnt the only one who felt that way, at least it was a very short one

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Crimson Gem

Clearly you have to be wary of New Age shops? :laugh: Well, of course some might enjoy being trapped in that way, but anyway... Fairly straight forward story, not hard to see where events are heading, and they get there. These mysterious blondes, what can I say? OK, no more.
Definitely enjoyed

Oral Skills

No, never eaten pussy in my life, 'Mistress'! :angel:Of course I have, but to have that done to me, I could lie! :laugh: Pleasant enough lesbianisation piece.
Definitely enjoyed

A Plethora of Heathers

Oh please, Heaven Tanner Carpenter. Yes, I roared with laughter at that name, many will know why! Not that I would mind finding myself in one of those tubes, or booths, but besides that... Very classic, crazy Betsy humour here. Where is this place, I would love to go there to be brainwashed, sorry, to eat.
High end of defintely enjoyed

61 Days in River City

Talking of crazy Betsy humour, here's some more! And yes, fine, the whole vampire suggestion, and the street naming had me laughing again with her stuff. I'm only surprised there was no suggestion of a 30's flapper in the city! :laugh:
High end of definitely enjoyed

This Is Our Story

Other than the hint of Jordan, and his attitude to using TIOS at the end, I've enjoyed this all along. Who knows whether thats just a tease for me, or what might actually happen in part 2? Not quite the happy ending I was hoping for, but anyway...
Definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #14 on: March 25, 2019, 03:22:04 pm »
College Undercover... So deliciously evil.

Thanks Buster.  Carol is beset by some not nice people, isn't she?

College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Er, is that good or bad?

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #15 on: March 25, 2019, 05:04:11 pm »
A Plethora of Heathers

Oh please, Heaven Tanner Carpenter. Yes, I roared with laughter at that name, many will know why! Not that I would mind finding myself in one of those tubes, or booths, but besides that... Very classic, crazy Betsy humour here. Where is this place, I would love to go there to be brainwashed, sorry, to eat.
High end of defintely enjoyed

61 Days in River City

Talking of crazy Betsy humour, here's some more! And yes, fine, the whole vampire suggestion, and the street naming had me laughing again with her stuff. I'm only surprised there was no suggestion of a 30's flapper in the city! :laugh:
High end of definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #16 on: March 25, 2019, 08:40:05 pm »
Thank you lifmcs and mechan for the reads and the kind words.  :)
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #17 on: March 25, 2019, 09:57:25 pm »
Following Her Dream  by Shadra

Bold move, soldiering on after that mic drop last week. Here I was stepping off the hype train after a very pleasant ride, but the departure whistle is blowing again so I guess Iím riding to the next stop!

I was kind of surprised when a couple people were talking about the story after chapter 13 as if it was over. After hearing one person's feedback, I feel like that actually would have been a really interesting place for the story to end. Certainly a different kind of ending than I anticipated, but I still feel it would have been quite impactful. That said, there's definitely still a bit left to be told! Finally will get back to a certain aspect of the story that has been sorely lacking in the last few chapters as well. Thank you for your kind words, I hope the coming landscape from your window seat will keep you interested in riding until the end of the line! Or maybe I can just bribe you with some complimentary drinks during the trip  :P

Eve (Hypsan)  by Hypsan

Sadly that luck doesnít always extend to picking up yellow stories. ⚠️ HARSH CRITICISM WARNING ⚠️ Karenís entrance didnít come off as particularly menacing or creepy. Fuckpuppet resurfacing could have been done better by giving some sense of what Eve was starting to feel, or have that persona manifest partially before taking over fully. The mantra was fine but almost too long and could probably be tightened up to have more punch. And then there is the infinitely callous ending with snuff thrown in to try and twist the knife. Iím not against snuff per say, but the act needs to have a lot more meaning and weight behind it than we see here.

Definitely some fair points, though I'd still like to say that fuck did this story do it for me. In the end, I suppose that's all that matters. I haven't been reading nearly as much as I feel I should, but I'm glad I gave this one a chance.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #18 on: March 25, 2019, 11:48:42 pm »
College Undercover  by Greyscribbler

One of these weeks...


Er, is that good or bad?

Greyscribbler

It remains to be seen. :mysterious jazz hands:

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #19 on: March 26, 2019, 09:59:48 am »
It remains to be seen. :mysterious jazz hands:
I literally LOL'ed.  This place needs a like button.
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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #20 on: March 26, 2019, 05:33:27 pm »
Part 2

Hot Blood: Sexiness and Lust in a Silicon Valley Startup

Think I'd prefer to be an assistant to an investor, but either way...Yes, presentation was quite something, and a fun piece too
Definitely enjoyed

Incubus

Jenny is a good, and fun writer to read, and this is no exception. I just love the attitude of the demon, I must say! Really looking forward to seeing what happens here next
High end of definitely enjoyed

The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus

Not really my sort of story, but of course I love the way it all plays out. The logic of everyone is great too. Cleverly done, for sure
Definitely enjoyed

Rabbit Hole

This was even less my sort of story, in truth. OK, the teacher trap was fun, if well signposted
High end of enjoyed. Those who prefer sex driven stuff will rate more

Return of the Armored Warrior

Talking of authors I always enjoy, here's another. The banter between Gene, and Tina is great. And yes, if she wont take his offer, I will. I do wonder if Robbie is one of the others who has been there mind.
High end of definitely enjoyed

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #21 on: March 27, 2019, 02:02:21 am »
The Milleniad ó Cunning Kirrus

Not really my sort of story, but of course I love the way it all plays out. The logic of everyone is great too. Cleverly done, for sure
Definitely enjoyed

Thank you, Merry! It was an unorthodox one for me too, but I'm glad someone else got a kick out of it.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #22 on: March 27, 2019, 11:38:22 am »
Part 3

Action Force: The Annachurian Candidate

Well clearly the doctor needs a controlled mother figure, to help look after the young ladies, ideally one who would rather enjoy being controlled in that way. Yes, the author does know the perfect lady for this, lol. On a serious note, what a great ending we have here, with plenty of suspense, and some would say the right result for everyone. Well, I'm sure Alton could have done without the wire across the throat moment, but other than that...
Low end of much enjoyed. I'm sure no audition for a role would be needed, but just to tip the balance. No, seriously, it deserves it

Binding Rings

My usual issue with this, the mother/son incest. Beyond that, its a well written story, with a delightful mc method, but because of that...
Low end of definitely enjoyed. Incest fans would give high end, I'm sure

Lustful Vengeance

I'm sure I'd love the pet animal makeover done to me, but fine, I am never as much of a fan when evil wins out over good like this. Lets face it, lustful revenge has never been my thing.
I'm going to go no rating. Not because there is anything wrong with the story, there isnt. Just really not my thing, thats all

Mind Control in Brookwyn

Oh fine, I'd probably love being mind controlled like that, but...its very straightforward stuff, and too omnipotent for my tastes at present. Fine, that might change, but it doesnt seem to plan any great challenges to standard form, just rather A-B-C in formula at this time.
High end of enjoyed? Its OK, I guess, but just so formulaic...

A Taste of Power

Being nasty to the sweet girl, not just controlling her, just never my thing. Clearly events might be about to change, but will have to hedge my bets on this for now.
No rating, taste issues? Just need to see where this goes next before committing more

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #23 on: March 27, 2019, 12:17:45 pm »
Meanwhile, it's odd to see "Unlimited" it coming up in the weekly "What's New" since it was posted to the forum and discussed in depth some time ago, but I'd like one more chance to say what an exceptionally good story it is.

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Re: New Releases-March 23rd 2019
« Reply #24 on: March 27, 2019, 12:31:23 pm »
Wow, a lot of feedback for my story! Hope I don't disappoint when Part 2 eventually gets made : ).

A Taste of Power  by whatlookslike

Me after reading the synopsis: "Thatís not how itís supposed to work..."
Me after reading this first chapter: "Hmm... could be an interesting tale. Show me more."
Haha : p. The idea of getting mind controlled into being submissive is great and all, but the opposite has a lot of potential for fun too! Hope it remains interesting for you.

A Taste of Power
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I normally avoid vampire stories but for some reason I read this one and I'm rather glad that I did as it seems to be a good one!  I hope it carries on as it began and am looking forward to future chapters.
I'm glad to know you enjoyed part 1 : ). Hope I don't disappoint!

A Taste of Power (mc ff) (new)  by whatlookslike
Shy, nervous pushover Katie lives at the mercy of her domineering flatmate Adriana, and her flatmateís cruel girlfriend Lucy. But when Lucy reveals herself as a vampire and bites Katie, she starts to develop a will of her own...

This is the kind of story that can start off and whiny and annoying. Katie does go into detail about her negative feelings toward her roommate. Yet, it was surprisingly engaging. This was clearly building toward something. I also enjoyed the realism here. Never had such terrible roommates, but we all at least get annoyed by our roommates sometimes. They may snore, they may be messy, they may be noisy during sex. It often works out, but many definitely had those terrible roommates you're just stuck with. Yet, I found myself kind of liking Lucy. She was very aware and proud of herself as the queen goth bitch. As such, it was very much understandable that she grew tired of the incredibly passive Katie, and decided to force the most dramatic personality change the only way Lucy knew how. My only complaint was that the "reveal" was given away in the synopsis. Revealing and confirming the vampirism naturally would have had a more dramatic effect. I really did enjoy this otherwise. Can't wait for more!
Glad you enjoyed it! I might have a little more in common than Katie than I'm happy with, but thankfully I've also never had flatmates that awful.

As for the reveal getting spoiled, whoops! I did wonder whether or not it was worth giving away in the description, but I figured it was better to let the reader know vampirism was going to be a large part of it.

A Taste of Power

Being nasty to the sweet girl, not just controlling her, just never my thing. Clearly events might be about to change, but will have to hedge my bets on this for now.
No rating, taste issues? Just need to see where this goes next before committing more
That's entirely fair. Katie's definitely going to get her own back in later chapters, although what I have planned probably isn't going to match up to your tastes. Glad you took the time to read and review though, it means a lot to me : ).