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« Reply #25 on: November 12, 2004, 09:41:21 PM »

So which door am I?  Huh
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« Reply #26 on: November 13, 2004, 12:43:44 AM »

Sorry Darkmind... Ms Myrrh had made the same mistake (sorry, MM), but corrected it (so see, you can blame her)...

I'm sorry I never got a chance to comment on "your" door, Darkmind.  I really liked your story idea, definitely liked the schoolgirl thing, but an FD story is not where I'm going to find my greatest, um... jolt.  But you did better than I did, as you made yours quick and fun, an easy read.

My tale once again grew with the telling, so I'm concerned that anyone will try to read anything so long (just under 4000 words).  My hope is that they're a quick 4000 words... lol.





Never worry, Jo -- you're always worth the trip...

...though it was a Cliff Notes version of a trip... Roll Eyes Cheesy


Seriously, I scan, as I tend to do.  This was a pretty hot one and love, love, loved the beaded ass ending Wink Wink...


Overall, I look forward to the next stuff Bank has to offer...good times for all...
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« Reply #27 on: November 13, 2004, 11:51:34 AM »

Sorry Darkmind... Ms Myrrh had made the same mistake (sorry, MM), but corrected it (so see, you can blame her)...

I'm sorry I never got a chance to comment on "your" door, Darkmind.  I really liked your story idea, definitely liked the schoolgirl thing, but an FD story is not where I'm going to find my greatest, um... jolt.  But you did better than I did, as you made yours quick and fun, an easy read.

My tale once again grew with the telling, so I'm concerned that anyone will try to read anything so long (just under 4000 words).  My hope is that they're a quick 4000 words... lol.





Never worry, Jo -- you're always worth the trip...

...though it was a Cliff Notes version of a trip... Roll Eyes Cheesy


Seriously, I scan, as I tend to do.  This was a pretty hot one and love, love, loved the beaded ass ending Wink Wink...


Overall, I look forward to the next stuff Bank has to offer...good times for all...

I will not be able to participate in this contest, due to massive school work toward the end of the term. i apologize for screwing things up and getting hopes up.

Blue Lyric, why don't you take my place?
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« Reply #28 on: November 14, 2004, 02:16:23 PM »

Aw.  Undecided

Total bummer.

BlueLyric, if you want to take Bankington's place that's fine by me.  Just post to this thread letting us know and I'll give you 'til Tuesday.  If not I'll take his turn and post by Tuesday eve.

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« Reply #29 on: November 15, 2004, 01:21:19 AM »

Tell you what -- I'll give it a shot; if I'm getting nowhere fast on concept by sometime tomorrow evening, I'll let you know.  Other than focus and composition, though, a little something's stirring in my head as we speak Roll Eyes...
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« Reply #30 on: November 15, 2004, 02:15:52 AM »

If no one else can do it, I've got something ready to go...

---pinch-hitter extraordinaire---

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« Reply #31 on: November 15, 2004, 02:28:44 AM »

Good...then if you got a piece in the chamber already, I'll let you know (if it's ok with Myrrh) if I'm cold by as late as Tuesday afternoon, and if so, you'd be able to just slide yours in.  But I'm hoping I come up with 4 aces, planning to get one in all the way...
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« Reply #32 on: November 15, 2004, 03:06:12 AM »


I'm certainly not going to argue with the man with the statue  Smiley

---sounds like a winner to me---

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« Reply #33 on: November 15, 2004, 11:36:43 PM »

Just thought I'd chime in to let you all know I won't be able to get in a lick just yet.  I've got a pretty good, juicy idea in my head, but unfortunately, there just aren't enough quiet times of uninterrupted creativity in the day to flesh out a good tale, then type it, then post here and adjust all emphasis, italicizations, etc...

I hate that I can't get in with something now...but it is early (only the 4th door) -- Writerzblocked has the right idea, as he had something on the ready.  Don't know if that messes with the spirit of the thing, but it is a great convienience (like he said, clutch pinch-hitter).  So, hopefully, I will flesh this out, and if anyone draws blank or can't fulfill the duties of your crown, then the first runner-up will come through 8) Roll Eyes.  Really, if there's a lull in the action, I'll be happy to step in, if I've brought the idea to fruition, and as long as nothing posted prior closely parallels my thinking -- I would definitely not want to come lately on a clever plot device...


So apologies, Ms. Myrrh ('cause it's a great event here), good luck all, and WZB, it's all yours...so tag...headslap...whatever I'm supposed to do with it... Grin Grin
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« Reply #34 on: November 16, 2004, 05:16:19 AM »

It's usually a bad sign when you have to call for a pinch-hitter in the early innings, but maybe this one will start a rally...





Mark looked at Angie. Angie looked at Mark.  They both looked at the pile of clothes in their arms and at each other's naked bodies. Then they looked at the door.  Angie started to step into her panties.

"Why bother?" Mark asked.

"Good question," Angie laughed, and opened the door.

DOOR #4

"Come in!  Come in!" The little dwarf of a man in the white lab coat was literally jumping up and down with excitement, his little horned-rimmed glasses bouncing up on his rather large nose. "Already undressed, even - I LIKE that!"

The room was fairly small and sparse, nothing much of note other than two rather large, padded, comfy chairs facing a huge television monitor on the far wall. Before their eyes had even adjusted to the dimness (a welcome change from the swirling cacophony of lights in the main corridor), the strange man took them by the hands and sat them each down in a chair.
 
"You're the last two I need to make my quota, oh yes, you are, yes you are," he happily nattered away.  "Just make yourselves comfortable while I get everything ready..."

Mark spread out and leaned back in the chair, his clothes still in his lap. When he laid his head back on the headrest, he felt a gentle vibration at the base of his scalp and immediately tried to pull forward, to no avail. His whole body was stuck to the chair, and though he found he could move his head and body from side to side while in contact with it, he couldn't even raise his hands or arms.  The vibration continued through his body now, from his head to his toes and wasn't really uncomfortable as much as it was annoying.  He turned his head to look at Angie and her rolling eyes and heavy sigh told him she was pretty much in the same predicament.  "Here we go again."

For her part, Angie took a deep breath, waiting for the arms of the chair to grab her wrists or the seat to suddenly sprout vibrating tentacles to pierce her orifices (oriphi?) or the dwarf in the lab coat to produce any number of multifaceted death and pleasure mechanisms, but he simply stood over in the corner by a console, humming away quite pleasantly.
 
"Oh, don't be alarmed, boys and girls," he said, finally, "this will be over before you know it."  Then the lights dimmed and died. "Just pretend you're back in high school biology class and I'm a substitute teacher."

"MOVIES!"  Angie and Mark both yelled in unison.

"I hope you like song and dance," the strange man sighed under his breath as he hit a button.

The big screen flared to life.  Allowing a moment for their eyes to adjust, Angie and Mark watched intently as a plain piece of poster board filled the screen, filtered through scratchy black and white film.

From somewhere off-camera, they heard a male voice clear his throat and read the letters on the poster board.

"'Erotic Mind Control - The Musical.'  'It's a Mad, Mad, Mad Scientist World,' take number eight."

The poster board drew back from the camera lens to reveal a mad scientist's laboratory set right out of an old Hammer Films Frankenstein.  Mulling about were many scientists in lab coats.  Suddenly, from somewhere, an orchestra started and all of the white coats jumped as one to turn to face the camera. 

And started singing.

(Dr. Dillard)
The world calls us mad, well that's overstated
By more than a tad -- we prefer "irritated"
And who wouldn't be?
If you've reason to doubt us
You might just agree
If you learn more about us...

(cue music)

(Dr. Dillard)
There's Doctor Dewang over there, with the yellowish hair
He invented a machine that sends thoughts through the air,
So what if it's occasionally used to get sex
And, yeah, just the once, to get back at his ex
Does that make him a monster to you?

(Dr. Dewang)
And Doctor Ansparger-Green, the University Dean
Can send mental commands through his computer screen
So a freshman coed warms a place in his bed
But she also has all her Cliff's Notes in her head
Does that merit a tenure review?

(Mad Scientist Chorus)
There's a dozen more stories, technological glories
Each one a sight to behold
Can you call us crazy, addled, and lazy
Before all our stories are told?

(Dr. Arnsparger-Green)
Doctor Sarah Aberdeen, born with defective genes
Before those marvelous microscopic machines
Have her going on twenty, with lovers aplenty
She reprograms them each with a new identity
If they're all happy, what's wrong with that?

(Dr. Aberdeen)
Here's Doctor Steven Crist, the noted alchemist
Who found a way to control minds with gas in a mist
And his daughter's now his lover, his sister, his brother
They all fuck like minks when around one another
But the world would still call him a rat.

(Mad Scientist Chorus)
The list of abuses goes on, it's as long as our credentials
But we're used to it now, what the heck
Still it would be nice if the perverts who write our confidentials
Would send us some r-o-y-a-l-t-y checks!

(much dancing)

(pause music)

(Dr. Dillard.)
So we ask you again, is what we do so wrong
Were you in our coats, would you not sing this song
We're not so much different, we all have our vices
Since we can't all be jocks, our mindpower suffices
We all have those same aches in our pussies and cocks
We just have to use brains to get off our rocks

(cue music for big finale)

(Mad Scientist Chorus, arm in arm, legs kicking high)
Be it Belle Simon's cell phone or Master PC
Doc Johnson's nanites or Alex Young's TV
It's not our intentions
To make loot from inventions
But other attentions we crave...

Suddenly the music cut off and the screen went blank.

Then the lights abruptly came back up and Angie and Mark found they could move.  They looked at each other, puzzled.

"That's it?"  Angie ventured.

"Yep, all through," the strange man smiled. "You can collect your things and go back through the door."

"But it's not even finished?"

"Really?" The little man shrugged.  "I didn't notice."

"It just cut off..."

"Oh, well. I just show what they send me."

Mark shook his head and rubbed his neck to get at a cramp. "No strange swirling lights or strange hands feeling us up or sexy voices in our heads?"

"Uh, no."  The dwarf pushed a few more buttons. "I'm not R&D, I'm just marketing. I got all the information I needed through the mental and physical connection in the chairs."

Angie sighed audibly and brought a finger down to her dry pussy.

"Oh, don't be that way," the man frowned. "You got plenty more doors to go."

She sat up in the chair.  "I don't understand.  What was that all about, then?"

"Oh, you're actually INTERESTED?" the strange man's eyes opened wide as he walked over to stand beside her chair. 

"It's just that it was...different."

"Oh, yeah, I get that a lot.  You think THAT was different, you should have been here for all the survey's I had to take on 'Erotic Mind Control - The Sitcom.'  Talk about stinky.  I actually had some participants struggling with the chairs on that one."

"So," Mark asked, "someone actually PAYS you to gather opinions on these things?"

"Pretty good, actually," he smiled.

"Wouldn't it be easier if they just put it out on the web and asked for feedback?"

The dwarf grunted.  "You've never actually created anything before, have you?"

"Well, no."

"Let's just put it this way, young fella.  There's those who create some kinds of stuff that don't ever have to worry about figuring out how other folks feel about it.  They can keep doing various versions of the same thing over and over again and the feedback pours in 'cause they're hitting everyone's buttons and giving the audience what they want.  Then there's the oddball folks like the guy who created what you just watched -- they do stuff that's just plain weird and they gotta go to extreme measures to get people to experience it and tell 'em what they think about it. That's where I come in."

"Oookay," Angie half-smiled and slid out of the chair, heading for the door.

'I mean, you shoulda seen the time that one guy came to me with a story where some gal got her arms chopped off..."

"Been...nice meeting you," Mark said as he hurried out the door.

"...yeah, I had to replace THREE chairs after that one..."

As the door slammed behind them, Angie and Mark smiled at each other with knowing relief as they took in the swirling symphony once again.



If anyone wants to strangle my muse after this one, I will certainly understand...

---it's about time for a new one anyway---

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« Reply #35 on: November 16, 2004, 09:39:10 AM »

Door #4 by WZB - Now, ignoring for a moment the fact that you felt we needed a rally after my story (relax... on the face of it, mine was sillier than yours, and not a single guy has IM'd or emailed me wondering where they can get a pink-blob "chair"), and taking your story at face value, WZB... thanks.  I, for one, needed something humorous right now, something I could read and enjoy without having to put anything more into it than my brain.

I wish I could have heard the music playing in your head while you wrote the lyrics to your song and dance... songs and dances?  I'm stuck on either James Cagny doing "Off the Record" in "Yankee Doodle Dandy" or Monty Python's "Knights of the Round Table" (there was "much dancing"?).  But music or no, some great lyrics there, very meaningful, and have me thinking that perhaps I have been too tough on evil controllers, that perhaps they are misunderstood.

Naww...

I LMAOTF (or some such) to the dwarf's response to Mark's question, "Wouldn't it be easier if they just put it out on the web and asked for feedback?"  Have been there, and am kinda doing that now, as are most of us, I think.  Just too much else going on, I guess.

A fun story, WZB, and no reason to strangle your Muse yet (unless "Muse" is a euphemism for, well... you know).  I doubt any of the other four or five people who frequent this thread will want to strangle it either.

Thanks for pinch-hitting though, except for the fact that now I'm going to spend the next 45 minutes try to think up some stupid jokes for a MC-sitcom, even though there's no way I would ever dump on your story by trying to write that.

Unless, of course, your story contained a secret, covert, hidden, unseeable (get on with it!), well... mean, sneaky code in it, one that will force the readers to try to come up with their own horrible MC-sitcom now...

Godd... I hope not.

Enjoyable read, WZB... something different, and thanks from me, at least for pinching in (sic).  Smiley

     Jo


"Honey, I'm home!"
"You're late!  What was it this time?"
"I got subliminalled again..."
"Again!  That's three times this week."
"I know..."
"Where was it this time?"
"Walmart..."
"Walmart?!  What were you doing at Walmart?"
"Well, remember how that blinking yellow traffic light got me yesterday?"
"Yes... Oh no, don't tell me... !"
"Right... lower prices."
"Gahh...You're as suggestible as an 80-year-old woman on Rohypnol."
"Umm... speaking of 80-year-old woman... "
"OH NO... Did Mrs. O'Shannon ensnare you again?"
"But, honey, she has this great watch."
"So does Rolex.  I told you to walk on the other side of the street."
"I CAN'T.  There's a 900-foot chasm over there!"
"There is not!  Mr. Hustings just programmed you to think there was."
"But why would he do that?"
"Because he could."
"I thought he liked me."
"He does.  Hell, they all do.  You're such an easy mark."
"I'm sorry, honey."
"That's ok, dear... you can make it up to me in the bedroom right now."
"But I'm tired!"
"Not too tired to look into my eyes though, are you baby?"
"Oh nooooo..."

Etc., etc., and on...

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« Reply #36 on: November 16, 2004, 05:17:16 PM »

Hooray for dancing mad scientists!  Writerzblocked that was great.

I came into the neighborhood internet cafe all pissed off b/c my computer's broken and all I had to do was read your story.  Now life is wonderful.

*hands you a lollipop*

Now you need to tag someone.  Not me, cuz my computer won't be back for a few days.  Sad

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« Reply #37 on: November 17, 2004, 11:51:02 AM »


As for music, I was kind of humming "Gaston" from B&tB (or anything by Ashman and Menken, really).   Those two did more to revive the musical than anyone on Broadway IMO...

As for the tagging, sorry. I just assumed that I was giving Blue a breather and he knew he was next  Cheesy

In any case, if we're going to make it to 10 doors, as someone (Darkmind?) said uptopic, we're gonna need more participants.

Open note directed to everyone reading this - it's NOT as hard as you might think. If I can make time in my schedule for a short short story, surely a few more of you can.  I can certainly understand not wanting to make a commitment ahead of time, but the lollipop lady has been nice and thoughtful enough to make the premise about as generic and open-ended as possible, with no real length limit to speak of.  If you've ever thought of taking part in one of these exhibitions, this one is about as nice and easy as they come.

---let's see a show of hands  Wink---

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« Reply #38 on: November 21, 2004, 04:13:54 AM »

Sorry I missed out on getting in on this.  Looks like the most fun I've seen in awhile... really enjoying the stories!

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« Reply #39 on: December 07, 2004, 03:35:12 PM »

Okay, the Dominatrix, uh, I mean "moderator," for this story is back.  It looks like I'll have to whip you people into shape.   Grin

BlueLyric, you've got two days to write the next part.  Or you will be at the mercy of my merciless lollipop o' doom and I'll have to choose another writer.  Don't make me do it.

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« Reply #40 on: December 08, 2004, 01:10:31 PM »

Now you realize, of course, that I'd be quite honored to get to lick something; natch, I'm partial to cherry/strawberry...



I'll see what I can do...but can't promise anything...



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« Reply #41 on: December 08, 2004, 07:00:17 PM »

BTW, SaraH, even tho' you weren't around when I was looking for a show of hands, I'm happy to add you to the writer's pool.  BlueLyric & Writerzblocked hadn't originally volunteered, either.

New Pool List:

Darkmind
Flibinite
Bankington
BlueLyric
Writerzblocked (pinch-hitter)
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« Reply #42 on: December 09, 2004, 02:30:51 AM »

Hey, Myrrh -- got one coming together right now, nearly finished...but not sure if it'll all be ready too soon; give me 'til the wee hours Friday morn, and I should hopefully have it wrapped...thanks Kiss Kiss...
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« Reply #43 on: December 09, 2004, 08:54:45 AM »

Blue -

Good luck... we're all counting on you...

And don't call me Shirley!

       Jo

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« Reply #44 on: December 09, 2004, 11:05:11 AM »

Ladies...gentlemen...I give you:  the maiden voyage of the H.M.S. Something That Preferably Will Float...my first original (but thanks to whatever post it was that inspired my use of the phrase, "naked, bucking hips")...


Also, special thanks to many who inspire my spice & libido -- and a very special thanks to Alei...who told me she believed I could write and do it well; sweet baby, I hope the entree serves itself up well... Kiss Kiss


And now...come and knock on my door...I've been waiting for this...(will the kisses be hers, and hers, and hers??...and hers??...and hers??...I'll stop now...but only if you say so...only if you say... Kiss Kiss Kiss Kiss)


Let's see:  What type story would a BlueLyric write if a Lyric could compose one??  Hmmmm...I wonder what type it could possibly be??... Roll Eyes Roll Eyes




Door #5


Mark & Angie waded down the corridor to locate the next door; Angie blinked first and saw it.

“Let’s do this,” she declared.


******


This room seemed just a bit more sinister from the outset.  The place was bathed in a warm, orange glow, and the scent of something spicy – sage, was it? – was in the air.

“Oh, wow…I feel like I’m in a solarium,” Mark stated as he and Angie deeply, thoroughly inhaled the exotic scent.

Nothing else seemed that unusual in the room, really – unless you took into account the odd piece of art etched into the floor; it was actually a sort of symbol…



“Hey, Mark…check out this thing…”

“What is it, love?”

“I’d recognize one of those anytime…a pentagram,” mused Angie.

Sure enough, that’s exactly what it appeared to be.  Carved into the floor was a rather large circular disk, holding within it a huge pentagram, which seemed to shimmer like fine crystal.  It looked almost three-dimensional…almost like it was begging to be touched...to be caressed…

…to be used…



Neither Mark or Angie spoke a word…yet neither could deny a wild, growing sense of abandon that each felt slowly building…slowly growing…

“Why do you think this thing is here, Angie, sweetness?  And why hasn’t anything happened yet?”

But as each touched a part of the shimmering display, something striking did happen:  The pentagram began to elevate from the floor – sliding upwards out of the ground as it revealed itself as not only a mere symbol…but an elaborate mirror…

“So after all this, we finally get to the funhouse mirror?” Angie laughed – breaking a little of the erotic tension pent up in that room – in fact, something about the room seemed drenched in sex…


The “fun”, of course, was just about to start…


******


The fascinating apparatus before them stood a good eight feet tall…obstructing Mark and Angie’s view of each other.  It was indeed 3-D – all 10 sides of the outside walls of the pentagram were reflective, and the two friends could just imagine the inner walls of this thing were mirrors, themselves…


The curious duo strolled slowly, carefully examining what stood tall before them – taking in the dark, grayish tint of the mirrors, which, despite their unconventional hue, displayed the pair’s reflections with crystal clarity.

“Have you ever seen anything like this?” Mark wondered aloud to Angie.

A breathy moan was all that could escape Angie’s lips as she replied, “Never…”  Angie had begun to notice just how truly hot she looked, the ripped body stocking – ripped body stocking?? – fitting her form, accentuating her shape just right…and oh, so obscenely, too…



It was then that she heard a voice…vaguely familiar…coo the words:

Give in…



“Did you hear that??” Angie found herself able to exclaim.

“Yeah,” joked Mark – having heard nothing, yet still surprised at the breathy tone he thought he had heard come from Angie moments earlier – “it sounded like a 1940s film siren.”


Angie was feeling rather confused – not surprising, given what they were dealing with at the moment; meantime, Mark had his own issues to confront…like an imposing erection that had sprung out of pretty much nowhere.  Yeah, he’d been hard while in here…but this was major news, entirely



The voice from before, audible only to Angie at the time, was heard this time by Mark, as well:

…giiivvve…iiinnnn…



The irresistibly seductive manner in which the voice…her own naughty voice?...whispered its delectable temptation made Angie shudder…and nearly stumble and fall…

“You okay, love?” Mark anxiously questioned.  Angie’s balance nearly lost, she was forced to brace herself against a mirror wall, if she could, to stop herself.  Her touch of the looking glass produced sparks, a luminous flash, and the beginning of the platform’s rotation…


The “penta-mirror” began to spin ever-so-slightly, picking up speed as the room grew thicker with an intense heat indescribable to Angie or Mark…and an insatiable, all-consuming passion…

Angie!!  Where are you??” cried Mark.

Mark!!  What’s happening??” Angie exclaimed.

The monstrosity swiveled ‘round and ‘round, ‘round and ‘round, with hellacious speed; heat and smog smothered the room and the couple – sensual smog…wicked heat…

The spinning finally began to slow…eventually coming to a complete stop; a swirling, caressing fog remained…


******


Mark came around and cleared his head.  He called out to Angie, “What the fuck just happened, here??…”  Then Angie stepped from the opposite side of the structure – and what Mark feast his eyes upon made his jaws and tongue drop…but not much else would…


An entrancing sight to behold…a goddess in human (?) form…was Angie, standing before him.  The glasses were long gone, a wild, untamable, long-haired supervixen with the hottest legs…the most succulent thighs…the shapeliest ass…sleekest, most snakish hips…luscious midriff…roundest, perkiest breasts…the area tracing from under her arm all the way down her sides – hell, but that was driving him mad…the slender neckline…the ruby, sinful, pouty lips…amazing eyes – were they green??  blue??  purple??  orange???  All at once??  A lengthy tongue rolled ’round those crimson lips…


Mmmmmm…you took the word right…off…my…tongue,” she purred, “’Fuck’ is just exactly what I was thinking…”  Angie was most obviously in full-blown lust as she dragged those razor-sharp red nails along her sliding legs and thighs, across her undulating ass, and – with each and every long nail – flicked both nipples, easily visible…protruding from through the sheer, slowly ripping, black body stocking she displayed…like so much hot trash…

“Angie…w-what’s happened to you??” Mark wondered in total disbelief, as he was being driven up the wall.

Angie bent down, her ass touching the floor; then slid her legs out from under her into a stretched-on-the-floor position – striking the greatest “fuck me” pose Mark had ever seen…plus an obscenely delicious slut-stare to go with it.

“Like it??” she cooed --her hands and fingers slowly, salaciously traversed her stomach, abs, thighs…and found her throbbing pussy -- “It’s an acquired taste…”  She plunged three fingers in and succulently vacuumed the juices off them when they met her waiting, wanting mouth.  The pleasure of being so shameless drew a deep, dark, breathy sigh from a guttural place in her throat…



Mark went directly for his burning, aching shaft to quench his fuel and stroke helplessly…but it dawned on him that his member didn’t end quite where it used to…

“…and I see you’ve just become acquainted with your surprise…,” breathed Angie.

Mark, indeed now discovered (to his shock) that his cock had become an 18-inch salute; he was far more muscularly built, and had sharp, clawish features all his own.

His reflection’s eyes flashed illuminous color endlessly in the looking glass…just as Angie’s did…

…Her long, wicked fingers curled towards her, summoning Mark.  “Care to join?” she inquired.

…he was fighting temptation…and losing…


“Angie…this is so wrong…what is this??...”

“But it feels so good…so right…doesn’t it, Mark??  Look at us, baby – we’re built to fuck…we are made to fuck…”

The pieces began to click into Mark’s consciousness – “The proper answer, then, is…’let’s fuck’…”


******


They went primal on each other – Mark ripping what remained of the nearly-gone stocking from Angie’s body; Angie clawing at Mark’s torso, and the tattered shreds of clothing at his waist; both drenched in rolling sweat and building, sticky juices.  Angie slithered over Mark, took her long, serpentine tongue, and expertly licked and tongue-stroked his torso, as well as his attentive woodpole – which probably couldn’t fit through a door now, if Mark could locate an exit…if he wanted to…

Mark aggressively took charge and made a move of his own, thrusting that spear into Angie’s waiting well of desire.  Their grunts and growls of stark, animalistic lust fed off one another…

“Make me yours…and I’ll make you mine,” she commanded.

Mark knew a command – and a promise – when he heard one; his thrusts became harder…faster…more pronounced.  Her bucking, naked hips undulated wildly, with all, total abandon.  The stroking…the teasing…the nipping…the gentle biting and nuzzling…the rapid, frantic sucking…the joint singular rhythm…they were losing it now…they were losing it now…they were losing it now…they were losing it nnnoooowwwww



******


They came together – their sonic cry of mutual ecstasy and total satisfaction resonating off the walls and echoing several times in stereo.


“Oh, yeeaaahhh…oh, baaaby…[/i],” Angie panted.

“Feels sooo good…just like you said,” replied Mark.


Was this their destiny, they thought?  Was this who they truly were, now??  Was this their reality??


The atmosphere was so hot, so electric, here in this…nearly empty room??


…well – except for the old, ragged, pivoting mirror swiveling around in a corner…


******


“Do you believe that??” Angie chimed, “Are you freakin’ kidding me??  What the hell??...”

“Truer words were never spoken,” mused Mark.

“I think we were rather nasty demons or some such, love – I, an incubus…you, a succubus.  Which is all probably true, I suppose – I’m really quite sure you succ-ed my inc…

“Oh, come…on…,” Angie retorted, eyes in full roll.

“Yes…I’m pretty certain we did that, too…and really well,” countered Mark…


…and hey – so what if his dick was now somewhat longer and firmer, and her breasts a tad larger and more supple…her ass rounder and that much more spankable??  Who’d really notice??...


******


Then, the lights…and Angie and Mark were off again – for a new adventure.  As they journeyed towards their next destination, they could have sworn they saw three sixes on that upcoming door…

They cleared their heads, best they could…


…No…just the one six…



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In Emma's opinion, the only way to deal with Jason is to give him a cut of the money. That way he'll be happy and no-one will have to die! Judging by the number of pages I have left (77) I predict this won't go smoothly.


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« Reply #45 on: December 09, 2004, 11:32:40 AM »

Amazingly, I was able to write the previous pice in less than 4 hours last night...I, of course, slept none 'cause of it Undecided...but got it and got it typed this early, to boot, copied, pasted, adjusted several times...and finally delivered you all my first tale...it's always the virgin tale that's the hardest on you 8)...isn't it??... Roll Eyes Undecided






...and Myrrh -- as you've freshly returned, revitalized and invigorated...baby...it's you...

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« Reply #46 on: December 09, 2004, 12:14:59 PM »


Good going, guy.   Smiley 

All I ask is that no one tag my until after Christmas. I have this mammoth (for me, anyway) project for the archive I need to get done by then.

---after that, I'm free for a while---

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« Reply #47 on: December 09, 2004, 02:54:13 PM »

Whew, I'm all hot and sweaty after reading about what went on behind door number five.  Good Lord, somebody hand me a lemonade.

I have just one not-so-positive thing to say:

18" cock?  Yikes!

Other than that, BlueLyric, your "first original" was a smashing succubus, er, I mean, success.  And you wrote it in a timely manner.  Truly impressive.

And now, what I've been waiting eons to be able to say with some legitimacy: "I'M IT, baybee!"
-M

PS:  Where'd I put my muse?
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« Reply #48 on: December 09, 2004, 03:08:12 PM »

My Goodness. 

Oh ... perhaps that's the wrong term ... omg ... .

You know I'm not a huge fan of mf writing but I swear, I knew you could write and write well blue ... Omg ... .

Myrrh.  You are going to post all of this to the EMCA when you're done aren't you.  Some excellent work here.
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« Reply #49 on: December 09, 2004, 03:26:01 PM »

Thank you Ducky, Hawai'ian Sunshine... Smiley 8)


Maybe this'll lead to other stuff...but this one strained me out...



The question to pose is:  Is each individual chapter a fit under Simon's per-chapter guidelines??  Or does that only apply for the first chapter??  If so, of course, is it a 1500-worder??  I'm not even sure the length of mine...



...wait...of course I can recall that:


18 inches...
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In Emma's opinion, the only way to deal with Jason is to give him a cut of the money. That way he'll be happy and no-one will have to die! Judging by the number of pages I have left (77) I predict this won't go smoothly.


Quote from: review of The Babysitter II
Conclusion? This book is piss.
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